on Aug. 26, 2017 :
I'm not religious, but I can still enjoy stories in this genre if they're written well enough. This story is certainly better technically than many that you will find. It was edited well and is easy to read. I've seen a lot of Christian fiction that is so riddled with errors that it's unreadable.
However, the characters have a stiff and formal manner of speaking, which is shockingly common in the genre. They don't feel like modern characters. Dot is an odd name for a modern young woman as well, and that's just a minor detail.
Dot's weight loss story background also severely dates the story and poisons it severely. There's a generational divide forming between Baby Boomers and Generation Xers and younger people about weight issues, I've noticed.
A lot of people in older generations just take it for granted that people want to have to read yet another story where a character has a weight loss oriented backstory.
Dot's story replicates the usual failing diet industry narrative where she was so awkward and unloved before, where she was obviously just ignorant of healthy eating and exercise before and had to 'learn' how to do everything right, and where it's completely reasonable for her to obsessively control portions and be fixated on food now.
The writer is completely ignorant of everything to do with weight. 165 pounds is a low weight for most people. Even for a fourteen-year-old girl, it wouldn't be that high. Girls like that are common in high schools today, and they're treated as normal. Popular girls often look like that.
The idea that everyone in high school is thin except for a couple of marginalized outcasts is outdated and no longer reflects reality. It may have been true for Baby Boomers. For younger generations, it's a dark relic from another time.
Giving a character a backstory like this is also no longer acceptable. The bar has shifted. Writers can no longer get away with certain plot lines and backstories, and this is one of them. LGBT narratives have completely changed over the years. Weight narratives are starting to change now.
Since Dot's weight-related backstory keeps coming up in the story, it gets very frustrating to read very quickly. It's enough to hurt the whole thing. It certainly hurts the story's general clean and wholesome image. Clean and wholesome and full of hatred towards 'fat' people!
I want more clean and wholesome romance, but it takes someone without bigotry to write that.
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on Aug. 16, 2017 :
Ooooh,Paula,what a beautiful book this is.....Iam Catholic and I most definetly enjoyed seeing my Faith in action.....I cried as I fell more in love with my faith,took even my rosary at 3 p.m.......thank you for infusing the Faith in such a great story......its a book I recommend to all Christians,especially those who would love to understand something deeper about the Catholic faith....Paula foes it soo well,as you get immersed in this beautiful romance read....Looking forward to more of your work.....
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