I enjoyed this quick read. A curiosity though is that it reads like a memoir (though listed as suspense.) I am going to assume that English is not Dhanraj P native tongue, though he writes very well in it, the piece has some grammatical issues that could be cleaned up a bit. It did not detract from my enjoyment of the story, however.
I would have liked more detail and suspense buildup describing what Ramesh may have seen and how it affected him.
Cool story. I thought the first half was excellent. (Check out Richard Matheson's "Hunted Beyond Reason" sometime). Great suspense building. EXCELLENT gut curdling scene.
I got a little bogged down in the middle sequence, the back and forth from one character to the next became a little confusing and slowed down the flow.
I thought the ending was good. I don't want to comment too much on that and spoil any one else's fun.
Good job man. I was, as you hoped, entertained.
Fantastic Short Story. Prison is hell, and in the torments of an iron box in Belize, Jakob discovers just how deep and bizarre that hell is. Its like "A Day In The Life Of Ivan Denisovitch" if Ivan's prison camp was nestled into Dante's underworld.
Highly Recommend checking this one out.
Cool setting and story, though not as tightly written as "Quickly In and Quickly Out". Combine the pace and flow of QIQO with the story line of "And There Were No Cars on the Road" and you got a great read. The writer has a good mind, and is going to hit a home-run soon. I'll keep reading.
Fantastic short story. Absolutely fantastic. It had a certain classic feel to the narration...can't quite place it right now...Gogol-esque perhaps. All I know is that it's past midnight because I couldn't stop reading it...and my head is swirling from the tale.
Do yourself a favor and download this...and be ready to digest it slowly. There are some great lines in this piece.
The Night Walk Men
on Aug. 10, 2010
Finally came to me...the voice is reminiscent of the narrator from Dostoevsky's "Notes From Underground" with a twist of Neil Gaiman thrown in for kicks.
I am the last person on the planet who would be able to critique poetry, but I do know that I enjoyed this collection. Dark and musical. The poems worth reading again and again?: "Dark Horse Pictures", "Unfrogs/Prefrogs" and "evil".