This story started off great—good set-up, a compelling plotline that made me want to keep reading and interesting characters (although the latter could have been a bit more developed—and there was potential, had the story been longer). The writing is excellent, truly good stuff and I do want to read more by this author because of the clear talent she exhibits.
That said, I was very disappointed by the rushed feeling of the ending—there’s a lot of excellent, interesting set-up, but the ending is wholly unsatisfying. A story with this much set-up and back story deserves a better payoff. This story could have easily been drawn out into a longer piece of work, especially with all of the background/back story.
Therefore, the ending is not only a letdown (what I call a “brick wall story”—you come to the end so abruptly you feel like you’ve hit a brick wall face first at dead run… and that’s not fun) but it’s a real disservice to the story itself. I know that seems a strange thing to say, but the rushed quality of the ending suggests to me that either (A) the author didn’t know how to proceed (though I find that hard to believe given her writing ability in the first ninety seven percent of the story) or (B) the author got tired of writing the story and so wrapped it up in a rather haphazard fashion when she should’ve put it aside for a little while then came back to it when she was ready to go on.
All-in-all, I give this story three stars because of the truly lackluster and slapped together ending and yet, I’ve also found a new writer whose work I am eager to explore more of. Therefore, this piece falls into “middle of the road” territory for me overall.
(review of free book)