I'll be honest; this wasn't the story I was expecting and it may well be suffering by half a star to a star because of it. The protagonist, Mira, isn't allowed to find out things that the readers get to find out and isn't allowed to change the world she's in. So as the fluffy short story I was wanting... It disappointed.
As a Twilight Zone experience? It's perfect. It sets up a world, it sets up some spooky contradictions, and then it rips the rug out from under everything, leaving the *reader* viewing everything differently. Read it in that mindset, of not-quite-horror-but-disquieting, and you'll probably find it pretty darn enjoyable.
Typos/Grammar issues: Minimal. I think I found one or two awkward bits that stood out, but I find those in everything because I'm a pedant. Fellow pedants should breathe relatively easy on that front.
(reviewed 4 months after purchase)