I am a retired airline pilot. I ran an exclusive yacht charter business in my spare time for many years. I am now living and teaching in Thailand. My spare time is busily occupied with writing. Eight books so far, more to follow.
Charlie Edwards grabs a desperate young woman by the hand and leads her to safety. But it leads Charlie into danger and a world full of bad people. Charlie sets about righting the wrongs these men have inflicted on innocent victims in the only way she knows how. Revenge is sometimes sweet.
Goodreads Average so far; 4.3 stars. Charlie Edwards is a different kind of hero; widowed, thirty-something, single and not on the prowl, she travels the Caribbean in her beautiful home, 'Saving Grace' searching for material for her novels. Kidnapped and forced to sail to South America, Charlie has to dig deep into her reserves of strength to overcome the odds, two men against one woman.
As a vignette, a taster, a starter, a glimpse, this very short story has most, but not all the ingredients I want in such a short story. The book could do with a little more characterization of the three participants and a not so rushed or hurried pace to the action. Another 1000 words would have helped.
The descriptive passages of the sex are a little stereotyped and lack originality, which is difficult when dealing with sex, however, it raised the temp of my juices to a gentle simmer so it does the trick in some respects.
I would have liked to see the story expanded from such a brief encounter and the sex more protracted, more detailed to get the temp above the gentle simmer.
This format, the young vulnerable girl colliding with the tall, dominant male in an orchestrated encounter with the coffee cup, has been used a thousand times before. If you want to write a short version of 50 Shades of Grey or something similar, it has to be original and it has to be well written. This was not well written nor was it original; it was a pale copy of a much used and often imitated format but the problem is, it was not done well. The constant use of the passive voice became irritating. I have highlighted maybe fifty instances, there are probably as many more I skipped in frustration. The shifting of the POV between all three during the sex scene was very confusing and the change of tense even more so. This needs a lot of work to bring it up to a standard where I would consider it fit for publication. Publishing poorly written and badly constructed work is simply bringing rightful and justified criticism on the self-publishing world. I did not engage with any of the characters. I found Viola to be a blank canvas who remained that way throughout the book. She came from nowhere and went nowhere. The interlude with her friend who got married just didn't fit in with the story. It was merely a filler. Malcolm was an unlikeable boor who strutted and primped around the place, accomplishing nothing and coming without anyone else noticing. The haircutting episode left me baffled. I have no idea of the eventual style as the descriptions were simply so confusing.
The biggest drawback is the constant use of the passive voice. It is simply not acceptable to attempt to write a novel without knowing the basic rules of construction. I can only award this failed effort 2 very generous stars.