Breakable Moments is a blood stained, gunpowder smelling romance.
The background is set in Trinidad, bringing alive the ghetto and the sharp edge of survival. The story is weaving around Eric, a paramilitary youngster who tries desperately to find love. So desperately, he runs into serious trouble and got caught between the long claws of the law and the crushing fist of the Mafia.
Ryan Ramoutar comes again with a gripping story, taking the reader in a breathless sprint to the shocking end of the story.
Well depicted characters and sharp detail are again in the author's side for another success.
“A true bizarre story” is a voltaic discharge of pure horrifying action. Before you realized, you have finished the reading, feeling cold and covered with goose bumps. If you never knew how the devil was born, it came the time to find out. On your own risk, of course.
What do you see when you watch a beautiful woman?
What is the connection between a submarine, a typing machine and a Paleolithic Sanctuary?
The answer for both questions: Carol.
Who is Carol, then?
This book will not answer the question. Will stir even more.
The novel is a cross genre: it feels like a fantasy, it reads like a thriller and will please the sci-fi fans, remaining credible all along.
I've came across over this short story randomly. I did finish the lecture, which means has some seed. However, the fruit is a little immature. I had prepared a full review. If Hannah it's interested in a sincere feed back, please contact me. It's my gift for her gracious sharing.
I had read the short story almost twice. I did enjoy it and I think this is a solid piece of writing. I will like to thank Mr. Blake for the well polished content: if there is any mistake in his story, I haven't seen it.
The storyline is just a little chipped by the too common ending. And my final impression is that the text could not stand alone. It will make a great piece in an anthology with different authors.
Anyhow, it is a very good reading, if not a great one.
This is definitely the most complete work I’ve read in a while from Smashwords. Without reading at first the author’s statement, I could guess that here was involved a big deal of polishing and editing. This was the most pregnant impression I had reading Broadcast 0: a well finished work. Then, after I read what Mr. Lalonde has done to bring it into this shape, I realized that most of us would give up long before. Take in consideration the re-writing of eighty pages of dialogue only!
The title I found it superb and the subtitle very well inspired.
The action is fast paced and keeps the reader connected. The intricacies are revealed just at the opportune time and that makes the lecture very accessible and pleasant.
The personages are clearly drawn and strongly individualized. After the reader get to be acquainted with, he would guess who’s speaking without the author’s specification.
The obvious subsequent conclusion is that the dialogues are well implemented and highly personalized. Mr. Lalonde offers a very precious example of how to write a credible and natural dialogue.
Undoubtedly, the novel deserves the acquired fame and I’d love to congratulate Mr. Lalonde for his tenacity and especially for his final result.
Because of my natural grumpiness, I need to signal out a certain lack of originality but please ignore my rancorous observation and enjoy a great read: Spinward Fringe. Broadcast 0
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Reading this story left me with a contradictory feeling. Although well written, something seemed not to be right, and I proceeded to a second reading. Only then I could see a couple of shadowy flaws creeping from behind the text lines: the dialogues and the clues. I don’t think somebody can write a prehistoric fantasy using only grunts and moaning for dialogues, but I believe the exposure of language should be wisely guarded. In the story line, I didn’t really appreciate the way the clues of the mystery came at hand. A little too convenient, I thought. The shard of flint and the circumstances of discovery it just didn’t geared with me.
Besides, the technique is well mastered, and I loved the delicious break after the she-wolf attack, amongst the other piquant moments.
As final conclusion, I positively appreciate the manner of writing (again) and the story as whole. It is a pleasant lecture and many thanks to the author for making it available for free.
“Long Odds” is a short story with a strong personality: the mechanics of the epic are well greased and functioning perfect together.
At first glance, it may seem a little dis-articulated but isn’t. The sci-fi element is strong and also the odds of happening, up to a point, in a well designed world.
Although the world is just a guess, it is very well portrayed by the description of the characters. The manner of acting and interacting gives a perfect view of the “outside,” which, for a short story like this one is quite a performance.
The only thing I found it not so inspired it was the ending: it made me taste like overcooked. The “brother” thing came just as too much fire over a perfect seasoned steak.
As conclusion, the story is impressing by clarity, the genuine world depicted and the well developed action.
That was a poor one.
Idea: Very old, very much used in movies and writing. (Rating: 3/10)
Storytelling: Not entirely bad but somehow repetitive and / or redundant. The story is too short to allow repetitions. The descriptions lack very much in originality, as this fragment shows: “The creatures were diminutive in size but had unusually large heads and bulging red glowing eyes. Their bodies were covered by some type of metallic armor, they communicated without words, somehow telepathically mind to mind. They worked quickly exploring Willie’s body with electronic probes of some sort. Willie was not harmed, not yet at least, but that would change as the procedure continued.” See what I mean? Flat, redundant and banal. (Rating: 5/10)
Personages: cartoons. It is true that the short story telling does not allow lots of space for developing full ranges of emotions, but I could not sympathize with none in this story: Willie is passive, the guards are passive; the dogs are the best. For me, seemed like AI driven characters in an old computer game (Warcraft I, maybe). (Rating: 4/10)
Conclusion: although I hate (I really do) the contemptuous comments like “waste of time,” as being generally too though and ungrateful on writer’s effort, this time I have to advert you: find something better to do (read).
Final rating: 4/10