Narlen and Eveline Evans have been happily married for 41 years. They live in the Central Texas area. Narlen is retired and now spends all his time on trike building, woodcarving, and volksmarching. They wrote this short story together. It was his idea and her wordsmithing that brought "Triker Christmas" together. Since then they wrote a sequel called "Triker Christmas 2" and also "Big Bend Adventure".
This was my first video book read. I was surprised at how quickly I forgot I wasn't turning a paper page as your love story held my interest. You have a way with words. Great book.
Christmas' Best Bet, Humble Pie a novella
on June 11, 2012
Quite an interesting story. Has a lot of grammar errors and missing words, but it was interesting enough it keep me going until the finish.
Sheriff Gregg & The Painted Lady
on June 11, 2012
his boots up on the wooden balcony? Don't you mean porch railing? Could be a good story but the poor formatting lost me before I found out. Also the fake country dialogue was off putting.
I particularly enjoyed the artwork. Very cute. The story was also cute and one I know my grandchildren would enjoy. However the formatting of the text isn't pretty. It runs together and doesn't break right.
Interesting story it had me hooked from the start. I don't know if I'm disappointed or relieved that their is an "open" ending. Depending on your outlook you can choose how you want the story to end. Being a romantic, I think they ended up "happily ever after" together.
Enjoyed revisiting high school. Glad my generation didn't have "modern technology" to muck it up worse then it was. Good read, held my interest, and as John Belliveau said it needs an editor to fix the errors.
I read this book in two days. I really enjoyed reading it, turning each page eagerly to see what was going to happen next. Being self published it has some minor editorial errors, but not enough to distract for the story.
It has the makings of a good book. Lots corrections needed to grammar and spelling. I can only suggest that the author read it out loud to herself so she will catch the mistakes, or have someone edit it for her. Needs more character development and scene description to round out the story.
on Jan. 02, 2014
The story sounded interested but sorry to say I didn't make it past the first couple pages. The style in which it is written is just not my "cup of tea".
Mystery on Maple Hill
on Jan. 02, 2014
I enjoyed your story. I only have one problem with it. Since when are beavers trapped during the summer. Their pelts would have no value at that time of year.
While the book is very good it has room for improvement to make it more believable.
When Victoria is buying her ticket, there would be many stops between Meadows, Mo and Mobile, Al. Therefore she would need to tell the ticket agent that she wanted to go to the “end of the line” would she not?
The trip (even today) would take over 29 hours. Should not some mention be made of this fact?
There is no direct train from Mobile Al to anyplace in Montana. They would have to have changed trains with a layover somewhere (Probably TN). Again the time to get to TN would be 20 hours and from there to Montana another 54. (Again this is Amtrak time so no telling how long the 1902 train would have taken).
The sheep ranch (not farm) would be outside of town so they would have to have been picked up by someone in a carriage.
Dropping off the baby with her mother…. Victoria is someplace in the North on a river boat and she leaves the baby with the Captain! Not workable. She said her mother’s boarding house was west of Mobile which would probably put it in Mississippi. But the end of the Mississippi River is New Orleans, LA. Even the most accommodating boat captain would not travel very far with an infant.
There are other errors like ease dropping should be eavesdropping. Twice there is quite when it should be quiet. Repeatedly residence is used when residents is meant.
But the story like is terrific. Congratulations on publishing your first Smashwords book.