Even in the world of short stories, this is a quickie. In the couple of minutes it takes to read it's quite descriptive. Was this just a writing exercise? Why not write a full length book, or even a full length short story, Michael? Or have you? ...Off to check out what else you've written in case I'd be interested.
I'd have given it 4 stars if it had been longer. Doesn't seem fair, does it? Let's call it my own inadequacy that I can't judge a story that's /this/ short.
One last thought --I guess this story did it's job after all if I'm going to check out more.
Ok, one really last thought --this review may be longer than your story. :)
Because I write clunky, Fred Flintstone type reviews, I usually say nothing. But the review by mish was so good, and spot on with everything I felt.
I'm especially glad that she (he?) mentioned the sex scenes that were surprisingly adult for teens in a YA novel, no matter how realistic (unfortunately) it may be in real life.
I'm glad there's a Parental Rating: "This book contains content that may not be suitable for young readers 17 and under."
But, all in all, it was indeed everything that mish said in her (his?) review. Fun read for me (a really old "kid").