I read your free ebook and I have to say, I was on my toes the whole time...I couldn't seem to stop reading and at points my heart was beating really fast. Amazing writing.
Committed: A Short Story
on Aug. 21, 2011
So I read you're short story and I really, really liked it. I thought it was really well written and you got into the Robert character pretty well. The only thing I think I would have liked is if you had explained more about how Layla committed suicide. If Robert was so obsessed with his friend's suicide I would think that he would think about how exactly she did it. I know I did that when a friend of mine committed suicide.
Other than that I thought it was a great short story and you are a very talented writer.
This is a good story and I think it could be even better if you make it a little longer. I was kind of confused about why everyone was writing in her journal because you never mention shelly was sick or anything. I'm not sure if you purposely did that or what but I got confused. Still it's a great story and I think you can make something really good out of it if you wanted to extend it a little. Good luck and happy writing!
Other World By Garden Urthark
The book, which follows the character Moody Santo is an original story of a man with a mental illness who is trying to fit in with society. However, he has delusions which inhibit his ability to adapt into what most would consider “normal society.” In addition, he performs heroic acts.
This was a very interesting, mainstream book. It is definitely one of the only types of books I have ever read. I immediately connected with the main character and felt for him as he tries to avenge his brother’s death and deal with his illness. What I liked most was that you didn’t know if the character was performing said heroic acts on his own accord or if his mental illness contributed to this.
I also like how the love interest was present in the book to top off of his other problems. It made the character seem more fleshed out and real. During times you could imagine the character being a normal man in society and then in other times his mental illness was so apparent it was startling.
This book kept me on my toes the whole time and I think Garden Urthark is a very talented author.