Not bad....as a woman myself, I can relate to the character. Aging is a fear, for us women, it can be devestating.
My only complaint: I think the author may have written the story to quickly.Great ending,yet I think she may have jumped to quickly from scene to scene..play it out a little more before getting to the ending. Such as a little more detail ....play out the annoyances a bit more, add a few more,make each next one more annoying that the other, then BLAM! :0) Hope this helped more than confused? :0) Other than that well done!
4 stars for grammer
4 stars for character relation/connection
3 stars for story substance
If this is your 1st, wonderfully done. I encourage you to write more...perhaps after a few you can combine them into a book. Get more gory, I think you would be suprised how really psyco you could get with your characters freakouts and write some really great thrillers....I am not a professional, but I love to help fellow Indie authors with reviews. Remember this, if it sucked,I would't review(not into bashing) so you have a great start here. Write more, I would love to read them and thanks for sharing! AD
(review of free book)