This is one of the most boring stories I have ever read. I think many details could have been omitted. The characters are not fully developed and come across as quite stupid, for want of a better word. I read it through hoping it would finally develop into an exciting, entertaining story, but was sorely disappointed. Needs to be reworked.
I have to agree with my fellow reviewers - the book lacks tension and the present tense is very difficult to follow. I think that the use of the present tense takes away any depth, rendering the story flat. I certainly would not pay money to read the remaining volumes.
Truly epic - I could not put my iPad down. Characters are well-balanced and believable. I cannot wait for the next book. It has been a long time since I have read such a captivating story. Hats off to you! Please keep writing. Talent such as yours must be shared with the world.
A good attempt. The characters need to be fine tuned and the story needs to flow more smoothly. I felt myself becoming irritated with the utter stupidity of most characters - perhaps the author attempted to portray them as complacent, but they unfortunately did not come across as such.
A sweet romance. The characters are believable and although the story follows the standard "romance" formula, it is very enjoyable and easy to read. I cannot wait to read more about Keira, Aaron and Anna.
Outstanding! I could not put this book down, and now that I've reached the end, I want more. I do hope that Saira and friends will find their way into my library once (or twice) more. Thank you for spinning a fine tale.
on July 19, 2014
Groan! I could not get past page 17. Please go back to school and try to pass your English courses - all of them.
Magnificent! I could not put this story down. Please wrote a follow-up to this. I think the world needs to know more of Mol and the others. You are truly a gifted writer and should continue to share your talent.
Love this story - a good mix of adventure, romance, humor and suspense. The characters are well-developed and believable. i enjoyed a few laugh-out-loud momemts. Cannot wait for the rest of the series. Welll done!
I really enjoyed the story. The characters are likeable and the story unfolds quite nicely. I have to agree with my fellow reader - a little more emotion would be nice. Overall, it was a good read and I look forward to the next installment(s).
The story is a bit slow - certainly nowhere close to Tolkien's works. The "heroes" need to work together, not run and hide during times of difficulty or duress. I have read stories that draw you in and keep you wanting more. This is not one.
Well, I thought that this secon book would be an improvement on the first, but I am sadly disappointed. Grammatical errors, too much repetition, wrong word usage - just to name a few problems. I kept waiting for the story to pick up speed and the characters to develop some backbone but got to the end wondering why I wasted money and time on this. Sorry, but much improvement is needed.
In one word: magnificent! A thoroughly enjoyable read that leaves me wanting more. It is stories like this that separate the truly gifted writer from others. Bravo, and keep sharing your talent with the world!
Good story: I like the characters and premise. However, many spelling / word usage issues need to be corrected. A good effort. Perhaps book 2 will be stronger and I look forward to the improvements. Keep trying.
This story is in need of major editing - too many spelling/word usage errors. The plot needs some strengthening. The characters seem formed out of a teenager's mind. Maybe the author should take a few courses in writing? Two stars for bravery.
The remarkable adventure continues. Once again, I could not put the book down. Needs editing for spelling/word usage, but the story is strong enough that they do not detract from it. I cannot wait for the next installment.
Ok, I am half way through and cannot continue. Eloquence is a gift - it cannot be had from a thesaurus. You are trying too hard and using too many words out of context and it is exhausting, to say the least. Keep it simple and find an editor.
on May 18, 2016
Just way too much sex. If you remove the encounters, this book would be reduced to a short story. You should reclassify it under Erotica.
The only reason I read this through to the end was the promise of a good tale. And it was a good tale, but it needs a thorough edit. Every page is full of spelling and word usage errors. Rework and relist it.
Ok, deep breath - this needs a complete rework. I simply cannot continue reading a story where everything is written in the present tense. Word usage, spelling, grammar issues abound. Take writing classes and find an editor. 1 star for bravery.
A good story - quite humorous at times. It is a shame that a whole scene was taken right out the author's other book and deposited here. A few spelling errors, but enough to turn one away from the tale.
This tale grabbed my attention from the onset and I had to stay up to finish reading it. I was about to buy the next book in the series but am wavering based on the reviews. The author is truly talented.
What an absolutely enjoyable adventure! I love the characters and storyline. There are a few spelling and word usage errors, but they did not detract from my enjoyment in any way. I hope to hear more from Isador in the future.
I did not read the first novel, but this has enough background information to make it a stand-alone. I love the story and characters. My one problem - too much fashion and repetition of certain descriptive phrases. Also, there are some spelling errors, but not enough to take away from the story.
I have read half of this book and cannot continue. The story line is weak and characters monochromatic. I have waited for the "magic" that one usually feels in the first few pages, but it is sadly lacking after so trudging through so many.
This has the makings of a great tale, but for the numerous spelling errors. Review homophones, as well as synonyms for words ending in -ness. Vengeance sounds much better than vengefulness. I would give 5 stars if this were edited properly.