Location: United States
Member Since:
May 04, 2011
David Majlak
Biography
If you've somehow found me here after all these years, I couldn't really say if it's for good or bad reasons. I'd suppose for good, but, life is strange.
None of my works, should you have them, have ever used AI. Not a single kilobyte, letter, or pixel.
Stay well and keep fighting the good fight.
None of my works, should you have them, have ever used AI. Not a single kilobyte, letter, or pixel.
Stay well and keep fighting the good fight.
Books
Smashwords book reviews by David Majlak
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Two Shorts (High Fidelity & Christmas Oratorio)
on July 16, 2011
Well written, though I would suggest you chose your locations for digressions more wisely. Putting one inside of another completely throws me off and severs my interest in the story. Also, going from the woman is falling to the woman is kissing you is a somewhat glaring inconsistency. Find some better names, something memorable for the Joneses, and you'll have quite an interesting story. You did well, to pull me into the story in the beginning, and then it sort of falls apart a bit. Keep up the good work though, just needs some more polish.
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The Ballerina
on July 16, 2011
The plot is well developed, the introduction needs to be more descriptive and clear, and the punctuation and grammar needs some work. Otherwise with a little practice you'll do quite well.