This is a pretty good story, about a cursed house, missing people, and a mysterious darkness, that comes complete with a twisty horror-film-style ending, and is worth ten minutes of your time.
Jeff, the story, structure, character, pace and really everything technical to do with narrative are all good things here. But I get the impression that you're hurrying through the writing; don't get me wrong there are some great turns of phrase here, I was impressed on a few occasions by the style and choice of words ["Morning, like Autumn, had come too early." for example]. The story as a whole just needs a general health check-up; add a comma here, spellcheck-there, a few Capitalizations on names, that kind of thing, just a little edit to make it shine. But, just one thing, if nothing else, you're still using the word "defiantly" [as in, with defiance], when you mean "definitely" [as in, for sure], and when I was reading your intriguing and mysterious storyline, these mis-words threw me out of the story.
Generally, this is great stuff Jeff, keep it up, but go over your stories with a spit and polish to make them gleam.
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