on May 24, 2011 :
I have not finished reading this book, but already I am impressed with the author's ability to create a detailed culture and environment. Her words make the setting and the action totally come alive.
I would like to see some serious editing done to this book and, indeed, maybe the reason the book is free is that the author does not consider it finished. Maybe? Here are some examples of what I mean.
The book is full of inconsistent sentence structure (extremely frequent mixed tenses) and punctuation errors. Occasionally, sentences and wording is repeated, nearly verbatim, as if the author forgot she had already said that earlier in the book. Some sentence structure is awkward and could easily be improved. There are occasional spelling errors (eg, "curtiously" should be "courteously" and "it's" should be "its" when it is a possessive pronoun. When spelled "it's", it is a contraction for "it is"). These are just some examples.
Also, I am confused by the epilogue. Or maybe the last several lines are not meant to be part of the epilogue? Not sure, and I have no idea what their purpose is.
This book is more than worth the time and effort it would take to clean up the problems; the world it creates is so detailed and complete. In that regard it is simply excellent, in my opinion.
(review of free book)