I really do like this novel, but I'm only giving it a 3-1/2 star rather than a 4 star (saving the 5 stars for the Dan Brown/JK Rowling/Taylor Caldwell-type authors). The writing is good, the plot is very good, the characters are likable or unlikable; the problem is, the book severely needs copy editing. If the author can't afford a professional proofreader, I suggest brushing up on some basic proofing skills, especially possessives. There are dozens and dozens and dozens of possessive errors, which is distracting. I kept going because I was enjoying the story, but others may just stop reading. Please, dear author, don't be discouraged by my suggestions. You're a very good writer with a great story to tell. But it lacks professionalism when you don't seem to know the difference between goddess, goddesses, goddess's, goddesses'; family, families, family's, families'; also lay and lie, hanger and hangar, etc. And, decide which spelling you'd like to keep: Jophiel or Joffiel, and then change every one to that spelling. Oh, and would it be possible to put a Hyperlink between the characters list at the beginning and, say, the character in the title of each chapter? I was getting confused trying to remember who the good guys and bad guys are. The story is quite complex, which is super, but I need a bit of help sometimes.
I will be buying the second book of the series (and probably more), because I MUST know what happens! It's that good, so please don't be disheartened. It simply needs proofreading, and with e-books, it is either the author's responsibility, or you must hire a professional (not an acquaintance who 'seems good at that stuff).
I wish you well, and hope you keep writing. Thanks!
(review of free book)