A good story with some refreshingly original ideas. The character and dialogue are achieved well enough, but I thought it was lacking in sufficient description, particularly with regard to the various settings. For instance, the first scene starts off and apart from Rachel drinking vodka, the kids drinking milkshakes and Richie standing by his jaguar surrounded by some fans, we're told NOTHING about where this scene is supposed to be taking place.
Then there's Rachel's house. Well, there's a table in the kitchen, a 'main room' with a TV and DVD, and somewhere in the house there's a bed too, but again that's about all we're told. Is this a big house or a small one? Clean or untidy? Old or modern? Is it in a city, a small village or is it an isolated cottage? A person's home reveals a lot about their character, so big opportunities to expand on Rachel were missed there, but more than that it is simply unacceptable for a writer to expect the reader to create their own canvas. It's a shame, because the descriptions which were present in the story (mainly confined to Richie's looks or Rachel's body) were generally written well.
(review of free book)