The Assassins' Guild of Obseen: Vision of a Torn Land

Rated 2.75/5 based on 4 reviews
Welcome to Obseen, a planet of assassins. It has been thrust into a war with a Royal-assassin, a man once believed to be an ally but discovered to have more ambitious desires.Twelve years he has reigned over the Assassins' Guild, with much bloodshed and terror in his rule. Now, the rebels' hopes rest in twelve youths trained in secret to take down the Emperor and restore the Guild to its glory. More
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About Lindsey Cowherd

Lindsey Cowherd lives in Salida, CO, where she was born and raised. She lives with her sweetie, Michael, who somehow tolerates her horse-craziness and love of all-things-Asian.

Licensed as an acupuncturist since 2010, Lindsey still finds time for the small stuff: writing, watching almost anything Asian on Netflix, singing and playing guitar, but especially enjoying her two horses, Bricco and Tyrra, and two dogs, Ms. K and Huffington.

She started writing “novels” at a young teen; the Assassins' Guild books being among the first she ever thought up that was beyond her normal obsession of horses. Turning to a world immersed in martial arts, magic, and “places not of this world” allowed her an outlet from everyday living and circumstances out of her control. Now, they are a place to allow her imagination to run wild. In 2019, Lindsey delved into the genre of cowboy romances and found she liked it just as much. With so many possibilities it keeps her worlds alive and growing.

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About the Series: Assassins' Guild of Obseen
Welcome to Obseen, planet of the Assassins. The current years (from the books) is from 4012 S.D--4027+S.D. The Assassins' Guild of Obseen have gone through their fifth war (prequel:Vision of a Torn Land, last year of the war) and are in post-war construction. This series follows the young assassins youths that have been influenced by a world at war and are searching for their own paths in the world.

Series background: The Year was 1921 Star Date (S.D.)
People have left the dirty, war-torn Earth in search of a new life on a handful of newly discovered planets past Neptune. Eight were found: New Earth, Planet X, the Sentinals (1,2, and 3), O’washia, Al Tor, and Obseen… A new government called the Unified Earth Forces took control of New Earth; its government declared its control over other planets. O’washia and the Sentinals were eventually able to attain their freedom from the UEF; Planet X, abandoned by the New Earth government was given over to the control of kings and queens, so that the Royals could keep an eye on Obseen, the planet turned into a prison-planet for the unruly assassins cloistered by the UEF; Al Tor became the other prison planet; a place for the "crazies".

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Reviews of The Assassins' Guild of Obseen: Vision of a Torn Land by Lindsey Cowherd

bigo4015 reviewed on April 4, 2021

Good idea but bad execution. If only she had had someone who understood the English language- proofread the story it might have mitigated many negative reviews. I hope her other books get better.
(reviewed 28 days after purchase)
Edward Collins reviewed on Feb. 24, 2021

Just getting by the spelling / tense problems was a chore. Could have been such a good book based on its original premise.
(reviewed 8 days after purchase)
Richard Forbes reviewed on Dec. 4, 2020

Unfortunately, this book just does not deliver and was a significant disappointment. To be honest, the struggle to even finish this book was staggering - I foolishly hoped it would get better but alas, it only got worse.

Pros:
1) The premise is excellent, a "fantasy" type story set in a Sci-Fi world with a young female kick-ass protagonist with unparalleled combat training.
2) The author has spent a long time thinking through and creating a detailed world to set the story in.

However, it just doesn't work.

Cons:
1) The book is absolutely riddled with spelling, syntax and grammatical errors – Is this a first draft? Did ANYONE proof read this?.
2) The book is just way too long – easily 1/3 to 1/2 could be cut without compromising the story integrity.
3) Nearly all of the dialogue between characters is annoyingly endless inane trite dribble. Warriors, Masters & Leaders do not speak (nor act) this way.
4) There is way too many weird names for things (people, places, weapons, races, foods, drinks, you name it). This doesn't add value as it is way; way too much and the confusion detracts from the reading enjoyment.
5) There is far too much dialogue in made up languages that then is followed by a translation - this slows the pace of the story and is immensely annoying.
6) There is lots of combat sequences which should be cool but they are so totally unrealistic it is truly annoying (blade fights that last hours - really???). Also, "the bad" guys fight intelligently and have access to laser weapons but all the good guys are using blades (think Samurai/Ninja) and usually are more concerned with fighting to preserve their honour then actually survive???
7) Too many of the characters, particularly the main protagonists, are just plain idiotic in their decision making and actions. One scene they act intelligently, then the next few plot points they do incredibly stupid life endangering things. Just not believable.
8) The good guys are all “Assassins” yet none of them are prepared to kill anyone. Does the author know what the word means? If she is so hell-bent on honourable good guys, while did she call them “assassins” and base them on Ninja’s?
9) The main protagonist (the afore mentioned young female kick-ass character) gets into a "to the death" duel with the ruler of the planet and again, fights stupidly (despite the bad guy fighting dirty) even though her life and the balance of the planet rest on her winning. Instead of killing the head bad guy, she repeatedly only superficially wounds him over a period of many hours whilst the planet is at war and all her side are dying waiting for the guy to be killed. How stupid can you be???
10) Most annoying plot point? The worst bad guys to survive are all set free but the lead character? She saves the planet but is then punished due to the accidental breaking of stupid “clan” trite rules so was ordered to do?????

Yeah, this book leaves the reader feeling angry and cheated…….could have been a great story…………….
(reviewed 26 days after purchase)
Richard Forbes reviewed on Dec. 4, 2020
(no rating)
Unfortunately, this book just does not deliver and was a significant disappointment. To be honest, the struggle to even finish this book was staggering - I foolishly hoped it would get better but alas, it only got worse.

Pros:
1) The premise is excellent, a "fantasy" type story set in a Sci-Fi world with a young female kick-ass protagonist with unparalleled combat training.
2) The author has spent a long time thinking through and creating a detailed world to set the story in.

However, it just doesn't work.

Cons:
1) The book is absolutely riddled with spelling, syntax and grammatical errors – Is this a first draft? Did ANYONE proof read this?.
2) The book is just way too long – easily 1/3 to 1/2 could be cut without compromising the story integrity.
3) Nearly all of the dialogue between characters is annoyingly endless inane trite dribble. Warriors, Masters & Leaders do not speak (nor act) this way.
4) There is way too many weird names for things (people, places, weapons, races, foods, drinks, you name it). This doesn't add value as it is way; way too much and the confusion detracts from the reading enjoyment.
5) There is far too much dialogue in made up languages that then is followed by a translation - this slows the pace of the story and is immensely annoying.
6) There is lots of combat sequences which should be cool but they are so totally unrealistic it is truly annoying (blade fights that last hours - really???). Also, "the bad" guys fight intelligently and have access to laser weapons but all the good guys are using blades (think Samurai/Ninja) and usually are more concerned with fighting to preserve their honour then actually survive???
7) Too many of the characters, particularly the main protagonists, are just plain idiotic in their decision making and actions. One scene they act intelligently, then the next few plot points they do incredibly stupid life endangering things. Just not believable.
8) The good guys are all “Assassins” yet none of them are prepared to kill anyone. Does the author know what the word means? If she is so hell-bent on honourable good guys, while did she call them “assassins” and base them on Ninja’s?
9) The main protagonist (the afore mentioned young female kick-ass character) gets into a "to the death" duel with the ruler of the planet and again, fights stupidly (despite the bad guy fighting dirty) even though her life and the balance of the planet rest on her winning. Instead of killing the head bad guy, she repeatedly only superficially wounds him over a period of many hours whilst the planet is at war and all her side are dying waiting for the guy to be killed. How stupid can you be???
10) Most annoying plot point? The worst bad guys to survive are all set free but the lead character? She saves the planet but is then punished due to the accidental breaking of stupid “clan” trite rules so was ordered to do?????

Yeah, this book leaves the reader feeling angry and cheated…….could have been a great story…………….
(reviewed 26 days after purchase)
GMSorceressRose reviewed on May 2, 2020

Another great book from this author. I love the sci-fi aspect. That really drew me into the story and engaged my imagination. Another great female lead character, so it will be fun to see how she and the other characters develop in the future. Once again, the fight scenes were actually quite fun to read. The author likes details that paint a rich picture, and the book has a good pace.
(reviewed the day of purchase)

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