on April 06, 2012
I thought it was a great story! There was just something so matter of fact about the narrative, that the shock sneaked up on me! The "voice" I was hearing up til then was complacent and slightly pleasant. I went back, re-read the last 2 pages, and substituted another "voice" for effect; didn't work to make me as uncomfortable as that very sane, cheerful narration! Tobias was a hoot, but Trisha was awesome.