I suppose this is written for a fairly young audience? The stories and writing are nice but very simple, not a lot of context or "layers to the onion." Such is puppy love in the first story, but themes are simplistic throughout. I will read more work from the author in the future. The writing is good, if applied toward stories with more depth much higher potential could be met.
These two are okay reads. The stories are moderately interesting and the writing is good. However, the writing should bring me in close to the characters and I needed to be more motivated to "turn the page." The word "economy" should be higher for a short story. There are many sentences that are arguably not needed, at least they add little. Still, overall a decent read.
The writing is in the good range, but the story is lacking some things that could make it compelling. The stakes were not very high for the characters, and the deeper meaning trying to be conveyed is pretty explicit, as opposed to being revealed in a more thought provoking way. The story moves very slowly for my taste. The story lacks economy; I believe with good editing it could be 30% shorter and not miss anything that's there now. It seems several folks like it, so I suppose this is largely a matter of taste, but I cannot give it more than two stars.
This is a short story that lacks depth. The characters are mostly one-dimensional, the supposed twist is set up and revealed in a simplistic manner within the story. Finally I did not find the story compelling at all. The writing is pretty good. I rate the story and character development very low an the writing relatively high.
This short story is excellent, the stakes start high and then get higher as it progresses. Its also a nice combination of genres. The writing is strong, the character development is very good, and every word seems to count. Thoroughly entertaining.
The story is creative and interesting, but the writing is weak. There a numerous issues here. I suspect the work needs a good development editor to go through it. Its not nearly polished enough for publication (IMO), still I suspect its a diamond in the rough.