The tale was good. the writing was above average, for somebody still gaining experience.
I found no problems with the wording.
Was most satisfied till the end.
The biggest disappointment was the glaring impossibility of a villain smuggling in assassination gear in the last part of the book. As if government security wouldn't be executing random sweeps and molecular level searches for anybody in close proximity to an interstellar president... Jeez. And as if anybody wouldn't be seeking to pull down/compete/blab/dob in the same villain for not performing well in her earlier career as some form of subversion. And how implanted tech is circumnavigated in the murder. Like the victim has time to verbally react but computers operating at picosecond levels can't.... And implanted communication tech still has to explain how radiation doen't affect the host. And if its some form of quantam/FTL comms, then jamming it also is a big ask.
(review of free book)