Angela D’Ambrosio was born in Boise, Idaho in 1977, the second of four children and only girl. She was raised in Cambridge, Idaho the gateway to Hells Canyon. Her father, a teacher, and river guide and her mother a homemaker. Her short stories have been featured in Go Read Your Lunch and The Idaho Magazine. She currently lives in Boise with her husband and three kids.
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In Gods' Hands
on May 24, 2013
I read IN GODS’ HANDS by Jessa Callaver, an erotic romance with a touch of humor, for review however the author asked for constructive criticism to help her going forward. This impressed me right away about Ms. Callaver. Her desire to improve her craft beyond once it’s published tells me she really wants to do right by her readership. I wish more authors had this kind of integrity.
I really like the premise of this short story and I LOVED the location. It’s Italy! What’s not to love?
The author did a good job of pulling me into the story with her vivid description of Venice. I felt connected to the location. I didn’t get enough information to feel the same way about the characters. I did like the man-candy; tall, dark and dangerous. The protagonist was slutty and a whiner but given the circumstances it was acceptable. I think the main crux of why this story didn’t work for me was because even though the two main characters are fascinating, the author didn’t show me enough to be invested.
I think the story has a lot of potential but the author needed to show more in the beginning, rather than trickle information until the big reveal. The reader doesn’t have to know everything but the author should give us enough that we aren’t confused. This is how I felt through a good portion of this story. Granted, this is a short story but this one had enough going on, that it could have been a novella.
Since this is classified as erotica I just wanted to touch on something that I think is a big no-no in stories and in real life. It is very uncomfortable to have a sex scene interrupted. It breaks the hard earned tension and frankly it’s just plain frustrating.
Ms. Callaver has a handful of stories published and based on what I’ve read and the reviews she is getting, she is definitely an author I will be watching.