Tragic, poignant, well-told...what there is of it. I feel badly for the author, but he left me disappointed in the end - far too many questions and loose ends left unresolved. I would encourage Laxton to finish the story - I think he needs to for himself and his readers. This could be a very powerful story of fraternal love and loss.
One minor point about the techniques. When addressing a person by name, always put a comma between whatever it is you're saying and the person's name or title. For example, "What do you mean, Bill? Jim, is the salsa hot enough for you?" As I said, relatively minor, but nonetheless important.
David H. Keith
(review of free book)