Melinda Brasher spends her time writing fiction, traveling, and teaching English as a second language in places like Poland, Mexico, the Czech Republic, and Arizona. Her short fiction and travel writing appear in Ellipsis Literature and Art, Enchanted Conversation, International Living, and others. Visit her online at www.melindabrasher.com.
S. M. White
on Oct. 20, 2014 :
This is an introduction tale to a longer story, one in which the antagonist "Chaos" is introduced. While there were high points within the story, moments of imagery, strong characterization, and emotion, I came away feeling that the story was incomplete. My main gripe is the magic system and how it was used in the resolution to the conflict. Not only was I confused as to how the magic worked, but it was also unclear as to how the setting at that point played out, as well as how the villain was actually "defeated." Without giving too much away, I came away with the feeling that the fight was taking place in an open area and that the villain somehow couldn't see the protagonist and the protagonist's "army." The ending felt forced and rushed and lost me in terms of suspended belief. It gets three stars simply because there are glimmers of a wonderful story waiting to come out. But it needs more thought, more work, and more flesh for the bones.
(review of free book)
on March 31, 2014 :
Hala (16, magic-wielder) was picking rumpelberries when a hill tiger started to approach her. The healer attended to the bite. Hala loved animals of all kinds (Patchy, Beetle, Applesauce, Stinky, Carpet, Stumble, Onion).
Cool book cover, great font & writing style. A very well written delightful fun filled teen fantasy short story (book). It was very easy to read/follow from start/finish & never a dull moment. No grammar errors, repetitive or out of line sequence sentences. Lots of exciting scenarios & a great set of unique characters. This could make a great teen fantasy movie, animated cartoon or mini TV series. No doubt in my mind a very easy rating of 5 stars for this short story (book).
Thank you for the free short story (book)
Tony Parsons MSW (Washburn)
(review of free book)