M. Pars

Smashwords book reviews by M. Pars

  • No Place Like Amestraton on Feb. 15, 2013

    This is one of the most boring stories I have ever read. I think many details could have been omitted. The characters are not fully developed and come across as quite stupid, for want of a better word. I read it through hoping it would finally develop into an exciting, entertaining story, but was sorely disappointed. Needs to be reworked.
  • Anaxiunara (One Brief Eternity) book I on Feb. 28, 2013

    Marvelous! Truly a gifted storyteller. Thank you for the spiritual, philosophical and emotional (not forgetting fantastical) journey. I hope that you write more about Anna and everyone else.
  • The Unsuspecting Mage: The Morcyth Saga Book One on Aug. 28, 2013

    I have to agree with my fellow reviewers - the book lacks tension and the present tense is very difficult to follow. I think that the use of the present tense takes away any depth, rendering the story flat. I certainly would not pay money to read the remaining volumes.
  • The Well of Fates on Feb. 26, 2014

    Fabulous! Another great storyteller is born. I cannot wait for the next book(s). Please hurry!!
  • Illiom, Daughter of Prophecy on April 22, 2014

    A very well-written tale with believable characters. You are a gifted story teller and I cannot wait for the adventure to continue. Well done!
  • Storm of Prophecy, Book I: Dark Awakening on May 06, 2014

    A good attempt. The characters need to be fine tuned and the story needs to flow more smoothly. I felt myself becoming irritated with the utter stupidity of most characters - perhaps the author attempted to portray them as complacent, but they unfortunately did not come across as such.
  • The Orphan and the Shadow Walker: The Awakening on June 25, 2014

    Excellent! I cannot wait for more. Please hurry with the continuation. You are a gifted storyteller - a true bard. Thank you.
  • A Woman Warrior Born on July 01, 2014

    In one word, excellent! I cannot wait for more of Breea. One of the few books that I just cannot put down. Bravo!!
  • Blood Gift Part One on July 07, 2014
    (no rating)
    Will you please offer this book in other forms - PDF, read online, etc? That would most certainly assure (perhaps positive) reviews.
  • Tempting Fate on July 13, 2014

    Outstanding! I could not put this book down, and now that I've reached the end, I want more. I do hope that Saira and friends will find their way into my library once (or twice) more. Thank you for spinning a fine tale.
  • Slayer on July 19, 2014
    (no rating)
    Groan! I could not get past page 17. Please go back to school and try to pass your English courses - all of them.
  • The Lifestone Chronicles. Foundation of a King's Legend on Sep. 30, 2014

    A wonderful story. However it is difficult to read because there are too many spelling errors, as well as incorrect word usage. Run it by an editor and it will be in top shape after.
  • The Road to Amber on Oct. 18, 2014

    Wow! The story is intriguing, but I had a difficult time with the level of suffering. Characters are well-developed. Overall, a very good tale.
  • Oberon's Children on Oct. 21, 2014

    Magnificent! I could not put this story down. Please wrote a follow-up to this. I think the world needs to know more of Mol and the others. You are truly a gifted writer and should continue to share your talent.
  • Out of Mischief: World of Change Book 1 on Jan. 28, 2015

    I really enjoyed the story. The characters are likeable and the story unfolds quite nicely. I have to agree with my fellow reader - a little more emotion would be nice. Overall, it was a good read and I look forward to the next installment(s).
  • Into Trouble: World of Change Book 2 on Jan. 30, 2015

    Bravo! Very well done. Once again, I truly enjoyed the characters and story line. I am looking forward to the future adventures of Aleria.
  • Guardian of Maradon on Sep. 09, 2015

    A very sweet tale. The characters are believable and everything flows smoothly. I wanted it to continue, feeling that it ended too soon.
  • Chronicles of Den'dra: A Land Torn on Sep. 11, 2015

    In one word: magnificent! A thoroughly enjoyable read that leaves me wanting more. It is stories like this that separate the truly gifted writer from others. Bravo, and keep sharing your talent with the world!
  • Guardians of the Light (Book One of The Nebril Riverland Chronicles) on Oct. 20, 2015

    Love this story! I cannot wait for the next book. Keep writing, dear lady - your characters are strong and real and I find my imagination soaring right along with them.
  • Breathless (Circle of Light Book 1) on Oct. 23, 2015

    Good story. I like the characters and theme. I hope that you will offer book 2 on Smashwords soon. Congratulations.
  • Skull of Oghren on Oct. 27, 2015

    Good story: I like the characters and premise. However, many spelling / word usage issues need to be corrected. A good effort. Perhaps book 2 will be stronger and I look forward to the improvements. Keep trying.
  • Thrum on Jan. 14, 2016

    An enjoyable, easy, entertaining story. Good humor and characters. I hope to see more of them in the future.
  • The Shadow of Black Rock on Jan. 20, 2016

    Nice story, but it moves a bit slowly. Proper names are used too often from one sentence to the next, when pronouns would have sufficed. However, a very good effort.
  • The Stolen Child on Feb. 02, 2016

    Love it! I cannot wait for the next book - keep them coming.
  • Mountains of Mischief: World of Change Book 3 on Feb. 04, 2016

    Once again, you have outdone yourself. Bravo! I cannot wait for the next book.
  • Daygo's Fury on Feb. 17, 2016

    Very good start to an epic tale. I look forward to the continuation of the series. Well done!
  • The Shrine of Arthis Book One: The Power of Denial on Feb. 19, 2016

    I enjoyed this book from beginning to end and cannot wait for the second to be offered on Smashwords. Very well done!
  • Roland's Castle on March 24, 2016

    As children's stories go - this is lovely. Highly entertaining and very funny. I felt as if I were 10 again.
  • Emily's Saga on April 18, 2016

    A truly epic tale. I enjoyed the books from start to finish. Yes, a few technical problems, but they do not diminish the great storytelling. Keep sharing your gift with the world. Cheers!
  • The Immortal Stars - Discoveries on April 19, 2016

    This story is in need of major editing - too many spelling/word usage errors. The plot needs some strengthening. The characters seem formed out of a teenager's mind. Maybe the author should take a few courses in writing? Two stars for bravery.
  • Hollo (The Magic of Thedes, Book 1) on April 21, 2016

    An enjoyable story from start to finish - a tale that brings you back to the innocence of childhood. I hope you keep charming us with your unique take on fantasy.
  • Fractal Saga: Timeless Fracture on May 03, 2016

    A very good story, with characters that are strong and believable. I certainly cannot wait for the next installment. Congratulations!
  • The Winds of Crowns and Wolves on May 18, 2016

    Ok, I am half way through and cannot continue. Eloquence is a gift - it cannot be had from a thesaurus. You are trying too hard and using too many words out of context and it is exhausting, to say the least. Keep it simple and find an editor.
  • Hope's Awakening on May 18, 2016
    (no rating)
    Just way too much sex. If you remove the encounters, this book would be reduced to a short story. You should reclassify it under Erotica.
  • Shades of Valhalla - Inner Origins Book One on June 23, 2016

    I guess it is fine for a teenager, but not so entertaining for an adult. Too much angst, and mood swings that make no sense. Holes in the story need filling, and the usual spelling/words usage issues.
  • Raven's Hand on July 11, 2016

    Love it! I cannot wait for the next book in the series. A fast-paced ride from start to end. Congratulations!!
  • Beyond The Hero's Chamber on July 15, 2016

    Wonderful! Life is indeed one endless lesson. I love your perspective on creation. This story is very well-written, full of wisdom and comes from a place of love. Bravo!!
  • The Chosen (The Compendium of Raath, Book 1) on Sep. 13, 2016

    I love this story and cannot wait for the next installment. Great characters and a few unexpected turns - all the ingredients for a great adventure. Keep them coming!
  • The Shrinking Nuts Case on Sep. 15, 2016

    What a funny, exciting story! I love the characters and enjoyed the roller coaster ride. Bravo!!
  • The Gantean on Sep. 21, 2016

    I love this tale and wish you would offer the other two books on Smashwords. I would pay to read them here - just based on how good this first book is!
  • James and the Changing Red on Oct. 28, 2016

    The story shows promise, but the innumerable spelling and grammar issues need attention. It is fragmented as well and characters are just annoying. Rework thoroughly and re-post.
  • Fantastica: The Journey on Oct. 29, 2016

    A good story - quite humorous at times. It is a shame that a whole scene was taken right out the author's other book and deposited here. A few spelling errors, but enough to turn one away from the tale.
  • Sky Road Walker on Nov. 10, 2016

    Loved this story from beginning to end. It feels strange to not have it continue, but I think that is what a great tale does to us - leaves us wanting more. Well done.
  • A Quest of Heroes (Book #1 in the Sorcerer's Ring) on Nov. 17, 2016

    This tale grabbed my attention from the onset and I had to stay up to finish reading it. I was about to buy the next book in the series but am wavering based on the reviews. The author is truly talented.
  • Cursed: Legend of the Grimoire, Book One on March 19, 2017

    What a wonderful adventure! I love the characters -- with all their faults. Some unexpected twists and turns, but it all comes together perfectly.
  • A Whispered Wish on March 28, 2017

    Right off the top - please stop writing in only present tense. I could not get past the second sentence. This is not how a story is told.
  • Destiny's Queen on April 07, 2017

    I did not read the first novel, but this has enough background information to make it a stand-alone. I love the story and characters. My one problem - too much fashion and repetition of certain descriptive phrases. Also, there are some spelling errors, but not enough to take away from the story.
  • The Lines of Tamar on April 13, 2017

    In a word - wow! This is truly a story of epic proportions, filled with twists and turns that connect in the most wonderful way. Well done.
  • Rebellion (Chronicles of Charanthe #1) on April 25, 2017

    A great adventure that is action-packed with vibrant characters. Well done!
  • Revolution (Chronicles of Charanthe #2) on April 25, 2017

    You've done it once again. I cannot wait for the next book in the series. Congratulations!
  • The Shields of Vale on April 26, 2017

    Unfortunately, this already reads like a first attempt without a spelling and grammar check. Please stop using only present tense - it is insulting to anyone with a brain. 2 stars for bravery.
  • Into The Realm on May 16, 2017

    .An enjoyable, if predictable, tale. Quite a number of spelling and grammar errors. A thorough editing is needed.
  • The Black and White Angel on May 25, 2017

    I have read half of this book and cannot continue. The story line is weak and characters monochromatic. I have waited for the "magic" that one usually feels in the first few pages, but it is sadly lacking after so trudging through so many.
  • Before the Tide on May 30, 2017

    This has the makings of a great tale, but for the numerous spelling errors. Review homophones, as well as synonyms for words ending in -ness. Vengeance sounds much better than vengefulness. I would give 5 stars if this were edited properly.
  • The Ring of Eman Vath on July 08, 2017

    This is what separates the boys from the men. Even with a few spelling errors, this story is, in a word - excellent. Bravo!
  • Caught in Amber on July 16, 2017

    A most unusual and entertaining tale - a breath of fresh air in its originality. A lesson in trusting and believing in one self.
  • Book 1: Bonded Spirit on Oct. 18, 2017

    Very nice story with good, strong characters. There are quite a few spelling and word usage errors, so a detailed edit is in order. Overall, an enjoyable read.
  • Nightshade on Nov. 02, 2017

    The story has promise, but too many spelling and word usage errors. With a thorough editing, it would be quite enjoyable.
  • Darkness Awakens on Nov. 29, 2017

    A tribute to the other side of Divinity that has been suffocated by the dominance of the male image. Love the deep spiritual message skilfully woven into a great adventure. Well done!
  • The Emperor's Daughter on Dec. 08, 2017

    A wonderful story with good, strong characters. I cannot wait for the next installment. Well done!!
  • The Mirror of Worlds on Jan. 10, 2018

    Excellent first book. The characters are well-defined and the story is a stay-up-at-night-reading kind of adventure. I am impatiently waiting for the next installment. Congratulations!
  • Hidden in the Reed's - Home (Book 1) on Jan. 16, 2018

    Good story, strong characters. However, the plot did not quite come together at the end. I feel as if I missed something along the way.
  • A Daughter's Fury on Feb. 20, 2018

    Loved the story and characters, but have to take a point off for the many spelling and word usage errors. Give the story another edit and watch your homonyms and homophones.
  • Warrior on April 15, 2018

    In one word - excellent. The author weaves a tale that kept me reading late into the night. The characters are strong and believable and draws one into the story, making it hard to accept the end of such an enjoyable adventure.
  • The Black Lily on May 14, 2018

    A very enjoyable read. There are a few spelling errors, but not enough to take away from a solid tale. I am looking forward to book 2. Well done.
  • The Black Pearl on May 28, 2018

    In a word - wow! It has been a while since I have been unable to put a book down. I love the cast of characters and lived their trials and tribulations with them. I cannot wait to start on the second book. Bravo!!
  • Dark Magic Rising -The Sisterhood Trilogy Book One on June 02, 2018

    This is a fine story, but not the type that kept me up late. I kept waiting for the excitement that usually begins on the first few pages of a great story, but it just never came. I will certainly not spend more time on other books of this series.
  • Crown Duel on Aug. 05, 2018

    How refreshing and thoroughly enjoyable. I loved the characters - both good and bad. Good that I started this book on a Friday evening, because I could not put it down all weekend. It is now 5:30pm on Sunday and I can finally do so. Bravo!!
  • Xander's Essence - Part One on Aug. 10, 2018

    Good story, but the constant use of names instead of pronouns is a bit much. There is a problem with flow - it feels choppy at times. Overall, a good effort.
  • Magic of Thieves: Legends of Dimmingwood, Book 1 on Aug. 27, 2018

    I kept waiting for the story to pick up, but it just never did. Definitely not a stay-up-all-night tale. Three stars for effort.
  • The Guardian and the Thief on Sep. 12, 2018

    I loved this book from the start! The author weaves a grand tale that gets even better in the second book. Well done.
  • The Dragon and the Queen on Sep. 12, 2018

    I am so glad to have bought both volumes at the same time, because I could not wait to see the outcome. This was a wonderful tale and a great success, as first attempts go. Keep writing!
  • Frostborn: The Gray Knight (Frostborn #1) on Jan. 04, 2019

    Excellent tale! This is what a truly gifted author can produce. The characters are strong and the story keeps you wanting more. Well done!!
  • The Emperor's Edge Collection, Books 1-3 on Feb. 02, 2019

    I absolutely love this story, its characters and the very cheeky humor. I wish the next four books would be offered in one volume. The author is quite talented and I am looking forward to reading more of her work. Bravo!
  • A Rose in the Desert on Oct. 09, 2019

    I love this story and its characters. You are a gifted storyteller and I am so happy that you've shared your talent with the world. Bravo!
  • A Daughter of Kings on Oct. 09, 2019

    Once again, you've outdone yourself. What a pleasure it was to read this tale and truly live through the characters. I have stayed up long past my bedtime because I could not put down this book. Please keep writing!
  • Upon the Ashes of Empire on Jan. 15, 2021

    I was unable to put down the entire series. What a marvelous tale and what lovable characters! You have outdone yourself. Bravo!,
  • Soldiers of the Heavens on Jan. 15, 2021

    Having read the entire series, I find it to be equally as impressive as the Ballard series. Once again I could not put the books down. Thank you for sharing your gift with the world. You are a rare talent!
  • Juatwa on Aug. 31, 2022

    I have read all 6 books - one after the other because I could not wait to see what happens next. I love the characters and every step of their unfoldment. This is an epic work and I am grateful to the author for sharing his gift with the world. Congratulations!
  • Rocalla's Saga: Arrival on Oct. 24, 2022

    The story has potential, but tenses exist for a reason. I cannot understand why people insist on writing only in the present tense. The story lost depth as a result. It also makes reading a painful experience.
  • The Azure Kingdom on June 29, 2023

    I truly detest stories written in the present tense. They are exhausting to read and lack any depth. The English language is rich and such writers do it a great disservice.
  • The Last Descendant on April 03, 2024

    Loved the story and characters. It’s been a while since I have read a book that I could not put down. Bravo!