I enjoyed this book, I liked the characters in it and look forward to reading more about them in the future.The plot is good but I don't want to go into detail and spoil it for anyone that hasn't read it yet.
This could be a good story if the author could stay on topic.
The general idea here is interesting, but there are a lot of distractions from the plot.Example - "Linda blushed at the sight of Jack she was clearly on the hunt for a relationship, and she would gladly settle for Jack". I could find no basis for this sentence, and it leads to nothing. There are a few other throw away lines like this that have no seeming connection to the plot and do nothing to enhance the story.I hope that other people with more experience of giving constructive criticism will read this story and comment as I feel that I may not have been of much help to the author, and as his idea is a good one and the story is free I think he deserves the help so we can all benefit from his future publications.