on June 30, 2012 :
Interesting novella of the downward spiral of a middle aged man who has done the right thing all his life and ends up with nothing, that is until he finds a purpose. Not a bad story, couple of editing flaws that don't really detract, just made me have to reread the sentence context but wasn't a bad way to spend an hour in the sun.
(reviewed 11 months after purchase)
on Dec. 31, 2011 :
Truly, the American Nightmare.
Bob is in his 50’s, worked hard, put everyone’s needs above his own, never said no.
Take it all away. His wife divorced him and limited his visitations to his children and his boss fired not only him, but everyone else in his company since it is being outsourced.
Bob finally snapped. A dark side emerged with rage, fury and a primal need for revenge in disturbing ways. Bob feels no guilt with the killing of others.
While the book could be written a bit better and some grammatical errors need to be corrected, it is a haunting story of how the mind can only handle so much.
(reviewed 5 months after purchase)
on Nov. 14, 2011 :
Sorry, this was not my type of book. It rambled on, too many words to say the same thing. A man loses his job and goes on a killing spree. It woud have been more interesting if maybe someone got loose or the police got wise or something. He more less gets away with murder.
(reviewed 84 days after purchase)
on Oct. 9, 2011 :
The idea of Bob the serial killer, a man driven to extremes by circumstances – his abusive wife divorcing him and taking his four children away, his entire department being out-sourced and him losing his job after 22 years – who starts killing people was an interesting one, and I had hoped I would enjoy the story. While there were parts I liked OK, most of it was incoherent, rambling and redundant – the author is in desperate need of a copy and content editor, and critique group, to help him fix this mess. I started reading the sequel, “The Retreat,” and came across this sentence, which is a great example of the sort of sentences you can expect in these books: “Bob drove back and forth past his house a few times and slowly calmed down. But he was now furious and while he could quell his emotions, his mind had walked over to the dark side and functioning from there.” I have decided not to finish the sequel and unfortunately I am unable to recommend these books.
(reviewed 69 days after purchase)
on Sep. 23, 2011 :
Not worth the time... initially sounded like a good book but was not at all like the book could have turned out to be. Some good ideas, but a little too far with the grotesque meat pies (grounded up butchered people) Bob the main character has went off the deep end, kills and then eats his victims by making meat pies and also serves them too unsuspecting neighbor and friend. Really was awful read!
(reviewed 32 days after purchase)
on Sep. 16, 2011 :
The book was well put together but the amount of blood and gore kind of made it overpowering and too much.
(reviewed 28 days after purchase)
on Sep. 10, 2011 :
I was given a complimentary copy for review. The premise itself is quite good. Mild mannered Bob loses his job and goes on a killing spree. The author did have some good ideas.
(reviewed 23 days after purchase)
on Sep. 9, 2011 :
Okay, I have to be honest here. I thought this story sounded good and I really liked the premise. Unfortunately, the poor editing made it impossible for me to finish the story. Too bad, because it has a lot of promise.
(reviewed 21 days after purchase)
on Sep. 8, 2011 :
The premise of the book has a Dexterish promise so I was initially interested. This novella is not Dexter but I found it to be worth reading. I could empathize with the main character but not agree with his psychotic response to his situation.
The writing style needs polishing and some editing. However, the longish short story kept me reading to the end. The ending is open for a sequel but please, don't write it. I was intrigued enough to read the story given the length. I could not/would not read the full length novel of this story.
If you like the horror genre, this would be a worthwhile read and it is worth $0.99. Buy this novella and help support T.K. Murphy. I think this author has promise.
I gave it 3.0 stars but would have given 3.5 if that option was available.
(reviewed 20 days after purchase)
on Aug. 29, 2011 :
The premise of the story was interesting. However the poor writing really made this book an "American Nightmare". I felt like I was reading the same thing over and over. It could have been shorter considering how many times the "back story" on the main character was repeated. I found myself saying "okay! I get that this guy is really psychotic, and full of deep seated rage. I get it already! " That one thing in particular really killed the book because the "backstory" and descriptions of the main character kept reappearing and most of the time it was unnecessary and completely out of place. Basically it came across like the author was trying to meet a page quota. I was really rooting for this book because I don't like discouraging anyone's dream. I think if some editing and revisions were made this could be a good short story.
(reviewed 10 days after purchase)
on Aug. 20, 2011 :
I hate giving books a low rating. I do appreciate the effort of putting your work out there but sometimes, a book comes along that is just so bad that I couldn’t even finish it.
Unfortunately, this is one of them. It’s a mere 59 pages on Adobe Digital Editions but I wanted to give up right around page 15. The premise of the story is pretty interesting. An average nice guy has been living the American dream of a good job and a family until his wife filed for divorce four years ago. Then he got laid off at his job of 32 years. Being 52 years old, he wasn’t eligible for retirement yet… basically, everything falls apart around him. Then he snaps. Based on the cover art, he goes all Dexter on the people around him. Great, I love Dexter. This should be good.
But it’s not. It’s really not. The writing wasn’t good. It’s choppy and inconsistent and redundant. And most of all, it was BORING. There was pages upon pages of description and back story to introduce the main character, Bob, but it was so boring and cliche, I didn’t care much for him. Everyone’s an alcoholic, Bob’s a doormat… I don’t think a page went by without a retelling of those two things. And the formatting problems. Oh my, is it too much to ask for dialog paragraph breaks? Huge chunks of text with 2-3 people talking in them. I salute self-published authors but come on… a little editing goes a very long way.
I should stop now, really. I feel bad bashing a book but I just did not like any part of this.
Rating: 1/5. Purely for effort.
(reviewed the day of purchase)