Title – Carnal Prey
Author – Warren Ashton
Genre – Mystery, Suspense, Thriller, Serial Killer
270 Amazon Pages
Rating 4 stars out of 5 Posted 5/17/17
No. 30- 2017
My impressions: serial killer, personal issues, daunting task, haunting personal fear, alcoholism, escapism.
Dillon Haywood – age 48, Head of forensics at Omaha NB. Has a personal fear of finding his only daughter dead on the streets.
Captain Angela Marconi – hardnosed, no nonsense cop, head of homicide.
Bradley Eric Neilson, unskilled laborer, pathetic serial killer.
Carnal Prey is well told but not well written. The first twenty five percent of the story is slow and almost entirely narrative. The story centers around Dillon Haywood’s mental anguish caused by his personal issues as he chases after a cruel serial killer. His off the job relationship with his boss is all that keeps him from having a mental breakdown. As the body count rises Dillon accepts his self-imposed blame for the killer not being caught although his team and the taskforce are following every sparse lead they uncover. In his mind, his rebellious missing daughter could be the next victim claimed by the serial killer.
There are simple formatting issues plus the editing is very poor. There are missing, misspelled, extra and wrong words used plus gross misuse of quotation marks.
Line breaks are needed between scene changes, but sentence structure is okay.
Details are adequate and character development is good for Dillon but sparse for Angela.
The plot is excellent but the writing style is hurt by an inordinate amount of editing errors.
For those turned off by gross details be aware there is a detailed, graphic description of an autopsy.
Cursing is minor and not an issue unless the reader is easily offended.
Based on the excellent plot I recommend this story if the reader is not turned off by the abundance of poor editing.
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(reviewed 3 days after purchase)