I thought this story was very sweet. My only problem with it is that the quotations need to be separated out so that the reader knows who is talking at what time.
Also, maybe instead of skipping to "three years later", summarize what happened in the meantime, because it seems like the story had a bit of a gap in it.
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Elizabeth James reviewed
on Aug. 4, 2011
I read your short story and found it to be very simple but uplifting in whats a sad world. On reading this work I then read your book reflections, I think we have all looked in that mirror. Then I read your profile and I just wanted to say well done, keep it up.