The Ritual

Rated 2.00/5 based on 2 reviews
Step into your high heels and listen to astronaut Charlie Brick confess his sins in this supernatural tragedy.

A complete Novella, no part-two or cliffhanger ending. You can read this for free and know that you will see the whole story. More
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Review by: Jay Royston on Oct. 11, 2015 :
Hey Thad; First, thanks for reading/reviewing Stoner - I had no way to get in touch with you but through reviewing your work.
But first - after reading your review i downloaded Stoner and did a spellcheck on it - there were no spelling errors so I think because I'm Canadian and we spell a few things differently (colour, humour, etc) that may have been what you were noticing.
I have no doubt there are grammatical errors but I hope most of them are in the dialogue bits, as it was meant to be an extension of the characters' education/upbringing.

But on to the Ritual - Honestly, the formatting was all over the place (i read the pdf). Lots of paragraph breaks in the middle of sentences and it should have an extra space between paragraphs for easier reading. Basically, it needs another proof read and trim. One line in Part 1 ends with '...had vanished behind the us.'

Personally, you have a lot of extra adjectives, scenes (the elevator) and descriptions that I don't think lend anything to the main story of this guy going to Sedalia for his grad reunion which I take it to be your A story.

Being Canadian, I have to say sorry that it is not more positive. Anyways, thanks for the review.
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Review by: James Jenkins on July 23, 2015 :
I read about 6%, the story did not engage me and I put it down.
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