Forever and Ever
By Winfield Ly
Rated 2.00/5 based
on 1 reviews
Nina and Mina are twin sisters that both have feelings for their childhood friend, Ken. From the beginning, Mina and Ken were instantly attracted, leaving Nina as the third wheel. With love for her sister flowing strong, Nina decides to hide her feelings. But after an unfortunate incident that will forever change the friendship between the three friends, will Nina accept her feelings to move on?
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- Category: Fiction » Romance » Short stories
- Published: Jan. 7, 2016
- Words: 12,060
- Language: English
- ISBN: 9781311745026
About Winfield Ly
Winfield Ly is an aspiring writer who lives in Mississauga, Ontario. He has recently graduated from the University of Guelph with a Honours B.Sc in Biochemistry. Winfield has received an Honourable Mention in an online magazine, In The Snake, for the flash fiction contest, Autumn 2011 Snake Prize.
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Bege
reviewed
on Jan. 11, 2016
This story seems aimed at youngish teenagers. It is a tale of love and loss and resolution.
There are illogical parts, as pointed out by hrhsophia, but younger readers would probably not notice them.
There are very many similar stories aimed at teenagers, and for this one to be recommended, editing should have been done by someone more proficient in English.
New readers need to be immersed in correct language, for it to become automatic. The better their language skills, the better chances they have of getting on in life, be it in school or later employment.
Some passages in this tale could pass as colourful writing (..pulled her legs up onto the chair and covered her face in them..) Others were a bit less charming (...didn't say anything with betrayed eyes...) And then others just jarred (..What do you got to lose?..)
I give this 2 stars as there there is promise of a good writer emerging.
(review of free book)
hrhsophia
reviewed
on Jan. 7, 2016
(no rating)
Then timeline here does not make a lot of sense, it seems several years are going by but unless the story started when they were all toddlers no one grew up or maybe school lasts 20 years.
Then timeline here does not make a lot of sense, it seems several years are going by but unless the story started when they were all toddlers no one grew up or maybe school lasts 20 years.
(review of free book)