Phantasy

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Story about a disgruntled young man who begins to therapeutically write and in the process, creates a fantasy world where, he ends up creating a monster which seems to be totally indestructible! More

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About Marlowe, Sr

Well, I don't have much to say about myself. I have been writing since my school days (short poems, stories, etc) but never could make it big in the offline world due to competition. Then later on in my life I discovered the awesome world of self-publishing! It took me some time to get back in gear but hey it was worth it, and here I am!

What inspires me to write? Hmm, pretty hard to answer that one! Hmm, maybe the dream of becoming rich and famous one day! :-) Seriously, although I consider myself to be a jack of all trades, I feel that writing is the only thing I can do, and do well, without any restrictions! There is no limit here that I can't cross, no boss whose rules I have to play by!

I am a slow writer and more of a seat-of-the-pants type! One I am done with my book I'd regret about not having a proper plan or method etc., but when I am about to write my next book I am back to square one again. Creature of habit, you can say!

I pretty much want to slip into my characters, put myself in their shoes and think about 'Hey, if it were me instead of him or her, then what would I have done/said in a similar situation?' That apart, because my characters are pretty multi-dimensional, it takes quite a lot of research before I can sketch even ONE character fully!

Although I've been writing for a long time, I wouldn't have been here had it not been for a friend: she really convinced me (I don't think it was her intention but anyway) to join the world of self-publishing. She is a pretty good writer herself (actually I think a better writer than me) and doing well in the publishing world! I mentioned her name in my book Phantasy because it was she who helped me in the arduous task of formatting my book!

For wannabe writers, I have just one thing to tell them 'Write your heart out. Don't give a damn about what people would say about it!' I believe that the future of self-publishing is bright, although not everything about the self-publishing world is as rosy as it looks on the surface. There is quite a struggle and investment involved ahead, if you really want people to read your ebook, that is!

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Review by: Queen of Spades on June 23, 2014 :
I was given this book in exchange for an HONEST review. (Abbreviated review, full review found on The Review Board website)

Warning: Even though this may have slight spoilers, it doesn’t matter because the construction is a hodgepodge of horror.

When it comes to something being out the box, it tends to be something I gravitate towards. One of the main things I look for is something that is original yet entertaining. Although I was not originally assigned to this work, it had a few unorthodox qualities that warranted I at least give it a whirl.

I got whirled all right! Whirled into where I sought alcoholic solace, and I am not even a drinker. Usually I’m the DD (designated driver) while everyone else gets sloshed.

Let’s set the pros out here now because there aren’t many.

• Out of the box attempt
• Glossary at the end of the book

Appearance wise, Phantasy is the most atrocious display of syntax I have ever witnessed. I swear, some of the punctuation was made up. Dashes with ellipses. Exclamation points with ellipses. Commas with ellipses. (You get the point.)

This author has a love affair with ellipses. Almost every sentence had them. In the majority of the cases, a period was needed instead of all of the ellipses. Did periods and commas do something to where this author decided he would swear them off forever? Did he think he could do something experimental and make the reader’s brain work overtime to decipher his Morse code of punctuation?

Punctuation was not the only thing haywire in Phantasy. There was a gross exaggeration of italics and capitalization. Either one is used for the purpose of emphasis and importance. Both used in the same sentence continuously is overkill. The author would do much better just picking certain words or phrases to give spotlight to as opposed to big blocks of caps and italics.

Although the author claims the italics were to separate the narrator’s secret thoughts from spoken thoughts, in many places it caused way too much confusion and the lines between the two became blurred very often—within the same context numerous times. It would have been better to use a different method (utilization of spacing or even a different font) to make this separation clearer.

There were sprinkles of spelling errors in this work. (fully pointed out in the full review on The Review Board)

All of the major characters in this work I hated because they were annoying and they didn’t have proper names (which I’ll speak on later). None of the characters exhibited any growth in one way or another. The narrator’s Mom (aka Connoisseur of Complaints and Chaos) stayed cranky and argumentative without any real glimpse as to why she’s cranky and argumentative. The narrator’s Dad (aka Balls Serrated After Wedding Vows) stayed passive aggressive without any motion to rise to get out of his situation.

Dick (the name I opted to give the narrator because his lack of name irked me) shows no admittance, apologies or advancement in any aspect to his approach to anything or anybody. He demonstrates a total detachment from his own reality. His lunacy damn near drove me to want to get drunk.

In most writes, the main characters in the work have names. In Phatasy, the ones that have proper names are the supplemental characters who play little to no role besides someone for the narrator to spar back and forth with. Even if they are talking to each other, not once is the narrator referred to by his actual name.

The reason why the absence of proper names bothers me is because it is an indicator as to how well one can keep up with the dialogue. This is particularly helpful when the author switches from screenplay style to when the main character is working on the manuscript for Phantasy. In the manuscript itself, my brain almost hurt as I had to re-read certain lines over again to ensure which character was saying which thing.

It would have been easier for the author just to make a decision on whether to write this as a full novel or write this as a full screenplay. If he wanted to do a hybrid, then he should have ascertained the reader’s visual capacity at it pertained to proper (as opposed to imaginary) methods of syntax as well as sufficient white spacing in this work.

With its current anatomy, there is absolutely no unity in any of the thoughts. Not just with the dialogue but also in the actual manuscript Dick (the narrator) is composing. A pregnant ghost and an archangel are brought up but one has no clue as to what occurs with them next. There’s also an unexplained time warp and conflict thrown in the story that mimics B grade movies.

Summary of Suggested Improvements:

Less is More: One can use emphasis without going overboard. Tone down on capitalization, italics, exclamation points, dashes and ellipses.

Use punctuation properly: In way too many parts of the book ellipses, exclamation points, commas and dashes were used when periods would have done the trick.

More balance with setting vs. dialogue: There was not enough detail in the settings to counteract the over surge of dialogue.

Show rather than tell: There was no set plot and too much dependence on the narrator’s thoughts and feelings. This made it hard to get into the book. Even being out the box has levels of methodology to the madness.

Firmness in flashbacks: Either have an adjoining thread to the flashbacks or cut down on them, particularly the flashbacks within flashbacks.

Page count decrease: Due to so many different elements being present in this work, perhaps dividing it up into miniseries would have gone smoother. One segment: being about the narrator’s work and how he lost his first job. The second segment could focus on his conflict with his family. There’s just way too much going on to cover in just one book.

Name the central character: It provides (1) importance and (2) ease of tracking.

Provide a resolution: No part of Phantasy (the screenplay segments or the manuscript segments) gave any conclusion to anything. Think guy walking around with his fly open but no one ever telling him about it. As long as this work is (well over 200 pages) it was still full of the spunk of incompleteness.

Inserting slang terminology into glossary: There’s a word Dick (the narrator) has constantly used in the work, the word “hawker”. Yet in the glossary section, everything else gets a definition instead of that one and the dialogue provides no clear context clues to decipher the meaning.

Revamping of the Author’s Note: It is not a good move to alienate a potential reader just before he/she reads your work (i.e. “…only people with brains should read it”). Helpful disclaimer is one thing: hurling insults before turning the page to the first chapter is another.

Unleashed Verdict: 1 out of 5

I cannot recommend this read for all of the things mentioned earlier. Yet if you want tirades of complaining and randomness tossed together, you may see some beauty in this. Right now, I just want to fantasize that I didn’t read this and write a story about not reading this.
(reviewed 7 months after purchase)
Review by: Darlene Suber on June 2, 2014 :
I received a ARC e-book smashword 's from the in exchange for an honest review. This is my honest review of " Phantasy" . First let me say this, I read this book several months ago , but I never did write this review like I thought I did. So for that I am truly sorry.
Now, let me say this - as this author states- You have to step out of your christian or anti-christian shoes to read this book. You have to read this book with a truly open mind. If you don't then you will not understand at all what he is trying to get a cross.
This story is about a a young man, an older man , and shrink. Or so you are led to believed. You will read about the interviews between the young man and and his shrink as he is trying to get him to realize that he murder his father but also that the old man that he is talking to in the hospital is actually himself.
We all talk to our selves one way or another, an some of us even have brake downs. This book has alot of depth in it , soul and so much more. I give it a 5 rating and personal recommend it for all to read.
(reviewed 4 months after purchase)
Review by: Michael Taboada on May 16, 2014 :
First I must say I was given a free review copy of this book in return for my honest opinion, so here goes.

Also, I must admit I didn't quite get half way through the book until I had to put it down. The reasons are below.

The first reason is that the story, to me, seemed to be one big argument. The people were constantly bickering, he bickered in his head, that seemed to be the focus of the book. I expected there would be alot about the world he created (and maybe there would be in the later chapters of the book) but there wasn't in the first half or so, and that was the biggest attraction for me.

Also, there was an amazing amount of ellipses, and exclamation marks. And when I say an amazing amount of them I mean probably 19 in every 20 sentences (if not more) ended with them. In my opinion as an author and reader, that is not good.

The good I can find is that the author does a moderately good job at developing the characters, and definitely has them have goals, etc.

However, on the whole, I cannot recommend this book.
(reviewed the day of purchase)
Review by: Lovehymn on March 31, 2014 : (no rating)
I've got a free ARC in exchange for a review.

Okay, first things are first..
I LOVE HOW IT'S WRITTEN!
it's the first time for me to read something written in this style, it was weird in the start, it took me quiet few pages to get used to it, but it was so much fun reading this!

What I loved: the idea is SO unique! I also loved how real the main characters were, sometimes i actually related to him, and it was actually fun to know I'm not the only whiny-baby on the planet :D

What I didn't like: also the main character LOL sometimes he was too dumb! Like, it was in front of his eyes, but he always chose to cry it out and curse the whole universe :D The book was kinda slow sometimes.

Overall: It was such a new experience for me, and I'm really grateful for giving me the chance to read it :)
(reviewed 20 days after purchase)
Review by: melissa pollard on Feb. 26, 2014 :
I was given this book in exchange for an honest review.

I found this book was a little rough at the beginning. I couldn't get into it, but once I did it was an ok story. I found it still a little confusing in areas but for the most part it was an easy read. If you don't follow along in books that are written in form of a play/journal then this would not be for you. But if you give this book a chance don't give up on it - the more you read the more you like it.
(reviewed 40 days after purchase)
Review by: april reynolds on Jan. 19, 2014 :
This book was confusing from the get go. I never understood anything other than some kid ranting about how bad his life was. Whom ever proofread this book needs to be fired there are so many typos it was unreal and if they were not typos well you get the gist of it. I do not like giving bad reviews so I will say maybe somewhere I missed something!
(reviewed 64 days after purchase)
Review by: Dormaine G on Dec. 15, 2013 :
First I want to say I received a free copy of this this book for an honest review.

Normally this book is not one I would read but there is nothing wrong with stepping outside your comfort zone of normalcy.

At first it took me a minute to pick up on the flow of the book but as I continued to read, the flow and technique became apparent. I was a little annoyed with the main character and his lack of taking ownership of his actions. I like a character that takes charge or is somewhat aggressive but that is all right because it's just a different personality type from what I like. That does not meant the book was not an interesting read.

I could appreciate the fact that the character was able to express, vent or release his emotions through fantasy which I felt was quite imaginative. We all daydream or fantasize, maybe both, but that made it possible for me to relate to the character. Plus, when you throw in Science fiction, I am there.

I would definitely recommend it and look forward to more books my Marlowe, Sr.
(reviewed 23 days after purchase)
Review by: Ericka Greer on Dec. 11, 2013 :
(I was given this free ebook in exchange for an honest review from the author)

This book is different from what I normally read but that is ok because I have no problem branching out with a different approach to other genres. When I first started reading this book I was a little hesitant at first because of how it started off. To me it was written out like a screen play or a journal entry. At first can be somewhat confusing with the going back and forth to "then" and now" but once you keep reading it is easy to understand.


I did feel bad for the guy because basically his life just sucked. He got fired from his job, lost his girlfriend, and his home life isn't great either. He writes to vent out his problems. I like that he does that because as the reader that is something that a lot of people can relate to as they are reading the book. I know I can. Another thing that I liked about the book is that he takes refuge in a world of his fantasies. Sometimes you just need that escape and I fully understand that.

Overall this was good and I did enjoy reading it.I loved that I can relate to this book and the character because I take refuge in reading which is my escapism. I would recommend this book and I look forward to reading more from this author.

Rating: 4Stars

Recommend? Yes
(reviewed 20 days after purchase)
Review by: Jeannie Walker on Dec. 6, 2013 :
At some times or another in our lives, I believe we have all had to battle anger. The main character in this different kind of novel has a problem dealing with anger. However, reading this novel could help a person deal somewhat with our own unenthusiastic issues and distractions. For I believe all of us have been unhappy at some point in our lives, and I know that negative emotions can drain us of energy and ambition.
Time is too short to be pessimistic and have a defeatist attitude, which is why I do everything I can to keep a positive, optimistic and supportive attitude. We can't be cheerful all the time but it won't break our face to crack a smile.
If and when you get a chance to read this fascinating adventure it might help you find an outlet to happiness, if you feel you need one.
Personally, I like a story that is written in the first person and really liked it that this one had a glossary to help readers understand terms we might not otherwise understand.
"Phantasy" contains some explicit language and overtones you might not agree with, so I suggest you keep an open mind while reading it. That being said, I believe the novel is creative and could peak your curiosity, and who isn't a little curious?
(reviewed 16 days after purchase)
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