Sad and touching, but at times happy and full of hope. A wonderful collection of emotional poems. My only qualm -- and it's not really, strictly a "qualm", per se -- is that I don't believe you have to have religion to have spirituality, to feel a part of the universe and valued, valuable and needed by the rest of the world: you just have to be you. A lot of the poems are very sad and I think the thing you have to remember when you read them is that they are to make you think. Merely because others don't -- or have trouble showing -- that they care (or even love) you, doesn't mean that you aren't loved: you should always love yourself enough to care what happens to you and how your actions reverberate through the world and the people/living beings that you interact with. Loving yourself doesn't have to mean you're "in love" with yourself, but you've got to acknowledge yourself and realise that just because it's coming from you, that doesn't make it okay if the sentiment is meant to hurt and debilitate. Life and the very act of living and feeling can hurt, but not all pain has to be destructive, debilitating pain. And if no one else cares for you, or you feel that they don't, then it's not because you shouldn't be cared for -- you should always care for yourself -- and the future is a mystery. Anything can happen. Even change. You may, in the most unlikely moment, meet someone you can really care for and who really cares for you. You are never alone in the world. If you are alive, you are a part of all Life and the physical things and processes that facilitate life. In life, I think tolerance has to be one of your best assets. Tolerance allows you to learn and love, not matter what anyone else tells you. Everything you feel inside is real for you; it's real. It's saying something to you -- someone or something is saying something to you, either you or someone you know and think about, in the front or the back of your mind. Your feelings matter. Why, then, wouldn't anyone else's? You don't have to be alone in this world -- you aren't alone!
These poems made me think about something I don't think about a whole lot -- the way some people relate to the world and how, even though they might have many labels for themselves that are different to the labels others appoint themselves still, we are all basically the same, in a good way. We all have emotions and we all deal with them and handle them in different, but sometimes quite similar ways, and we all need recognition, love, safety and to live and, ideally, to learn and go on learning our whole lives (which, in truth, we do, though we may not realise). We sometimes build up walls that tell us we're different, but they're both real and unreal in varying degrees. And sometimes, the walls are for different reasons; why we label ourselves "different" is for different reasons. A way to separate ourselves from others, maybe to shield ourselves from emotional hurt and pain, but also, sometimes, to allow ourselves to feel as though we have something meaningful in our lives that we clutch onto and which sometimes ends up stilting us, too, not allowing us to see the good that we could allow into our lives by perhaps opening our minds and allowing ourselves to connect again. Life isn't always going to be glorious and joyous, but we don't have to be unhappy just because we're not "happy". Emotions are more complex than that, really, and are constantly unfolding in various shades and lights and aspects, affected by our present, future and past, as well as everyone that we know, interact with and know, hear, or read about, or even dream or someone merely from our imaginations.
Tolerance allows us to live our lives to the fullest extent and also to connect more fully. It can be a really great thing; for you, and for those around you. I think these poems are trying to point out how life can be dulled and how you can hurt yourself very badly if you don't love yourself and if you don't allow yourself to accept the past as the past and take your lesson from it and move on. And I also feel that it strongly encourages tolerance between people to foster better relationships (and understanding in relationships), whether they be romantic or not.
I am not a religious person, myself, but I am of the belief that if it makes you a better person and allows you to enjoy your life more fully and be more aware of yourself as an individual as well as one living in a community, as a part of the world, go with it -- certainly! But we don't just have one form of belief in our lives, we have many, many, and as we go on learning and living, and reflecting on our lives, we may alter our beliefs, but that doesn't make what we believe in or believed in any less important to our life's journey.
Ah... such a long review! If you find it tedious, reading it all (on a computer screen, no less!), I'll understand. Basically, I quite liked the poems. :) I know I could have brought that same thing across in less words, but a fair portion of the poems evoked such downheartedness that I just had to go off on a tangent and ramble. I know I've felt quite downheartened, myself, at times, but life isn't only about hurt and hurting. It's also about connecting with the world and with others and with ourselves (and getting to know ourselves better through our interactions with the world), and finding joy in life. Life is sadness, but also happiness: living is to have feelings. I guess that's all I meant to say. I don't know you, the author, and I might not know any of your readers (past, present or future), but I do know we're all in this world together.
Yeah, well, that's me -- rambled on enough. Shall stop now. :)
The Meat Market
on Sep. 05, 2011
**Contains Spoilers... Sort Of**
Man, that gave me the creepy crawlies! Were this listed under horror, I would definitely have given it 4 out of 5 stars, but under erotica, I feel the twist at the end kind of ruined the whole erotic element that had been built up through the start and middle. I was thinking maybe this woman would get to know one of the guys as a human being and change her mind about her coldness towards him/them, but that's not what happened. And that wasn't what you wanted to convey in your story... that's what I would have liked to have read, but it's your story.
Good job on the creepiness, though. I actually didn't see it coming. I guess it shows that I don't read a lot of horror.
Hmm... Interesting, but a little too short to really make all that much of an impression. There's quite a bit of character explanation, but the storyline is then quite simple. Though, in all fairness, I wasn't expecting it to be phenomenal at that length. There's just one thing I was confused about... was the girl that came in for the tattoo also one of Wilbur's kind?
Sad, but true. This really happens. People slowly become machines and give away their humanity and their connection to the living, breathing, feeling being inside them and those around them. I quite liked this short story, though, being a bit of a romantic, it would have been cute if he could have reconciled with his wife and helped her to see the larger truth and how she was so badly hurting herself by blindly following along with a system she didn't truly understand (or even, as it seems, want to understand).
I really liked your poems. They conveyed a lot of story in little words. In the line "...and the sea is the one we’re lost in, call Life" there's a small typo, I think. You meant "called Life", didn't you?
It drew me in slowly and made me think about what you were saying... I liked your poems. My favourite has to be "You Define Me", though I couldn't say why. I really liked this line: "Bricks as bones, you build me up again slowly". I'd love to see a larger collection of poetry from you. :)
Aw, I liked the ending! The characters weren't Barbie doll-perfect, and I think that worked well. It really leaves the reader with an impression of the characters, and wondering what's going to happen next in their lives.
Out of the three stories, I preferred the second as it offered more in the way of storyline and character development. For it being erotica, the first and third stories really didn't give enough of either of these for my complete satisfaction. There were a few typos dotted throughout too, but it wasn't so bad I couldn't go on reading.
Though it's not usually what I like to read, I thought I'd try something different, and all of the stories were okay, but I think Whip Me Harder was the standout of this collection. I really found myself thinking quite a lot about Rachel's psychological condition and wishing there was a little more background to both her's and the unnamed man's thoughts and emotions regarding their new-found relationship. I'd have liked this particular story to be longer because I felt it could really get down to exploring some serious, true-to-life issues.
I can, however, live with it being as is. So, yes, out of the three, number two was my favourite. The first and last story didn't really flesh out the characters as people enough for me, they just seemed a little too much like give-me-what-I-want machines, not that I mean to sound horrible. I just think, in real life, people can't always expect things to go down like that, and they have other motivations in life also... And sometimes the sex doesn't have to be what other people would consider mind-blowing because, in real life, there's a component to it that it's often hard to capture in stories... the emotional connection two people can have to one another that make living life just a little bit sweeter, and sometimes a little sadder. Sex is important, but in many cases it wouldn't be as... meaningful... without that emotional connection.
A relationship is about two people (or sometimes more), and I don't feel Rough Custody or Taken In The Dark really embodied this enough for my liking, or explained the reasons why this may not (exactly) be the case. I can appreciate that the female protagonists also wanted to give the guy's back as good as they got (sexually), but from my point of view... well, I see how it could be debilitating sometimes if one really, honestly did live in that sort of state. For your life, as well as your relationships. Some people may be okay with it (may see it as giving them freedom and room to live out their fantasies and find what truly satisfies them sexually), whilst others may not (who may just want to be with that one person because they love them for being a person, and not merely (or mostly) a sex object).
Lastly, I hope you don't think I was dissing your stories. I wasn't trying to, even if I ended up doing so. Sorry. They just gave me a lot to think about, and I *know* - maybe it's a side effect of high school English class, or something, but when I get started, I can analyse things to death, not always seeing the simple simplicity that a story was merely meant to be... that it's just entertainment. Sometimes I get overly attached or excited about a piece and I want it to be something more... that's just the type of weird I am.
But back to Whip Me Harder, I would love, love, *love* more of this story! I guess it just speaks to me. And the ending - gulp! I definitely didn't see that coming. I don't know what to think about that comment, truthfully. It sorted gave me chills but I could also see it in a potentially romantic light, too. (I'm a bit of a romance junkie, eep!) Call me old-fashioned, stuck-up, or whatever.
Do keep writing, though; I can see something really touching (and possibly quite raw) happening in the future. :-)
Rough Custody - 3.5 Stars, Whip Me Harder - 4.5 Stars; Taken in the Dark - 3.5 Stars.
Overall - 4 Stars.
I liked this story, just not as much as your other story I read, Spank Me, Senator! I don't really know why, but maybe it was because Sami and Evan were already a couple and weren't getting to know about each other for the first time and already knew a lot of stuff about each other emotionally and psychologically. Can't really explain it, but it was okay, just not super excellent for me. For others? Who knows?
An absolutely fantastic addition to the series; expect more twists, more angst, and more love! Much, much more! I enjoyed this instalment as much as the first, and gladly look forward to the next, Because The Night. ;)
I enjoyed the development / lead up in this short story, and because of this and that I liked the characters, I would have liked to see more of the characters and their relationship. In the later parts of the story, the tense seemed to change and there were a few typos. Overall, I thought it was very sweet.
As I got to know these characters, I felt as though I wanted to know them better and to read more about their lives; it would be nice to read about them in future stories. I liked "Goddess Oya" and "Happy Birthday, Mr. President" best, my favourite being about Oya and Adam.
Con crit: There were some instances where the tense changed from present tense to past tense and then where the person changed from third to first (mainly in "Goddess Oya"). I think a second edit would really help here.
This was somewhat sad, but a good revenge story. I would be interested to learn more about the female character; for example, what made her so hardened against the world.
In the way of constructive criticism, the spelling of Conner's name changed a few times; I think it was even Craig at one point, unless I was confusing the characters.
** This review could contain spoilers **
I enjoyed this short story about a young woman and the Slender Man. If you like kinky, quirky, quite possibly freaky and most definitely sexy tales of monster sex, you’ll enjoy this one, and it comes complete with a happy ending. Sigh.
This short story is the first in a new series about a scientist, Liz, and her creation, Seph. It’s a little bit dubious consent, and a little bit Whoa Nelly! I enjoyed it all, and look forward to the second story in the series.
I liked this, because even though it was fictional, it was also truthful in a whole range of different ways. The author didn’t make it needlessly fluffy or try to gloss over the harsh realities; she said what she wanted to say and she did it well. If you like darker stories, this story has that and more. If you’re not easily rattled, I encourage you to give it a go. You may not end up liking it as such, but it might just open your eyes (with a side order of invisible but not imaginary gentleness, or perhaps I mean grace) and let you come to care about these characters who could be people you know, or people just like you and I. If you do, just be prepared: you might find it heavier than you expected. And yes, this story is fiction, but the idea behind it was (and is) not.
** I received this eBook free with a coupon from the author **
An intriguing beginning to what promises to be another sexy, dark and utterly hardcore series. I especially enjoyed the interactions and power play between Kelly and the tentacle demon, and I look forward to reading the next in the series. I give Defiled a rating of four and a half stars.
This last installment in the Escape from the Tentacle Demons series was something of a rollercoaster ride for me. Finally, I settled on feeling an understanding for how it all turned out. I have to say, this girl is tough! Five stars, and a high five for Kelly! You go, girl!
** Spoiler Alert **
These short stories come with a twist. They’re impregnation erotica (or breeding erotica), and they’re romance, but not as most of us would be likely to think of it…
In “Breeding Her by the Beach”, a story told entirely from the tentacle monster’s point-of-view, it’s the monster who is in love with the female character, a young human woman. The monster definitely has the billionaire thing happening, let me tell you!
In “Sacrificed to the Kraken”, we don’t really get a picture of the monster’s character (as such), though he/it manages to maintain an ever-present sense of power, menace and awe, especially over the heroine’s character. The romance comes from her desire to… how can I put this… to prostrate herself to her god? To fulfill his desires in gratitude for his… hmm… All right, so she doesn’t have a lot of choice, either way. But that can be… empowering, or liberating, in a way. And there’s also the allure of a powerful (and possibly lustful) character.
And lastly, in “Slave to the Tentacle Alien”, we have something completely different. Dominance, submission, and one massive clash of cultures. It’s complicated. Yes, that’s as much as I’m going to say… complicated!
I enjoyed these stories, I was hanging out for a continuation for a short while, and then I reminded myself… ah, impregnation erotica. With a side of romance. It’s about the impregnation!
And on that count, these three short stories certainly deliver!
An intriguing, sexy beginning to a new series by Dalia Daudelin, featuring Hemera, a beautiful mind-controlled assasin. With so many delicious possibilities, I'm certainly interested to see where this series goes!
An enjoyable read, though I had to question the feasibility of the "first time" protagonist's bedroom skills with her playmate/lab partner, Alice. If you enjoy tales of college girls who are just a bit nerdy and slightly spooky and unselfconscious, and sexy, edgy, kinky experiments, then you'll love College Lesbian Bondage. I give it four and a half stars!
Spooky, kooky, dark and twisted, Victim will leave you asking yourself, Did I enjoy it, could I enjoy it? This is a tale of darkness and depravity and bizarrely addicting erotic horror. Try it, if you're feeling brave, and decide for yourself!
SPOILERS MAY BE PRESENT!
A sweet love story!
Con crit: The tenses shift a bit, between past and present. Other than that, I would have liked the story to be longer to really encompass the love story between these two characters and, perhaps, to show a little more of their chemistry. I did really like this story, though. It made me think of Lead Me Into Temptation. It's just a really sweet love story, with some sadness and some happiness, and a happy ending. You also really get a sense of the heroine and feel that she is a real person which is why I would have loved for the ending to have been fleshed out some more because I liked the characters so much. :)
I give Hello, Nurse! four and a half stars.
It was OK but it didn't really grab me. I'm interested to see where the series goes from here, though. It's often a good idea to read the series stories consecutively or to buy the bundle so that you can read them in one sitting for a better understanding of the story's flow and connection to the characters. All in all, it was an OK setup story, just not terribly enthralling, and I'll see what follows on from it.
An OK story, though I have to admit, I do prefer romantic stories with a happy ending but that's just me. This feels like an interesting beginning for a dramatic, intriguing series itself. ;) I give it three and a half stars.
An intriguing work blending erotic and psychological elements as these two dominant young women battle it out - there's fighting, there's definitely spoiled rich girl 'tude and temper tantrums, and there's hot and nasty rough sex! To be honest, I'd very much like to see a continuation of Kandee and Jessica's story as the characters' complicated dynamics intrigued me that much!
With elements of erotic horror and psychological drama, Lesbians in the Basement is set in a world similar to our own but not entirely the same, I sense. The characters and scenarios are intriguing, though I would have liked to see a longer story where the emotion was developed more strongly for a truly immersive experience. I give it three and a half stars.
I found myself endeared to Shyla and Walter's story in an odd way, despite it being an acquired taste, though I only mean that in the kindest possible way. It was hilarious and lewd and a bit disturbing, but I liked it and the writing is good - you just want to keep reading. I did wonder if you might write a sequel where Shyla and Walter come to care for one another as equals rather than merely objects of desire, particularly with Shyla and her husband seemingly being such a bad fit for one another... I enjoy love stories and I sensed the potential here. :-) I give it four and a half stars!
As with such stories as Government Hooker and Roll In The Hay, Lust For My Sister is told in the style of a confession, though it feels more involving somehow. The story is quite engaging and the characters are intriguing. I’d definitely like to see this re-released under the author’s newest pen name, along with its sequel, Meeting Master, which I look forward to reading. I give it three and a half stars.
Fucking On The Astral Plane is essentially a story about a woman becoming concerned with her recurring dreams and learning to master the art of lucid dreaming in order to solve the mysteries of her dreams. It has strong fantasy elements and is set almost exclusively in the female protagonist’s dreamscape. It’s not terribly complicated, but not terrible, either. I give it three stars.
*Original review posted on Amazon.com; story received free from the author via her mailing list*
I was initially hesitant to review this short story because I, for whatever reason, didn't feel an immediate connection between the couple. I guess I just don't get that romantic vibe that signals why or even that the heroine has fallen in love with the hero, let alone so quickly. I get that he's reckless and rich and seriously gorgeous, but the characters' interactions just fall flat for me. I did, however, enjoy reading about the female friendships, as clichéd as they seemed to me, being that all three of the women confessed to having similar experiences as the heroine, i.e. falling in love and seriously considering leaving the business / lifestyle. The sex, also, seemed kind of... hmm, to me. Especially the knife play. But I suppose, being that the story is told from the female's point of view and she's new to the whole kink, we don't really get enough of a sense or taste of the eroticism of the act. (I assume the hero finds it erotic, in any case.) I give it three and a half stars. It just didn't do it for me, which is not to say somebody else would feel the same way. Would I recommend it to anyone else? If you enjoy billionaire erotica, why not?
Not So Easy A has plenty of sex and angst, but I personally would have liked to see a little of Lacy and Jack outside of their "lessons", in their everyday, day-to-day lives as I feel it would have given me a greater connection to their characters and allowed us to see the characters' personalities that much better. Aside from this, I liked this story.
Blood, gore and sex galore, Ravished by the Mutilated Lesbian Zombie Queen is sometimes shocking, at times lewd, and often moving. You'll find yourself rooting for Rachel in this bleak, horror-filled world. I know I was! I give it four and a half stars.
One for the fans! Dinner and a Show is a dish of a short story, bursting with sexy, edgy lesbian goodness and sweetly zinging with a hint of romance! Got a craving? There's plenty of naughty here! Go on, satisfy yourself. It's three and a half stars from me.
A few minor typos, nothing major though. Traffic Cop Gender Swap is a straightforward story of a gender swap encounter brought on by, uh oh, popping the wrong pill. I would have liked to have gotten more of a sense of Dave's character, a flavour, I guess, but I didn't mind the story. I wouldn't mind reading a sequel, maybe something dealing with how mundane Dave's life was and how he'd started to crave something different and was unable to forget the encounter or who it was with. I give it three and a half to four stars.
Sexy and sweet in one! A slow burn leading to a heated crescendo, and a pleasant lingering warmth. A few typos; nothing major. I give it four and a half stars. After a hiatus, I'm glad to see Annabeth writing again and hope Her Turn at Bat won't be the last we see of her work. :)