on Feb. 27, 2016 :
Not overly good, bad or original. I felt kind of lost in early parts of the story, the age of the couple and the cause of death, seemed like they should have been presented earlier in the story.
(review of free book)
on Aug. 17, 2014 :
A good short story. Good plot, and the spelling, punctuation and grammar were all immaculate. It probably needs a little tighter editing; too much detail is simply told instead of being shown. The opening sentence goes on forever trying to cram in lots of details which would soon get revealed anyway in the next few lines. Meanwhile, some essential details are completely absent: for example, Elizabeth - what does she look like? How old is she? What kind of person is she?
Despite its flaws, the story still works, so I'll be generous and give it a 4, but it could be so much better.