A great gripping story, interesting characters with amusing interplay. Some very good dialog.
However... Seriously let down by the lack of or poor editing. Many many errors! Wrong words ('loose' instead of 'lose' probably the most common, 'worst' instead of 'worse', 'too' instead of 'to'), mixed tense in the one sentence, wrong verb form, wrong tense etc etc. (e.g 'lets met up with the others' [lets meet], 'I learn a few things this week-end' [I learned/learn], 'she bitted her lips' [she bit], 'Came Monday she tried' [Come Monday]... 'Dead found them' [Death found them], 'Blood thicken by the heat' [thickened by], 'You get to met the' [get to meet] etc etc
Properly cleaned up it would make a really good book.
(review of free book)