This story had some potential. The writer could have done something different with the world and the characters. I still think it could have been edited and polished a lot more than it was. I don't care about a few grammatical errors, especially if they're just typos. Those don't usually make the story harder to read.
However, in this case, the technical flaws actually did make this fairly straightforward story harder to read that it should have been, and that's an issue.
I would also like to tell something to all werewolf writers: there is no rule that says that werewolves have to mate for life and be creepily bonded to people that they barely know and only love on a bizarre pseudo-biological chemical level.
Really. I feel like every werewolf story written in the last ten years seems to operate under that assumption. It's as if the writers think that this is as fundamental to werewolf stories as the transformation part. It isn't.
This story honestly doesn't have much to it other than that trope, and that's a big problem.
The strong macho jerk and the insecure girl who barely know each other and become obsessed with each other anyway can't have compelling conversations. They don't know each other well enough for that and they don't have enough in common for that. In a dialogue-heavy romance story, this just means that they're going to gush about each other a lot.
This setup is painfully reactionary. The urban fantasy genre is full of competent heroines saving the world. The paranormal romance genre is full of insecure heroines giving up their lives for horrible macho men. Someone needs to write a crossover where urban fantasy heroines save paranormal romance heroines.
I like romance, but if all it does is affirm macho, sexist values, it's actively bad.
The idea that you will die when your partner dies is horrifying, not romantic. Even if you love your partner, living in fear that they will die and take you with them would poison the relationship. The fact that some people actually make this wish fulfillment is a huge problem.
Werewolf stories don't have to be like this, and I have no idea why people think that they should.
(review of free book)