I read this story twice. There are at least four POVs presented in under 1,800 words. To be honest, trying to understand what's going on is not the easiest thing to do with all these POV shifts. At the end of reading it, I get the sense that the author is trying to do too much in too few words. I was hoping for more depth to the characters, but they all seem to be stuck in their own little world.
(review of free book)