After having read Strip Fantasy, I could recognize pretty quickly that this was written by the same author. I have to say, I enjoy these types of simple stories and wish there were more out there like it. Although this one started off somewhat slowly, the parts that lead up to the most interesting section, I feel, _add_ to the story as a whole and help build anticipation.
Like I said in my review for Strip Fantasy, I have to drop one star due to the grammar and punctuation issues—the punctuation in particular. (When I say grammar, by the way, I'm obviously not referring to instances when it's skewed purposefully to reflect characters who don't speak English fluently.) In terms of punctuation, after looking more closely, it seems the parts that suffer the most are the quotations; commas are used instead of periods to separate complete sentences, and I found that fairly distracting. Otherwise, for the most part, the background descriptions were done quite well in comparison.
Despite its flaws, this story is pretty enjoyable, and I would recommend it to anyone looking for a simple and sweet story. I admire the details and the amount of effort that was put into the overall content and progression of the story.
(review of free book)