My name is Andrew Wyatt. My writing pen name is A.L. Wyatt this is simply my first and middle initials followed by my last name as I am sure you can tell without me mentioning.
I am currently working on a story called Dragnara: The Last Dragon Rel. As soon as I format and edit what little content I do have (a little over 17,000 words so far). I will post the result here on smashwords for completely free.
Please feel free to email me: Andrewwyatt11@gmail.com
I am very open to critics. I actually like reviews even the rough ones. I like to use negative feedback to improve my skill in writing. I always tell people. "How are we as writers expected to become professional if we don't know what we are doing wrong."
I want to become a better writer. Help me get there by writing reviews.
Eliza lives in a world that is still in it's medieval era. Her grandfather who is a wizard is all of a sudden missing. Eliza meets the love of her life while on her quest and now she must balance the feelings of romance for her new found love and the feelings of vengeance towards her grandfather's captor.
Sora Takinago is a robot designed by the poor but renowned scientist in in the town of Irabara, Japan. The town is known for science and its vast population of robots. These robots roam the yards and streets and homes all alike in the town Irabara. Sora is anything but your standard robot. In fact Sora is first genetically engineered robot with human DNA.
I'm going to be completely honest here. I would like someone to do the same for my story as well so I don't feel bad. There is no hook in my opinion. Also James is 17 why is he riding a bike to school. I am sorry, but you should do more research. I do realize that his school is a short distance but still. Here is something else it says his PE teacher tells him he should participate. Normally seniors get to choose their classes and the freshmen must take PE one year. Most high schools follow the one year freshmen PE doctrine. To me the characters lacked a lot of description. We are all entitled to our own opinions and mine is this is a no go. I do want to give you props for pulling off 140k words using present tense that is rare. I am sure you are a good writer, but to be honest. I do not like this story. Sorry. :(