The Baseball Game
on Jan. 20, 2015
A nicely creative, loving sex story. Quite well-done, with a few spelling or usage errors, but otherwise involving and quite erotic.
Remembering The Alamo
on Feb. 01, 2015
Professional writing (no errors to knock you out of the story.) Lots of steamy lead-up to the sex-with-a-stranger conclusion. Good, real, characters. Much, much, higher quality than the usual short smut.
Threads in a Maze
on Feb. 03, 2015
Okay story. I didn't find it too hard to follow, but kept asking myself, "why?" along the way; it wasn't too clear why things HAD to be done that were done. Perhaps I wanted more background/set-up to the story. Some of the descriptions were perfunctory, they didn't add to the mood. A sense of dread was missing. The ending was too easy: finish the story.
The Cop and the Secretary (A Tentacles of Chaos Story)
on Feb. 03, 2015
The woman (Karen) was a much more interesting character than the detective. This is an episode in an ongoing story, but almost nothing in it relies on knowledge of the series. A slightly different "romantic" involvement, with the woman running the show.
Unfortunately, the image of the woman getting a passed-out cop into the bed intruded on the ending. Why not just leave him in the living room?
on Feb. 13, 2015
Nice that there is a story to the piece. Slightly more moody descriptive detail would have set the scene more strongly. The problem with introducing fantasy (a werewolf) to a story is that any realistic imagining of the place is immediately turned into a fairy tale land.
Night at the Movies
on Feb. 16, 2015
A frustrated girlfriend decides to take things into her own hands. And into other places.
on Feb. 26, 2015
A rather odd fable of a hooker con artist whose con turns out to be true. The supernatural-ish ending was a bit jarring, since it showed up without any foreshadowing. The tag does mention horror, but I'd forgotten it by the time I got to the story.
on Feb. 27, 2015
Good story with an interesting twist. I half expected the watcher to end up being watched by the people she was watching.
Elle's Tales: Dirty Rice
on March 16, 2015
Great writing with depths hinted at, but never explained. The plot carries the story, the sex is just frosting, but very nice frosting.
Mallory and Greer
on March 17, 2015
A nice exploration of spanking between two girlfriends. The writing is good and the characters are interesting. Well done.
on March 19, 2015
The spelling errors intruded, and some commas are needed to make the story flow better. As it is, some of the sentences required me to stop reading just to decipher which word belongs to which clause.
Nicely imaginative, with good description.
on March 23, 2015
Imaginative and well-done for the genre. Please take the tags seriously.
on April 04, 2015
Drugs and booze at a Vegas strip club. Told from a man's point of view with plenty of crudity. The writing (much of it dialogue) is pretty good. I'm just not sure I enjoyed the trip.
on April 06, 2015
Nice writing, good plotting and imaginative.
on April 21, 2015
Quite good. The writing is good, and the idea is certainly new. A couple of questions popped into my head AFTER I finished the story, but nothing intruded during the story itself.
on April 23, 2015
Not erotica of the hydraulic piston type, rather, a complicated story of a mixture of people, all on the theme of sex. Very well done.
on June 24, 2015
Well-written, sexy, exotic and creative. The author has a great imagination.
on July 09, 2015
A horney wife vacationing in Greece is noticed masturbating by Greek firemen(?), and they insist she be punished by them. All of them. An interesting situation spirals out of control.
Some incorrect word choices and lost apostrophes, but overall, a good piece of porn.
THE MAZE - A Thriller Short Story
on July 11, 2015
Well written, with a nice flow and good characterizations. The tension builds, and then, the end--a bit of a sudden anticlimax. I'm not sure where else the author could have taken the story, but a different ending might not be so abrupt.
Note To Self: A Steamy Tale of Lesbian Discovery
on July 21, 2015
A remarkably good story, even without the slowly building eroticism. I usually avoid stories done in a diary format, but it worked here; the author managed to drop into very descriptive scenes that made me forget it was a diary. Good characterizations, nice emotional confusion, and a seductive plot. I even liked how it ended.
on July 27, 2015
Not so much an erotic story as a naughty joke. Some nice characterizations. I think I know the guy with the doughnut box.
on Aug. 12, 2015
A wry little story about a guy inheriting his grandmother's house. It turns out his grandmother was more complicated than he thought, and left behind more than a house to deal with.
Simple and well-written.
on Aug. 24, 2015
Doubtless, this story works better in Russian. It relies on word-play (in Russian) and a knowledge of Russian noun genders. This is explained at the end, so I "got" the story, but ended up wondering why it was in English.
It takes the form of a conversation that seems to be about one thing, that turns out to be about another. The conversation is ungrammatical and stilted to the point that it is almost incomprehensible.
Angel of Death
on Aug. 25, 2015
A pretty good story of an old fart who cheated death reminiscing himself into a familiar encounter. Not erotic for its own sake, just a adjunct to the story. I would have liked more physical detail to establish reality stronger--which would make the unreality stronger.
First Time Dark Time
on Sep. 08, 2015
A boy walks a drunk woman home and they literally fall into sex.
The story is written almost entirely in Jamaican dialect, which was very hard to translate/understand. Because of that, a lot of the banter and the argument went completely past me. It was interesting, and I'd say a good story, but I didn't "get" big chunks of it.
Split the Baby?
on Sep. 18, 2015
An abortion from the viewpoint of the baby. Mr. Foetus is of an indeterminate age and knowledgeable about clothes and windows, mechanical things and air. He even has a sense of self and others. He is dismembered, sucked out, and killed, and explains his view of morality from the other side.
A convincing argument for those already convinced. Enjoy it.
on Sep. 26, 2015
I was hoping this was just a somewhat disjointed fantasy story, but it appears the author was serious. Good luck to you Moriah, I hope it works out for you.
on Sep. 26, 2015
An uneven Steampunk robot story. Set in the late 1800s, there is very little sense of time or place, and a general lack of description. The mayor was male, but how old or fat or thin is never revealed. Eventually, the janitor turns out to be black.
The story itself is a simple action plot with some satisfying violence against a machine.
on Sep. 27, 2015
Erotica aside, it's quite a good story. It has a reasonable plot, nice descriptions, and realistic characters. But I wouldn't put the erotica aside. Very well done.
On the Run
on Sep. 29, 2015
A good little chase story with an erotic part. A Florida detective's car breaks down in the Nevada desert. In gathering evidence for an adultery case, he accidentally took a photo he should not have. A mob boss is displeased and his people have chased the detective across the country.
An attractive, and scary woman picks him up and gives him a ride.
Nice plotting, good characters, and pretty grammatical writing.
Once You Enter
on Sep. 29, 2015
Creative, but the grammatical errors (verb tense, adjective instead of an adverb, wrong pronoun case) chopped the story up and disturbed the flow.
on Oct. 05, 2015
Generally, a good story, with a few usage problems (there/their). Two people fall in lust at work and keep flying apart in anger and rushing together again as time passes.
A fable about letting your groin do your thinking for you.
on Oct. 05, 2015
A woman who hates her body goes for photographic therapy. A good story that left me with a few nagging doubts about the morality of the "therapist."
on Oct. 05, 2015
I guess kidnapping, bondage and rape prettied up with space piracy isn't my cup of tea. If it is yours, enjoy.
Divorced From Reality
on Dec. 01, 2015
Very good, skilful writing, with a reasonable plot and characters. Worth reading.
Brisk Little Stories
on Dec. 09, 2015
Small stories, but clever. The first is a wicked little twist on zombies. The second about a disappointed hit man. The third is a study on perception and murder.
The characterizations, point of view of the narrators, and plotting are all good. Higher quality than most of the writing offered for free.
A Night At The Theatre
on Dec. 22, 2015
Once you get past the explanation for the date (a girlfriend loan?) the story is quite vivid and absorbing. The nice thing about erotica by women is that the women can be real characters who make decisions, not just three walking holes.
on Dec. 27, 2015
An okay story. It was obviously written by a man, in that the women behave the way a man thinks they should behave, if they behaved the way he wanted. Which is okay, except women may have a problem until they realize it is a male fantasy.
on Feb. 02, 2016
Somewhat minimalist writing. There's no background on the narrator except what people say to him. You're dropped into a scene and it progresses, then ends.
What's there is well-written. I'm just not sure that an arbitrary restriction (1000 words) helps the piece, or accomplishes anything except satisfying an exercise. Filling out the story would make it better for the reader.
may never see the light
on Feb. 23, 2016
Not bad. There is a whole landscape of magical creatures here, in a gritty nightclub story. A magician exotic dancer is hijacked by someone who appreciates her at a deep level. It held my interest, and the writing was thankfully transparent--it didn't intrude.
on Feb. 23, 2016
An episode in a continuing story. There are many references I didn't "get" and I'm baffled by the ending. That would be okay if the writing had been proofread by an editor. There are too many errors in the text to let the reader settle in to the story without having to stop and decipher the sentence.
Clarity always trumps creativity.
The Fire Man
on March 11, 2016
Well written, I'm just a bit unclear how the fireman's death relates to the story. I guess I was hoping for a bit more "why."
on April 03, 2016
A struggling professor is frustrated by the shallowness of the men she . . . knows. One night, almost raging, she picks up the red pen she uses to grade students' papers and writes. And writes, and finds the perfect lover in her imagination.
Nicely obsessive, with an ending that doesn't take the easy way out.
The Alien Always Rings Twice
on April 12, 2016
A lobster who looks like he was hit by a car comes a long way to get laid. Luckily for everyone involved, its talents allow it to literally be everything to everybody.
Good writing and some lovely sex.
Found On My Journey
on May 03, 2016
Quite nice. A few spelling/usage errors. Simple plot that flows well, pretty good characters, and nice sex without impossible contortions, or twisted circumstances.
A Summer Night In Sweden
on May 17, 2016
A creative take on the were-(wolf, bear, etc.) genre, dealing with the problems of a were-polar bear. It could easily be the first half of a longer story. I'm not sure why I downloaded it, as I don't much care for magic, mystical stories, and monsters. It was blessedly without gore but quite tense.
I'm not sure whether the complete lack of apostrophes was carelessness or an affectation, but it was quite intrusive.
on May 25, 2016
A well-done short story. After mourning a lover for two years, a woman is ready for a new man. But how to find him? Will he understand her tastes?
Good writing that flows well, and reasonable human reactions. The main character is well drawn.
on Aug. 03, 2016
An oddly disappointing story. Set in SF, a group of male co-workers take off work and go to a sleazy strip joint. They do, and watch, sleazy stuff.
The tags call it comedy, but I just found it dreary. The actual writing is good, but absolutely nobody is likable.
101 Degrees Fahrenheit
on Aug. 22, 2016
Well done, a nice plot, and a good sense of the characters feeling their way through the sex. Not just a lot of hydraulics.
on Aug. 22, 2016
A good enough story about a hookup at a specialized night club. The story is at leas half set-up, with the heat building to the end.
There are some language errors--hones in, instead of homes in; a coma popping up in the middle of frantic activity--but nothing the reader can't figure out or disregard.
The Winsome Widow: An Erotic Paranormal Suspense Novella
on Oct. 09, 2016
Great story. What starts out as a mystery ends up being a ghost/astral body manipulation of unsuspecting men. My only problem was with the lack of apostrophes (I know, I know.) I'm sorry but shell is not the same as she'll, weve is not the same as we've, wont is not the same as won't. Each time the reader has to stop and decipher a word, s/he drops out of the story and the illusion of reality snaps.
Great characters (especially the women), good description, and a nice puzzle.
Wilbert E. Hornbeck's Fantastic Adventure
on Nov. 22, 2016
Quite entertaining, with some small gripes. It was almost a 'fantastic story' of the type Verne, H.G. Wells, and Twain could have written. The viewpoints and morals of the characters worked well. Except for the contractions: 19th century writers didn't use them. They said, "did not," instead of "didn't." Everything was written out. This would've been almost unnoticeable, except that the Massey used no apostrophes. Didn't became didnt, would've became wouldve. The lack of punctuation drew attention to the contraction every time.
Very creative writing. Worth reading.
on Dec. 26, 2016
Quite creative. After a century of human eugenics, each person is limited to six sexual partners. Except the overseers. But there is an underground trying to overthrow the system and--. That's the premise. I think the protagonist understood the vaccine better than I did, because I didn't see her actions coming.
For the ideas, characters and plotting: four stars. The story is well-written (flows well and is well-punctuated,) but there are word choice or maybe spell-check problems, that jangle when they occur. Things like "wreaking my marriage," instead of wrecking; "I could have strayed there," instead of stayed there. An editor or proofreader would help.
on June 08, 2018
Not bad, fairly well written and detailed enough. However, shudder is not spelled shutter.
on June 08, 2018
Every guy's dream date. I liked this quite a lot, from the ambiguous gender of the new hire, to the surprising ending. Not exactly traditional erotica, but a very effective story.
on June 22, 2018
A pleasant and well-written romp between a lonesome woman and a mysterious nice guy. It's kind of a relief to find a story that uses language well and doesn't leave me with either a bad taste in my mouth or in stunned incredulity at the superhuman gymnastics.
on Sep. 09, 2018
Ms. Debout's stories are well-written and very different from what passes as erotica. Her characters have depth and personalities, and the plots of her stories actually go somewhere beyond a sweaty orgasm.
After a break-up following a long live-in relationship, Ee meets a man who wants nothing of the sort, but even passing strangers can get entangled.
on Oct. 08, 2018
Well written, evocative, and imaginative. A woman on a solitary road trip stops at an inn and is visited by the ghost of her husband, dead a year. Recommended for anyone looking for something beyond over-athletic grunt-and-groan porn full of misspellings.
on Oct. 17, 2018
A little odd. A woman with a lifelong secret finds herself attracted to a man she fears will reject her when the moment comes for him to find out. What is odd is that everyone experiences that kind of fear, even without so strange a secret. It's the nature of risking any kind of intimacy.
Good prose style, plotting, and pacing.
on Nov. 26, 2018
Rape by hypnotism. About as erotic as GHB or a piece of pipe to a woman's head. I was unamused.
on Nov. 27, 2018
I tend to steer away from ghost stories, I'm afraid I'm not a believer. The mysterious evil and horror aspects also tend to bore me. This isn't one of those. The story is puzzling and gradually unravels to a pleasant ending. It is nicely erotic.
Hard to fault.
on Dec. 16, 2018
The arc of his story is quite similar to Start Again, in that the very perceptive woman in some way saves the guy who starts out as a casual hook-up. The writing seems less vivid than some of the writer's other stories, and the characters not as concrete. I might have liked it better had I not read Start Again first.
on Feb. 02, 2019
An original plot (as can be expected from Debout), with caring characters. Elizabeth was planning a Christmas present for her boyfriend, but caught the flu instead. When he visits her in her sickroom on Christmas she improvises while drifting in and out of consciousness and delirium.
Sweet, in a bumbling way.
on Feb. 19, 2019
Well-plotted, with good characters, and . . . sweet. Two teens who each regret a prom grope-fest find they share a work shift at the burger joint. Embarrassment leads to conciliation, then to mutual instruction on what makes the opposite gender uhm, happy.
The twist at the ending makes the story particularly real. Should be required reading for teenagers.
The Night Club
on March 07, 2019
The half-owner of a night club goes to a business meeting with her husband at the club one night. Unfortunately, what is going on under the table keeps distracting her from business thoughts. Simple and well-written.
on April 15, 2019
I've not read the other Dare books, so am not sure of the premise. A woman gets a text daring her to strip for the walk from her car to her front door. What follows is a kind of bondage and borderline non-consensual sex with a man she at times seems to know and at other times is a stranger.
The writing is clearly by a man, and he is describing the woman's thoughts and feelings. I doubt women readers will be convinced the character is realistic or her reactions likely. But I may be wrong. The man seemed predatory to me, not a personality that appeals to me.
The book is vague about physical details apart from the descriptions of fleshy hydraulics, the story continues without real plotting until it doesn't, and the spelling and punctuation are pretty standard for today, with "your" being used for "you're" and "your".
on Aug. 27, 2019
Short, wry story about the implantation of artificial nerves in brains. Maybe there are worse things than a world-wide takeover by machine intelligence. The writing is clear and unobtrusive. The only thing I disliked was the setting: a bar.
[Never set a story in a bar, never include Jesus Christ as a character, and never wake up and discover it was all a dream.]
on Sep. 02, 2019
I am not the best judge of what women find erotic, so I will stick to the problems with the story. The word "taunt" is used instead of "taut." Armstrong is a criminal, and his actions at the beginning of the story were immoral. His taming--his abrupt character change--in the last third of the story was hard to believe. The ending, while it certainly closed down the story, was hardly to be desired, and not at all erotic. In all, there were too many times in the story where I lost the thread and could only sit and think, "huh?"