While browsing through some of the erotic tales going for free, I asked myself, "How bad could one of these be?" One look at the title, and the blurb let me know immediately that I would be in for a treat. (HINTHINT, YOU SPELL 'SOMETIMES' WITHOUT AN APOSTROPHE.)
Right from the get go, I could tell that the author didn't care at all about what she was writing. The descriptions for everything were told from a disinterested onlooking standpoint rather than feeling like they were from the first person and making any sort of attempt to blend into each other. Starting almost every sentence in a paragraph with "she" indicates that something is wrong and only makes the writing come off as more and more stilted as the story goes on.
The dialogue, magically considering there's very little, comes off as awkward and makes me feel like I'm reading a cheap porno instead of an erotica that doesn't have to rely on the actors' talents to work off each other for convincing conversation.
Needless to say, it was also obvious that the writer was a woman and had never given a single thought to how getting a blowjob would actually /feel/ but rather knew how one looks. "Girl takes dick into mouth, sucky sucky, and he comes in her mouth," no emotion, no hint that the person receiving the BJ is on any sort of pleasure.
But hey, most people don't have as high standards as I do, so maybe you'll like it anyway. For me though? Glad it was free.
(review of free book)