martinlongbow

Smashwords book reviews by martinlongbow

  • Salesman 2: Betty Maclayne Revamp on March 01, 2023
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    Very well written story. Sex scene was intense and in good detail. High quality story. Now, there was not really anything dark, sex was based on love which is not i am a big fan of. I prefer something sinister. Blackmail, coercion, some reluctance at least at the beginning. Also i would make hank a bit younger, maybe 20. So that betty is still sexy at 40+ though 50 is also acceptable. Hope in next story there is a threesome with angie. I understand your concept is based on salesman so each story is different. That is interesting but then each may not attract same people. Something to keep in mind.
  • Salesman 2: Betty Maclayne Revamp on March 01, 2023

    Very well written story. Sex scene was intense and in good detail. high quality story. Now, there was not really anything dark, sex was based on love which is not i am a big fan. I prefer something sinister. Blackmail, coercion, some reluctance at least at the beginning. Also i would make hank a bit younger, maybe 20. So that betty is still sexy at 40+ though 50 is also acceptable. Hope in next story there is a threesome with angie. I understand your concept is based on salesman so each story is different. That is interesting but then each may not attract same people. Something to keep in mind.