Ernest Winchester

Heart On Fire on Aug. 04, 2010

Oh, God. Another boss fucks the hot secretary tale, who of course was eager to get his big dick after hours. Well at least the author threw in a little extra--he's also a werewolf. Ho-hum.

Required for Business on Aug. 09, 2010

Short but predictable.

Jake on Aug. 09, 2010

Oh God, how silly.

A Lady Pays Her Penalties on Aug. 15, 2010

My God, where to start. If you ever assumed that a sadist was always on one end of a cane or torture device and a masochist had to be on the other, then this twisted story will certainly dispel that notion. In this case they both reside in the same sick mind. I can't elaborate on the array of pain inducing methods described in it, but I will say that at the end that I was relieved. I can't say more for fear of giving away something that troubled me until the end, so enough said.

Bleep! on Aug. 16, 2010
(no rating)
Hot but scary. I must remind myself what the twenty-second amendment is all about.

Bleep! on Aug. 16, 2010

Okay, I’m back. The twenty-second amendment doesn’t actually apply to this story, it only limits the president and not congress, but I’m being picky. I know what the writers are trying to say. I’ve been trying to send one of my little gems to Smashword but I can’t get it to work so maybe the law referred to in this story is blocking it. Too bad.

Hannah's Choice on Aug. 16, 2010

Taking heed from the other reviews, I only read the first few pages and the next ad. Incredibly hot physical exam. In all the decades since I read of the ‘G’ spot, I’ve encountered few women who seemed to like it massaged and only one who actually squirted. But I keep hoping for more.

The Englisher Seduction on Aug. 16, 2010

Sick insult to Mennonites.

Savoring Master on Aug. 16, 2010

It's too cerebral. Just a degree short of tedious.

Delicia Marie and the Saran Wrap Affair on Aug. 16, 2010

Nice! A very good read. It's too bad they can't make it more together but they're probably making the right choice. Damn, I hope I didn't ruin it for the next reader.

That One Night in Vegas on Aug. 17, 2010

All this hot sex and nobody paid. Now I know it's fiction.

My Pal The Bug #1: For They Know Not... on Aug. 19, 2010

Okay as far as si-fi goes.

Canary (a short story) on Aug. 22, 2010

Well written but a little weak on motivation.

Michael Gets a Harem on Aug. 26, 2010

Too much verbiage and yet she stopped at the end saying she had gone too far. How silly.

The Stable Hand on Aug. 26, 2010

Sorry, but this story is totally lacking logic. Many decades ago when I was twelve, I wrote a short story and I'm sure it was as bad as this one. (I don't remember if I finished it.) Erin, keep this story. In ten years you'll get a laugh out of it.

Right Round on Aug. 26, 2010

What, no boiled pet rabbit?

No Orpheus on Aug. 27, 2010

Sorry, but the story doesn't seem to match the description. Not very well. Too many things that didn't match anything.

Hypnotizing Chickens on Aug. 27, 2010

Well written story, but I sure would have liked knowing who they were going to 'pop' and why. Too bad it wasn't the racist bastard.

Santa's Claws & Steven, Space Stowaway on Aug. 27, 2010

I read a very similar story many years ago, but with a much grimmer ending. A young girl had to be jettisoned in outer space so that an already stripped down ship could make a much needed run with essential medicine. I'm glad this one had a happy ending.

What Would Junie B. Jones Do? on Sep. 09, 2010

A very good story, although I could have done without the all-caps style. And I won't even mention the errors--oops, I already did. But it was only three, I think. I was absorbed so with the story, I didn't notice much.

Ghost Hand on Sep. 10, 2010

Ghost and ghoulies and things that go hiss in the night.

The Eighth Sacrament on Sep. 10, 2010

I am delighted to be the first, of what I’m sure will be many, reviews of this wonderful story. It is so refreshing to read something that is devoid of typos and other errors that so many other works have, my own included. The only criticism I have is, it is way too short. The author has enough plot and charters for a full novel and I can only hope that is what she is aiming toward. Keep up the good work!

Jon...A Desperate Prequel on Sep. 10, 2010

Great story. I was so engrosed I wasn't even looking for typos.

Miles from Ireland on Sep. 10, 2010

A very touching and sweet story.

Adagio on Sep. 11, 2010

Intended to be poignant, I'm sure, but it's only sad.

Les ombres de la nuit on Sep. 11, 2010

Annoyingly pretenious.

The Cowboy's Wish on Sep. 14, 2010

Titillating, but not what you’d call erotica, partner. But the humor makes up for it. I would love to see who wears out first. I suspect they are a good match.

Still Virgin on Sep. 14, 2010

I hate to be the first to review this, because I'm not sure what I think about it. I will say, it's different.

Windy Pudding: A Chuck & Wayne Adventure on Sep. 15, 2010

Cute, in a funny sort of way.

The Three Space Ships on Sep. 18, 2010

The author should have not used the name Gruff in the first sentence, it was a dead giveaway. However, it is a cute rendition.

Chelsea on Sep. 20, 2010

A short anecdote, cute but saying little.

The Games We Play on Sep. 20, 2010

What a delightful short story. I loved it.

Robbing Honey on Sep. 22, 2010

I almost feel as if I should recuse myself from passing judgment on this story after the kind words the author tended toward me regarding my upcoming surgery. I take this opportunity to thank her again for those words. The story is a sweet slice of life, denoting the change of family status between a young boy and his now unfamiliar role of brother-in-law. The narrative is well written (although I wonder at the lack of spaces between sentences.) Could this be a formatting problem with a copying program?

Caring for the Elderly on Sep. 22, 2010

A different view of Southern hospitality.

Old Men & Young Virgins: From Adam On on Sep. 23, 2010

I usually only go after the free stuff, stories that is, but I just had to read this one so I bought it. I liked the reference to John Updike’s ‘Rabbit’ series as I have just completed reading the novels in the last year. (Although Rabbit died at a younger age than I am.) And being an old man, I can identify with the men mentioned in this amusing little essay.

Science Fiction Pornography on Sep. 25, 2010
(no rating)
I shouldn't review this. I only read the first two and couldn't make any sense of it so I quit.

It's the Eyes on Sep. 26, 2010

Cute. But as the oldest brother in my family, I winced, trying to remember how I treated my younger brothers.

Variety of Shorts: Collection of 'Short' Works on Sep. 26, 2010

An eclectic group of short stories. Well written and at least literate, which is more than I can say for a lot of works listed here.

Paths on Sep. 27, 2010

A nice idyllic path to all the paths taken in life.

Killing Max on Sep. 29, 2010

This story gave me whiplash. I didn’t start catching on until the middle but I’ll say no more about that other than say the world is full of 'ifs,' some bigger than others. Another great story from S. Wolf.

Bury The Past on Oct. 14, 2010

Beautiful, heart-rending story.

Love Never Dies on Oct. 30, 2010

A well written, sex for the senior set, story with an ending I don't want to give away, so I won't.

A Mother's Day to Remember on Oct. 31, 2010

Amusing read. Well worth two minutes of anyone's time.

Immortal Blush on Nov. 04, 2010

I thought the author was delaying describing the dilemma the goddess was in for dramatic effect. To not reveal it at all was very irritating. I didn’t like that at all.

Erotica Author Bares All on Nov. 08, 2010

I was fortunate to download this delightful story when it was free, but I would have gladly paid. A great story well worth the price when one is placed on it. Lots of sex as usual from this prolific author. Job well done.

Lust in the Dust on Nov. 10, 2010

A short, hot and well written story. Too bad it didn't include any of the other nights.

Whet Appetites Of Virtual Strangers on Nov. 16, 2010

Another slippery, juicy, gushing, cum filled tale from the master of the genre.

Madeleine's Life, A Short Story on Nov. 17, 2010

A poignant story of family loss and adjustment.

Fun With Dick on Dec. 04, 2010

Way, way, too much sugar, chocolate, whipped cream, cinnamon, syrup, eggnog, chocolate sauce and other sticky stuff for my taste. Ew. His teeth should rot out.

Erotic Tales: Ride A Cock Horse (Revised) on Dec. 08, 2010

A Sybian for the aristocracy!

The Comfort of a Woman on Dec. 09, 2010

Wow! Not quite what I expected. But deeply satisfying none the less.

With A Little Yelp From My Friends on Dec. 10, 2010

Not your usual style of training.

Die Already on Dec. 15, 2010

Strange, very strange.

Catherine's Wheel on Dec. 16, 2010

I have not read such exquisite prose in a long while. The beautiful words describing the pitiful fate of poor Damon, how he will suffer. And how he will love it.

The Cat And The Fiddle on Dec. 16, 2010
(no rating)
I should have paid closer attention to the tags of this story. If I had done so, I wouldn’t have down loaded it. The first paragraph was all I needed. I am so sick of stories where pain and submission are equated with love. I will not rate it because I don’t think my bias should come into play.

Aeroparts Factory on Dec. 17, 2010

Interesting that this story of an Aeroparts Factory should come on the anniversary of the Wright brothers’ first flight. Well written story depicting greed and skullduggery in an unlikely age.

Spore on Dec. 17, 2010

Eww!!

Well on Dec. 18, 2010

Spooky it is. Spooky and sad.

A Real Boy on Dec. 20, 2010

I can’t believe this story has been posted for a year and no one has reviewed it. But then I’ve had it downloaded for a while before I got around to reading it too. It is so funny I laughed out loud at several places and I seldom do that when I’m alone. It sure gives a new meaning to the term ‘woody’. Great job JL.

The Horror Days on Dec. 21, 2010

Bah, humbug.

A Christian Analysis Of Atheism on Dec. 22, 2010

I managed to wade through this muddled nonsense to the very end, though I don’t know why. I did find it interesting that the author sited many intelligent people whom he lists as atheists. I also found it disturbing that in the second to last paragraph, he seems to discount the occurrence of the Catholic inquisition of the middle ages. The author seems to say, 'If you're not with us, you're against us.'

Princess of Power on Dec. 22, 2010
(no rating)
I guess the first thing to determine is, who is the author? Somehow I’ve downloaded two versions of this story with two different authors. Just today. Is it Jada Wright or London Shye. Either way it is the same unremarkable story. As I started reading it the first thing to jangle my senses was the tense switching. Past tense, present tense, past tense, all within the first two paragraphs. Getting annoyed with that, I skipped down to discover that this is not a complete story. So I didn’t bother finishing reading it. The author needs lessons in composition. Also anatomy lessons. If the slave losses his penis, it is an amputation, not a castration.

My little Christmas story on Dec. 23, 2010

Sugary, but sweet enough to bring a tear to the eye. Very well done.

X is for X-mas on Dec. 24, 2010

Cute update to an old tale. The author almost had me with the red herrings.

A Gruesome Christmas on Dec. 25, 2010

Gruesome about covers it.

The Brave Tale of Maddie Carver on Dec. 26, 2010

Too confusing.

It Waits on Dec. 26, 2010

Two paragraphs do not make even a short shory.

Portrait of Bittersweet on Dec. 27, 2010

A well written but disturbing piece. Reminds one not to touch the artwork in a gallery.

Britney's Peers on Dec. 27, 2010

Ah, the girl is wise beyond her years.

Princess of Power on Dec. 28, 2010

Ashley, you are right. The current version is different from either of the two I downloaded on the twenty-second. The tense changes have been corrected. Also paragraph breakdowns. You’ll note that it was copyrighted in 2002. It seems there are more versions of this story than pseudonyms, which is okay, we writers are allowed to do that. What surprises me is, the reload didn’t strip away my review. I’ve seen writers do that. I suspect they want to get rid of unflattering reviews. Some can be so thin skinned. I’m glad this author chose not to do that. A review should be accepted for the reviewer’s opinion, flattering or not. Also, I finished reading the original version and found it rather disturbing. I wonder, also, if you read the same thing between the lines as I did at the childbirth scene. Was there a male twin born and disposed of? I can’t help wonder if Leanndra intends for the human race to die out at the end of her generation. I also wonder what time frame a ‘moon’ is. Obviously not a month, but then, we don’t know if this story is even set on planet Earth with its moon. I’ve downloaded the continuing story ‘Castle Queen,’ but haven’t read it yet. Perhaps more details will come with it. I've upgraded my rating to two stars with the corrections and look forward to reading the next segments.

A Digital Doomsday on Dec. 28, 2010

I give it three stars for humor. I don't own any of the ithings so I'm not interested in any of them. So why did I download this and read it? It was short and free. I do agree with the reader mentioned near the end of the piece. I think the entire Internet system will come crashing down soon from overload. Maybe on Dec 22, 2012. Hmmmm.

The Iceman Cometh on Dec. 29, 2010

Well, he couldn't say he hadn't been warned.

Songs of Lesser Voices-A Holiday Short Short Story on Dec. 30, 2010

They must have been really bad to not be able to sing a carol.

A Holiday Explained-A Holiday Short Short Story on Dec. 30, 2010

A short read with the ending chuckle well worth it.

Howdy, Winnie, & the Bombshell on Dec. 30, 2010

Give me a minute, I'm still trying to decode it all.

A Fish Tale on Dec. 31, 2010

A wopper of a fish story.

Stretch on Dec. 31, 2010

Well written. Tantalizingly so. But poor Lenny. He only needed a little stretch. Not…

Baking Day on Jan. 01, 2011

Too confusing to bother with.

Happy New FEAR on Jan. 01, 2011

Almost makes me glad I spent New Year's eve alone.

No Foreplay Required on Jan. 01, 2011

Ride 'm cowboy!

Juggling the three balls on Jan. 02, 2011

Not much in this short piece.

Dark on Jan. 03, 2011

Hot story but too predictable.

Canaanite Barbie on Jan. 04, 2011

Funny in a cute sort of way, or maybe it's cute in a funny sort of way.

Bone Saw on Jan. 04, 2011

I can't say much about this disturbing story without giving away the ending, but I am reminded of Egar A Poe's victum in 'The Pit and the Pendulum.'

Reunited And It Feels So Good on Jan. 05, 2011

Hot and steamy, just as you expect from this author.

A Bestiary of Unnatural Women on Jan. 06, 2011

Ashley, I have spent about an hour trying to conclude the gender of you first name before writing this review—checking your Bio first. Why? Because I don’t want to commit a faux pas (again—long story) when I speculate on something I’ve read or heard and definitely have concluded in the last few years reading erotic material on the Internet: that women write much better prose in the genre than men. Not that both sexes can’t and don’t produce total crap. They do. But this is supposed to be about your latest book, ‘A Bestiary of Unnatural Women.’ Though I’ve only read three of the stories to date—I like to savor something this good, like fine Christmas chocolates—I look forward to the other half dozen. Each of the three golden nuggets just blew me away. Having read ‘A Lady Pays Her Penalties,’ last summer, which I loved as well, and have downloaded ‘Wives in Service,’ in the fall, which I look forward to reading, I am convinced that women are the superior writers at this genre. None of your stories cross over into more than a titillating hint of porn. Keep up the good work and rest assured, when you decide to charge for it, I will gladly pay.

The Red Shoes on Jan. 06, 2011

I read this twice, trying to understand the relationship between Caleb and Jane. Not husband/wife, not father/daughter. I guess in the end it didn't matter.

The Bonds of Wedlock on Jan. 07, 2011

Such a wonderful dinner party. And the dessert, well who would have guessed? Certainly not Alan.

Tia Maria on Jan. 07, 2011

Si, Senorita and Senora. Si! Si! But a sentence or prehaps a partial paragraph seems missing near the hot scene. Por favor?

What About Bob? on Jan. 08, 2011

A story as old as the industrial age.

Cow Tipping on Jan. 08, 2011

I don't get it, man.

Dead Letters on Jan. 09, 2011

Beautiful story. Well written.

Thirty Minutes or Less on Jan. 10, 2011

A story hot enough to overlook the grammatical and word usage errors. Loved it.

Traps on Jan. 10, 2011

Okay, I read it. Now what did I read? It made no sense.

Kate and Ben on Jan. 12, 2011

A very well written story, short but touching, very touching. I wondered why the author didn’t identify the war, but then I remembered that all wars have this story. I also wonder if there was a pronoun error in the last sentence. I can’t say more.

Carl The Caterpillar on Jan. 12, 2011

I could read this to my youngest grandchild but I can’t save it. She’s in school now and will soon know about grammar, syntax and punctuation—all of which this story lacks. Also common sense. If the bird doesn’t eat, it will starve. Sorry, but that's the way life is.

One Wish on Jan. 12, 2011

I re-read the wish and it still doesn’t seem to match the fulfillment. Maybe I’ve been reading too much lately.

Circulatory System [Injustice is Served - Book 1] on Jan. 12, 2011

An eye for an eye--or in this case...

Straustrup story on Jan. 12, 2011

So I thought, one hundred fifty words. How could that go wrong. Oops!

The Bar on Jan. 12, 2011

Aside from needing to read two-thirds of this story before I had the slightest idea what it was saying, I guess it was okay--sort of.

Adopted on Jan. 14, 2011

This story did not match the description other than it was in English. Didn't like it at all.

The Vampire Across the Hall on Jan. 14, 2011

It is amusingly different, but I can’t decide if I like it or not. So I’ll give it three stars and move on. Oh, by the way, how tall is 155 cm?

X-child on Jan. 16, 2011

Very poorly written. Lacking proper grammar. I will not bother reading any further episodes.

Not Another Vampire Story on Jan. 16, 2011

Okay, ten minutes or less to read less than nine hundred words wasn't such a waste. But I get annoyed with obvious 'tease' postings.

Just a Plain Pizza on Jan. 16, 2011

Funny, in a plain sort of way.

Night On A Boat on Jan. 16, 2011

A couple of short pages. A couple of missing letters (typos?). And a bit of a timing problem. The protagonist was called out late a night, but ends by saying the sun was going down.

Stages of Invisibility on Jan. 17, 2011

Poor guy. But don't we all feel that way sometimes.

The Volunteer on Jan. 17, 2011

A slow and plodding start for such a quick and abrupt ending.

The Day The Earth Died on Jan. 17, 2011

A compelling and realistic portrayal of what many experts consider to be an inevitable phase of Earth’s existence. It—the Earth—has survived it before and may again though it’s questionable if mankind will. We can only wait to see.

Dan's Accidental Convertible on Jan. 17, 2011

A little hard to follow with the strange format but I guess that was the point. Not sure I understood the ending.

2012 on Jan. 19, 2011

Interesting, but will we be buried under 2012 stories in the next year and a half?

The Surgeon's Hearse on Jan. 19, 2011

Cute.

Peeping Tam on Jan. 24, 2011

They stopped just when the good part seemed ready to start. Oh well, maybe next time.

A Taste Of Things To Cum on Jan. 26, 2011

These two are doing so well on their own that I hate to criticize their terminology. I believe what Lance referred to as doggie style near the end of the story; the Kama Sutra calls The Reverse Cowgirl. But who am I to intervene during a good fuck.

Girls On Film on Jan. 26, 2011

As Lucy said at the end, “You have a great job.” And Darren, you did a great job of writing. Speaking of jobs, where can I learn to take pictures like that? That’s the job I want!

Manet's Picnic on Jan. 28, 2011

A clever juxtapositioning of the two parallel stories, one old, one modern, yet the same. The only complaint I have is the slip in point-of-view when twice the word ‘my’ should have been ‘her,’ unless I totally got it wrong, at the point of the story where Victoria is staging the display. But we all do it, those of us who try to arrange words in a way that makes sense.

Hosanna on Jan. 29, 2011

A bit confusing in some of its transitions early on,(which were clarified with a re-read). I had assumed that it was a slave ship but it wasn’t. Life was harsh then for so many.

Magnum Tales ~ D is for Deeply on Jan. 29, 2011

A tantalizingly well-written story of hot sex and binding love. It should last forever.

Magnum Tales ~ C is for Cum on Jan. 29, 2011

Ah, the joys of vacation sex. But damn it, I haven't read these joyful little stories in sequence so maybe I'll have to read them again. I don't mind.

Magnum Tales ~ A is for Anal on Jan. 29, 2011

A-Can be for awesome too, because this story is all of that. I would loved to have been the fly on the wall that night.

Magnum Tales ~ B is for Blowjob on Jan. 29, 2011

Boy oh boy! Don't we all dream of the mile high club. But what are the membership dues?

Thirty Minutes Till on Jan. 31, 2011

Nothing like letting passion brew for two years before sampling it again. Like fine wine it must have gotten better with age. I also wanted a chance to thank you for the reviews you have given some of my stories. They were much appreciated.

The Machines on Jan. 31, 2011

Every Si-Fi writer worth his salt has written this story. And the sad truth is, it's probably going to be true, one way or another, sooner or later.

Softly on Feb. 02, 2011

Wow! Reverend, can I borrow your hanky?

Pilgrims on Feb. 02, 2011

Short and touching.

Dispatch #47: The Taking of Signal Hill on Feb. 05, 2011

Another war the history books forgot about, and just as well.

In Her Moment Of Triumph on Feb. 06, 2011

Ah, as Ginny might have said, what a thousand words can emote, three thousand can thrice. Great picture painted with those nearly three thousand words. I did get a little confused by the change of quotation marks on the last page. And I suspect an error of gender in reference to his (her) foot when she was distorting his face. But self-editing is so difficult.

Valentin’s Day - Short story on Feb. 07, 2011

The addition at the end explained a lot—such as, why the sentence structure of the story was so awkward and hard to follow. It is a poor translation from Italian into English.

Wide Open on Feb. 09, 2011

Never one to mince words, this author starts her story full thrust, so to speak, and never lets up.

The Storm on Feb. 09, 2011

An exiting mixture of struggle and remembrance. Good tight writing, with a lot said in very few words.

A Rose for Shyla on Feb. 09, 2011

Ah, the vanity of the vain. The annoyance of the arrogant. The...hell, I can't think of any others.

What I Nearly Forgot on Feb. 10, 2011

What beautiful musing—reliving such earlier times. But please; old man as fifty-four. He’s just a young'un.

A Kiss From the Love of My Life on Feb. 10, 2011

Short and very sweet.

Magnum Tales ~ E is for Ennui on Feb. 10, 2011

Well darn. Why have I never been invited to a party like that? Hot sex everywhere.

Gray Lake on Feb. 10, 2011

Great writing and a great story.

Sex with a Shooting Star on Feb. 11, 2011

A tragic story of missed communications and incredible loss.

Special Delivery on Feb. 12, 2011

I was all set to complain that there were too many of these same stories, then had to switch to too many of the other same stories.

The Day Long Since Seen on Feb. 14, 2011

Okay I guess, if you like that sort of thing.

Pyjama Series: The Meeting on Feb. 14, 2011

Short and mildly amusing.

For Crying Out Loud! on Feb. 16, 2011

I’ve just sworn off FemDom stories but I couldn’t resist one from Severin Rossetti and I’m glad I didn’t. I was sure that the master wordsmith could tell one in a way that would enthrall the reader and I was right. Wonderfully done, as always.

The Will to Kill on Feb. 16, 2011

The will to kill was part of the motive. Revenge fueled it.

Dirt on Feb. 20, 2011

Very philosophical, this piece. A homily to the essence of mankind, and the dirt from which we came.

Odour of Fate on Feb. 22, 2011

I don’t know if I can describe this story. I don’t know if I really understand it. It is a strange juxtaposition of author and protagonist that makes this reader wonder about the mindset of the author. While it is a powerful story, it isn’t easy to read. But read it I did, and I invite others to read for their own interpretation.

The Dam on Feb. 23, 2011

Oh, damn, I mean dam. A story straight out of the Twilight Zone.

Fingering Rachel on Feb. 24, 2011

Nice tease! Two star penalty for being too short.

The Train Ride on Feb. 27, 2011

There's a bit of a mismatch between what she is thinking and what happens during Valentine's Day, not to mention what happens on the train. But otherwise, a nice smutty, quick read.

The Bloody Countess on Feb. 27, 2011

A short grisly tale of a very vile woman. By the way, an assistant in crime is an accomplice not accomplish.

Riley's Dream on Feb. 27, 2011

One incredibly hot and sexy story. The kind that almost makes me wish I were a woman to enjoy another woman the way Ava and Riley are doing.

Her Husband her Sissy Maid on March 02, 2011

This story needs some serious proofreading. In many places the wrong pronoun is used and it is not the mixture of male to female conditioning for the maid in training. There is point of view confusion here. Also, there is an implication that the detective was a ruse set up by the Madame, Rebecca. This was not resolved in the end. Some nice sex scenes, but not enough to offset the problems.

Dye, Change on March 06, 2011

Such a sweet, no make that bittersweet little story. Like the proverbial ships almost passing in the night—only bumping while passing. Will they bump again?

The Lost Girls on March 06, 2011

Lovely little story that saves me the trouble of reading Bram Stoker’s tome.

Mayberry R.F.D., the Place I Want to Be on March 07, 2011

Yes, Mayberry R.F.D. was a place to inspire pleasant thoughts. I guess we all have one place to reminisce about. I have to admit that Petticoat Junction with those lovely gals crawling out of the water tank dripping wet—well maybe those aren’t the Mayberry kind of thoughts I should have.

Midnight Snack on March 07, 2011

Very poor grammar. And Grandpa's not so healthy either.

Someone In The Wolf- A Short Prelude to "Caligulove" on March 08, 2011

Well damn. A nice sexy romp interrupted by a murder.

Cookie No! on March 08, 2011

Hey! He forgot to tell what temp to set the oven to so we can uncook them.

Indestructible on March 09, 2011

A well written but strange piece of work. Who would have believed that the angels and demons could be--well, I don't want to give it all away.

Magnum Tales ~ J is for Jealous on March 09, 2011

Okay now they're fighting. They might as well get married and make it official. But I wonder, what will X, Y, and Z be?

The Box on March 11, 2011

Hum? Is the box a allegory? I wonder.

The Way to Will on March 12, 2011

A well written story. Interesting in its presentation and really holds the reader's attention. It would be nice to know how they worked out their future.

Brigadoon Comedy Club on March 12, 2011

Well, at the author's invite, I read. I'm not sure I enjoyed, however.

A Different Kind of Death on March 14, 2011

Okay, we knew that there was a big build up to something, but now I can't say what to spoil the ending.

The Valley of the Black Pig on March 16, 2011

It's a sad world we live in. But I guess it always has been.

A Brush of Love on March 17, 2011

A sweet, touching story of what might have been--but was not.

Chat to Death on March 18, 2011

Not much.

Past Not Presented on March 19, 2011

I suppose there is a story here somewhere. Guess I missed it.

50 Ways To Annoy Your Friends on March 19, 2011

By way number two, I was wondering about the age of the author. Later I decided it didn't matter. I wanted to give this two stars, so I went back to find the funny one but I think the author had removed it by then.

The Surgery on March 20, 2011

Very poorly written. Many punctuation errors. Many tense changes.

The Massage on March 20, 2011

A reasonably erotic story, but in serious need of editing.

Riley's Surprise on March 20, 2011

Oh woman! So much fun to be had with the entire house to run around in naked. Who gets to say what they do next?

Naughty Marietta and Other Stories on March 23, 2011

Ah, the imagination of a writer—topped only by the imagination of the reader. If only he’d waited till the complete manuscript was ready. Very funny short piece.

Let’s Get Drunk and Play Hammer Darts on March 29, 2011

Oh those college kids. What they won't think to do when they're full of beer.

Cake on March 29, 2011

Delightful, just delightful.

Hush, Hush, My Love on March 31, 2011

I give this story four stars. It was well written with but a minor need of proofing. But I must give a review to the previous reviewer. The crux of the story was blatantly given away by Aaron so that the next reader (me and others) was deprived of the timing of the revelation that the writer intended. Too much information, Aaron.

Stiletto Blues on March 31, 2011

Against my better judgment, I tried to read this. I say tried because I didn't understand a bit of it.

A causa da homossexualidade. ( Português) on April 01, 2011
(no rating)
Why put the description in English if the story is not?

Her Massage on April 01, 2011

Hot and to the point. I can't help wonder how often this might happen in the privacy of the massage room.

My Girlfriend's Roommate (An Erotic Short Story) on April 01, 2011

Oh boy! Such a fertile mind to come out with a hot story like this. I need to look for more.

The Lancelot Effect on April 02, 2011

It's hard to say who's who and what's what here.

A round Shiny Object on April 03, 2011

A single object at that amount? Not US. Then whose?

Big Black Shiny Boots on April 03, 2011

Did the man in the black shiny boots have time to be surprised? I wonder.

Hitchhiker 2 - Marvin on April 03, 2011

Reminds me of why I don't pick up hitchhikers, especially 260 pound men in worn leather jackets.

Soldier Boy on April 04, 2011

So, what happens next? Do tell.

Young Love on April 04, 2011

The stuff of tragedy.

The Brief Case of the Briefcase on April 06, 2011

As a self-professed writer, I hesitate to review this short piece, as I’m sure most any untainted individual loathed to venture near one stricken by the plague in the Middle Ages. Could venturing near it infect me? I hope not!

Pearls of Winsome on April 06, 2011
(no rating)
I was blithely reading along when the term B M shook me from my reverie. Being a gentile, I didn’t realize the author was talking about a Bar Mitzvah until I finished the paragraph. Talk about a rude awakening. I barely got my orientation back before the end of the story.

Personal Trainer on April 07, 2011

Obviously I missed the 'point.' Senseless.

You Choose on April 07, 2011

I guess this is a build-up to a one line joke. I'm not sure. I see from her bio that she is from my part of Southern Illinois.

Uncle Joshua and the Grooglemen on April 08, 2011

Interesting but chilling story from the backwoods. Very well written.

Family Album on April 08, 2011

What a tender and touching story, mingling memories with a possible future. So well written that it was a joy to read.

Bolero Man on April 10, 2011

I read this when it was first posted and got little out of it. Noting the other reviewers’ praise, I’ve just re-read it and still fail to see anything erotic in it. I guess it’s over my head.

He Stepped from My Dreams on April 10, 2011

A sweet, fluffy bit of romance if the reader doesn’t think about the back-story too much.

Innocent Victim on April 10, 2011

This story was undoubtedly repeated millions of times the world around. As devastating as it was for the victors, imaging what it was like for the vanquished.

Taking a Chance on April 10, 2011

Normally when I’ve finished a hot piece of erotica, I’ll say just that, ‘Hot,’ with possibly an adjective attached. But this delightful story deserves much more than that. It is a pleasant love story, slowly easing into an erotic tale with just the right tempo to reach the climax, both sexually and plot wise. Very well done!

Thelma on April 10, 2011

How many versions of this tale are there around the world anyway?

A Thousand Tears on April 11, 2011

What a heart-rending story. Beautiful and sad.

In memory of Linda on April 11, 2011

It would be a cold heart to have never known such love.

Cupcakes and Elephants on April 11, 2011

It's like having a tune in your head that you can't get out.

Les Femmes de Chambre on April 12, 2011

A fat, skinny, obese, sloppy, drenched, lesbian cum-fest, devoid of only a few cocks to finish the lot. My only complaint: too damn much French, language that is.

A Work in Progress on April 12, 2011

This is a great story depicting the interaction of one would be writer with one supposedly her subordinate who she looks to for inspiration.

i on April 13, 2011

I usually skip poetry because it is often unreadable, at least by me. I’m glad I didn’t skip this one although it didn’t read like a poem. Instead, it read as a sad testament to a lost love and life, well two perhaps.

New York and Chador on April 13, 2011

Maybe it would mean something if I knew what a chador was, or the reference to the elephant, or...

Pas de Deux on April 18, 2011

Imagine my surprise when two reviews came in together for my operation essays so long after the last one. That quickly changed to trepidation when I recognized your name. I was certain I was about to receive a spitting cobra’s dose of venom for the one star reviews I had given two of your stories. I try to rate stories as I feel them. That may very from day to day depending on my mood. (I truly loved your story of the Parisian chambermaids Juicy coffee break. [The capital J is not a typo]) Also imagine the delight (dare I say shock) when I read your reviews. I thank you very much for your kind words and encouragement. It has been over six months since the operation now and, so far as I can tell at this juncture, I’m doing as well as could be expected considering my age. (Aches and pains aplenty.) Re-reading your review, I must at this point pass along my condolences for your losses from colon cancer. As I stated in the second missive, it was only luck that my doctor sent me off for screening. (Which I can’t recommend enough.) I had no symptoms. I cringe at your mention of my style. For the life of me, I can’t discern any style in my writing. Perhaps the word bland might come to mind. I try to put on the screen what pleases me and if it pleases or amuses others, then great. As to the reference to the pretty nurses, that was an honest judgment hampered by my weakened condition, the IV and the catheter I was impaled with. If I had a choice, I might have dallied longer just to enjoy the smiling faces, especially once the tubes were removed. And now the down loads—the two operation essays have three hundred sixty four. Rather paltry compared to the twenty-one thousand plus the other nineteen stories have garnered to date. Most of them are erotic in nature so that just shows what the reading public wants. I guess I’ll just have to keep pandering to it. And I accept your offer (threat?) to read every one of my stories to point out my typos. If there is a Divinity, then He or She surly knows I make a lot of them. I had one correspondent recently point out a typo in my Bio, but I told her I was leaving it in to prove I’m human. Okay this is supposed to be a review of you story ‘Pas de Deux.’ You undoubtedly know by now that I’m not well versed in French, so I have no idea what the title means. I read the story three times and got a little additional from it with each read. I can only hope that the coffee wasn’t too hot, but I assume it was. His fault I guess, for not paying attention to her return, but I suspect that the encounter was inevitable. Your style far surpasses mine, as does Shakespeare’s, whom I can’t read either. I wish you all the best with your work and I must get back to mine. I’m putting the most recent polish to a long novel that I started a few days after posting ‘Operation 2.’ (Is a writer ever ‘done’ with a story?) It spewed out of me for over two months at a rate of over two thousand words a day. Could it have been aftereffects from the morphine? I’ve never had such action before or since. Again, thank you and read more of my drivel if you like.

Therapy Session on April 20, 2011

The switching from third person to first and back was jarring. One point it was in the same paragraph. I don't want to give away the ending but I wonder if 'she' was Elaine?

Sister-In-Law, Volume 1, The Visit on April 21, 2011

If Philadelphia is the city of brotherly love, then wherever these sisters live is easily the city of sisterly love—in the very best way. I can’t help wonder if the author is a trained masseuse, because he surely seems to know the way around a supple body. If I was to play devil’s advocate at all, it would be to point out some very minor head hopping and POV switching. Giving the sister/wife a name might have helped. Otherwise, this is one of the hottest stories I’ve read in a long time.

Renewal on April 21, 2011

Several points in this story bug me, and I don’t mean the virus. I’m sure the day is coming when a hacker or rouge government will manage to kill the entire Internet system. To start with, such a rouge operation with a minimal satellite capability can launch a few hundred musket balls or ball bearings into the geo-synchronous orbit, but in the opposite direction that the usual satellites go, and all satellites in that orbit will be blacked out in a day. Next, how does the protagonist intend to survive in the mountains after the Government of the Unified Earth had destroyed all the animals? Did he stuff enough food into his pack to last seven years? In paragraph eight, he states that the droids worked exactly as he had designed. Was he a part of the mass wipeout of human life. And lastly, what does he expect to come out of the mountains to in seven years. Not a place in which I’d like to live.

A Subway Encounter on April 21, 2011

Oh boy! What a lucky young man. That will be one subway ride he won't forget.

Hysteria on April 22, 2011

Odd! Two stories. Same title--Hysteria. Two fictitious accounts of very real nineteenth century quack treatments of “Hysteria” in women. Stories of machines designed to do what a man should have been taught to do.

His Friend on April 23, 2011

Oh man, oh man! And it’s only football season. Wait until basketball when the men can really dribble all over the court. But I have to ask, when did Jack get in there?

Taken in the Taxi (erotic menage) on April 23, 2011

How dare those evil men treat her that way, giving her everything she wanted with promises of more?

A CANDLE IN HER HANDS on April 27, 2011

It was short, so it is not surprising that it said nothing.

Memoirs From The 82nd Floor and Descending on April 28, 2011

Reminds me of the Gene Wilder movie about the girl in the red dress. I don't remember if he got her or not.

Magnum Tales ~ M is for Maybe on April 28, 2011

It’s been a while since I’ve read an alphabet story from J. M. Hadley. Does that mean I might have missed one or two? Let’s see? M? Only thirteen to go. Can he keep the heat up to Z?

Return to Wildwood on April 29, 2011

I’ve had this delightful saga of erotica tucked away in my ebook file for several months now, though I’m not sure just when or from where I purchased it. I’ve intended to take the time to read it every time I cross it and today I finally did so. I’m sorry I took so long to read it for it is an amazing story of submission (which I normally don’t care for) and fantasy (also a genre that I generally pass on) combined to form a hot tale of both. I will definitely encourage readers to sample it even if, like me, you might think you’d not care for it. It’ll prove you wrong.

The 23rd Of June on April 30, 2011

A rather sweet story but very muddled by the experimental formatting. Hard to follow, forcing me to re-read several sentences to see who was talking.

Ablaze on May 01, 2011

Not much of a retelling of Rumplestiltskin.

Bloodfetish - Erotic Stories & Poetry on May 01, 2011

Normally not my choice of reading material, this pulled me in and held me till it chose to liberate me. I can only say I’m glad I have free will to refrain from reading more—for a while. But damn, I do have to say it’s well written. Also, I liked the picture even though the model is probably over a hundred by now.

New Windows on May 02, 2011

In a flash it's funny. And horribly close to the truth.

Face Fear: Russel's a Glory Seeker on May 04, 2011

Kohala is the oldest mountain on the Big Island and long dead; therefore, a volcano didn’t burn the short-lived survivor of this crash. In the years I’ve lived here in Hawaii, there have been several such crashes of tour chopper and fixed wing aircraft, so the story is quite plausible. It is interesting and well written for such a short piece of fiction.

Taken by Two Lovers (menage a trois) on May 05, 2011

Well, holy cow guys! I hope you at least give her some of the profits.

From Bitter to Sweet on May 06, 2011

Delightful! Who ever thought chocolate could be such a delicious form of revenge? But, oh girls, the calories. Now I must read it again, like a second bon-bon from the box, who can resist.

Working Away on May 06, 2011

This incredibly delicious story reinforces what I’ve said and written before; women can write much better erotica than men could ever hope to achieve. The subtle nuances of this story forced me to read it twice to be sure I understood the final sentence. It’s there.

Riley's Mistake on May 08, 2011

This story was too short to sort out all the complex issues involved, thus it came to an unsatisfactory ending.

The Latex Dress on May 10, 2011

Oh, just think of those poor South American trees, drained of their sap to make those exquisite garments. Does it seem worth it? I like to think so.

Dare: The Boss on May 12, 2011

Oh the trouble a little alcohol can get some one into—or five some ones. This is the first of the five I’ve read. I hope the other four are just as hot.

Dare: Stripper (an erotic short story) on May 12, 2011

Okay, that’s two. Three hot and sexy stories to go.

Dare: Threesome on May 12, 2011

I can’t help wonder how the five girls will relate all their stories at the shower. That should be one mind blowing party.

Dare: The Waiter (erotica) on May 12, 2011

This was listed as the fifth story but should have been first. They all had a week to carry out their assigned fantasies, but this gal managed in less that an hour. And doubled the dare. Double Dutch Dare! Now that’s one hot story.

Biker (erotica) on May 12, 2011

This was the last in the string of five stories. Last for me to read, that is. But I see it really didn’t matter, they weren’t in any sequence. Just five loosely related stories. Five dares to be done in a week before the bridal shower of one of them. I’m disappointed that there doesn’t seem to be a wrap-up of the tales. Maybe if we, the readers, give the author a little encouragement, she’ll give us that tally. We can only hope.

Warhorse and Donkey on May 13, 2011

Tora, you have written a very insightful short story. I see a wonderful future for you. Mahalo for sharing it with us.

Sometime on May 14, 2011

What a touching and delightful story. But, my god, how old would Sarah and Walter be by then?

The Duel on May 14, 2011

Ah, if only Hamilton and Burr had been so inventive, early American politics might have taken a different course. I’m sure they could have found a suitable arena for their duel.

All in a Days Work on May 15, 2011

A nice, hot, but all too predictable fantasy—marred by several punctuation errors.

Dead Man Talking on May 16, 2011

I opened this story only because of the confusion about the title, which was it—Nab or Man? Now I see it’s been reposted as Man. Then I saw the formatting. Very strange. I skimmed some and discovered that it is like that throughout. Too confusing to bother with. Sorry Sean, your style is just too odd.

Jonah: Texas Ranger on May 16, 2011

Cute. But it would have been better if the author hadn't given away the "twist" in the description.

Touched on May 16, 2011

Okay, it was labeled as erotica and erotica is what we got—more or less. Actually less. What we got more of was bad syntax, poor grammar and fragmented sentences. Some of it is so bad that one has to wonder if English is the author’s first language.

A Dom's Gift on May 16, 2011

Very strange treatment. Don’t know if I’d recommend it.

It Lives In Dark Places on May 17, 2011

A far cry from the erotica I normally read, but a grisly change of pace to be sure. Intriguing story, intensely told.

Lenny Smiles on May 17, 2011

I need to start with the formatting. In PDF and RTF, the words were scattered all over the screen, which made reading the story difficult. HTML and JAVASCRIPT didn’t have that problem. Now to the story. Nicely written though ending with a rather typically clichéd finish. I wonder if we are supposed to think that Casey let Lenny hit the last pitch. If it was a fastball it was unlikely Lenny could have been expected to connect with it. Nice that he came out the hero, though.

Night Watchman on May 17, 2011

Well written but rather gruesome.

It Started With a Joke on May 17, 2011

Hot times on the cul-de-sac, or what an eager couple can find across the way.

The Flirt on May 18, 2011

Worth a chuckle—maybe even a guffaw. Really cute.

Drowning on May 18, 2011

I could have used an English to American dictionary while reading these enchanting stories. Though the lack of it didn’t dispel the delight from reading them. The heartstring-tugging end of ‘Our Little Secret,’ didn’t suffer from the lack. What an amazing narrative.

Conquered People on May 18, 2011

What started out as a reasonable story disintegrated into a confusing one with no discernable ending.

The Talisman on May 19, 2011

Silly story. Told in a very inept manner.

Dying With My Children on May 19, 2011

As least there was love for one.

Unt on May 21, 2011

Amazing detail from a gal on her first coon hunt. And probably her last. Very well written.

Playback on May 21, 2011

Awkward to read. But some of the message got through. I think. Certainly a different format.

Day on May 22, 2011

Interesting, and certainly something different. It was a good quick read and well worth the few minutes it took to complete. I do wonder how the author managed to learn about the African girl’s life in spite of the class that was supposed to provide the information.

Choice on May 22, 2011

Interesting detail. Though I had to wonder who the foe was.

A Balmy Evening Footjob on May 23, 2011

Sometime I get my money’s worth, sometime I don’t. With this story, ninety-nine cents was wasted. The grammatical errors were too numerous to count, and it was a very short piece.

The Old Lady That Tends the Graveyard. on May 23, 2011

Delightful little story.

A Bear Story on May 23, 2011

It was my laugh for the day.

Quilt of Seas on May 23, 2011

Such a sad and disheartening story. Flawlessly written.

Ayudenos on May 23, 2011

I hope it's only fiction.

Ass Play - On Me! on May 23, 2011

Ah, I can only dream of such action.

Why Waste English Setters on Dog Shows? on May 24, 2011

Not at all what I expected, but a fun read to be sure. Perfectly constructed.

My First Threesome on May 24, 2011

These three are going to die of dehydration from all the juice they lost. One very hot read!

Right Here Waiting For You on May 24, 2011

Short and dull. But at least it was free.

Peanuts on May 24, 2011

Sometimes funny, sometimes confusing—no, make that often confusing. But certainly something different.

Riley's Redemption on May 24, 2011

The category was labeled erotica-lesbian erotica, and there was none. But the author clearly stated that in the description. She also states that it is up to the readers’ reaction to determine if she will continue with the story of Riley and Ava. If my single vote counts, then I say, please continue. It’s a story that deserves to be finished, though the episode I just read hints that their love will persevere.

Flaws on May 24, 2011

I can count as two of my flaws that I took the time to read this and then worse, try to make any sense of it.

Slum Life on May 24, 2011

I have a vague idea what this is supposed to be, but then again, I’m not sure.

The Swing on May 25, 2011

Studying the painting and envisioning the photographs, I can’t help but wonder about the painter and the days or weeks it must have taken to paint the portrait versus the milliseconds the camera took to capture the images described in the story. Could he—the painter—have partaken of the model as the photographer did? Could anyone blame him? Excellent writing! Delightful imagery.

The Gift on May 26, 2011

A little difficult to read, the way it jumps around. But well worth the effort.

The Night Before Haloween on May 28, 2011

Oh, gee wiz, how spookie--not!

Serving Under the Spotlight on May 29, 2011

I can't help but wonder how long it will be before the 'friends' forget to tell her which restaurant they'll be going to.

Stealing From Death on May 29, 2011

A pleasant short read of a rather unpleasant subject.

A Right Stitch Up on May 29, 2011

I don’t have a cleaning person under my feet so how am I to know where some of my ideas come from. The Muse works in mysterious ways—sometimes.

1s Upon A Time on May 29, 2011

A lot of supposition here, and the amazing thing is, it seems to make sense.

The Spirit of the Dunes on May 29, 2011

She sounds like a flower child, a generation past due.

Teaching Nina on May 30, 2011

Such an intense, yet gross fantasy. Worth the price.

Emily's Fantasies on May 30, 2011

Spurted, squirted and converted. This author has a very dirty mind, or should we say lascivious libido.

Burn In on May 30, 2011

A truly horrible tale. One that could give a person nightmares.

Listening In on May 30, 2011

Mother dear knows best.

Friends Through & Through on May 31, 2011

A chance encounter, an accidental exposure and the inevitable yielding to the basic animalistic urges. Sooner or later it had to happen. But made all the funnier by certain typos such as the female protagonist suddenly growing a penis.

Barefoot in the Dunes on June 01, 2011

Very sweet.

Courage To Believe on June 02, 2011

Another Mary, though not Mary Poppins, appears in time to set a family right. Lovely tale of a woman who needs to worry about dehydration, from the way she tears up all the time. Nice chick-lit love story with plenty of sex (beyond a point), but not a single four letter ‘C’ word to be found.

A Fork in the Road on June 03, 2011

A short tale of things that go thump in the night.

Faces of Aloha on June 03, 2011

Aloha exists in some. Not it others. What else can I say?

Birthday Surprise on June 04, 2011

Mildly erotic.

A Woman's Lust 1: The Harbour on June 04, 2011

Not bad. Not bad.

Toaster on June 04, 2011

Si, I like story. Make sense? No. But I like anyway.

Why I am so Unlucky? on June 05, 2011

I very seldom read poetry. This is a good example of why.

Dementia on June 05, 2011

The bad thing: I’m old enough to be suffering from the same thing. The good thing: I don’t have a wife hovering nearby to remind me.

Tomato on June 05, 2011

But isn't the customer always right? Cute story.

Getting Down To Business (Rapid Release Stories) on June 05, 2011

As she said, “It’s a pleasure doing business.”

Room Service (Rapid Release Stories) on June 05, 2011

Such a stroke of luck. Several strokes really.

Dance With Me on June 05, 2011

Lessons learned right.

Friends With Benefits on June 06, 2011

So when does the friends part come in?

Madness and the Modern Home on June 06, 2011

Nelson, great story and I really enjoyed it. Why is it women have to have everything their way? Oddly, in a novel I’ve written and have yet to finish polishing, an old wood-burning kitchen stove figures prominently. I hope to find a publisher for it some day. I also must confess, I’ve never played pinochle but I remember my parents playing many eons ago when I was a kid. I only selected that card game to fit into the story that led up to ‘Pinochle or Strip Poker?’ After online research. You might enjoy it too. ‘Pinochle Anyone?’ Thanks for the review, by the way.

Lustful Desires on June 06, 2011

Had I read the tag, I wouldn't have downloaded.

Time, an Essay on June 07, 2011

Everything promised and a whole lot more. Peace.

Singing Fool of Afghanistan on June 07, 2011

So a guy goes a little loony after being shot. Who wouldn't?

Tis the Season on June 08, 2011

I was wondering if they had an oven big enough for the main course, but...well I shouldn't say any more. Cute but ghoulish. Isn't that the point?

Turkey Trot on June 08, 2011

Well Mary, welcome to Smashwords. You found spelling errors where I found many switches in person, first person, third person and back. I also became annoyed with the repetition of the dance and sweater, etc. But like you said, it was free.

Dalston Junction on June 08, 2011

A very well written story that will surprise the reader in the end. Couldn’t have foreseen it coming.

Caligulove- A Short Story on June 08, 2011

A story very hard to follow in the beginning. It’s not until mid way that the relationships begin to jell. Very graphic violence. Not for everyone.

Within the seams on June 09, 2011

I worry about this author.

poems from within on June 09, 2011
(no rating)
Heather, you requested more feedback so I will endeavor to do so. First let me say that I do like certain aspects of your writing. It is clear and lucid. You have not fallen into the trap that many young writers do of writing as if they were tweeting or what ever that damnable stuff is that so many do. I’m an old fuddy-duddy I know, but I have a lot of respect for the English language and would like others to do likewise. Language must change if it is to grow and reach new heights, not sag into a quagmire of sludge. My reference to worrying about you has to do with the dark and sinister tone of the stories, ‘Within the Seams,’ and ‘Lustful Desires.’ You of course, have every right to use whatever style or genre you choose and I hope you could become the next E. A. Poe. Now I must reverse myself here, for I just read the Ebook description of your latest posting, ‘Poems From Within.’ You must realize that the description is the first exposure the reader has of you and your work. This one is riddled with punctuation and spelling errors. Run everything that you write through spell check to get it right before posting. You will seem much more professional that way. Please rework it and repost it so I will know you will take my advice to heart. Do not expect reviewers to only heap praise on your work. It is a way for you to learn and improve so long as they are honest. Not all are, sorry to say. Writers have to develop a thick skin to ward off the slings and arrows…well, you know the rest. I want to say that I wish you the best with your writing and keep at it. Practice is the only way to improve. P S. I didn’t read any of, ‘Poems From Within,’ because poetry is not my thing as a rule, (Ogden Nash aside.) Again good luck and keep at it.

Lunch Time Surprise on June 10, 2011

How many twists can one ending have? I’d love to say more but I can’t without giving something away.

For Mother: A Short Story Collection of Two on June 10, 2011

Well written but very sad stories. The first without a beginning, the second without an end.

The Last Summer Snow on June 13, 2011

With Wendy’s last story I was left wondering what she would give us in the future. Now I know. She’s given us a remarkable glimpse at a stage of life that most of us will never experience. Maybe it’s best. I can only hope that I have as much clarity of mind when I reach something even close to that point. Lovely story Wendy. Thanks.

Half A Man on June 15, 2011

Like the man, half of this story seems to be missing. As a result, it doesn’t make sense.

Not Really Galileo on June 20, 2011

Ah, but did they or did they not see something?

M.W. on June 21, 2011

How could something so short get so boring so quickly?

03:08 on June 23, 2011

Not much.

Mirror on June 26, 2011

This author/cartoonist is striving for a new format. I wish him well but regret that I am not a fan.

The Curious Case of A. Fly, Esquire on June 26, 2011

Are you sure this is the way it really happened? Oh well, I guess the judge will straighten it all out. But then you know the legal system.

Spanking Clarice on June 26, 2011

Ah, the delights of religion well applied.

Small Graces on June 30, 2011

Not bad, but leaving the reader wanting a whole lot more.

Hot Air Balloon, an erotic fantasy on July 02, 2011

Okay for a short short of hot air.

Class Ass on July 03, 2011

A quad of hot, sexy stories, marred slightly by the notion of a woman so wantonly screwing the deliveryman only two weeks after the death of her husband. Put that aside, and you’ll be sure to enjoy the heated romps.

Live to Serve on July 06, 2011

This was well written, at least as far as I got, but like most BDSM, it got too sickening to finishing reading.

Gotcha! on July 07, 2011
(no rating)
I'm flagging this so I can find it later. But now I must leave.

Gotcha! on July 08, 2011

I read this yesterday when I didn’t have time to write a review. At that time there was only Debra’s single star review stating simply that she didn’t like it at all. Judging from that, I expected to dislike it as well, but read it anyway. I further had dread when I saw the BDSM tag among others. I generally despise BDSM stories. Once reading it, I have doubts that the tag is proper, for it is far from the typical story of that genre. It is certainly a dark tale, one of domination at gunpoint. The writing was certainly different. The style is unlike any I’ve seen before and I found it intriguing. I must point out questions I have about the story’s location. There is reference to ice flows breaking audibly, yet the area seems hot and muggy. Strange. I do wish the author had given some inkling as to the location of the story and the factious tribes mentioned in the brief flashback. This review should have been posted before the one by James, so it is a little out of sync with his five start rating. I often get a little suspicious when a story gets such a glowing report from a reviewer who seems to have arrived at Smashwords in tandem with the story he or she is reviewing. But stranger occurrences do happen. I agree with James as to the title and artwork matching. More so after reading the story. (Ouch!) The story is obviously an ad for the book ‘Kikaffir.’ I’m sorry to say I will not be reading it, having been frightened off by the tag at the end.

Yellow on July 16, 2011

With the style that this young lady displays, it is obvious that she has a future as a poet.

Judy Drownded on July 16, 2011

Too bad Cyrano didn’t get proper billing.

Jonah on July 18, 2011

Oh God, yes!

From the Heart on July 18, 2011

Well, maybe, just maybe...

A Chicken in the Outhouse on July 18, 2011

Only a grandpa could match the punishment with the crime.

Plights Of A Patriarch on July 18, 2011

Ouch!

Sunrise In The Bedroom Window on July 18, 2011

At least there was reconciliation.

Life Lessons from a Tree on July 19, 2011

This got boring very quickly. But I finished reading it despite that. Pretty pictures though. Three stars for the pictures.

Charity Begins at Home on July 19, 2011

It's only fiction, it's only fiction. Keep telling yourself that. But man! What fiction.

The last stroll on July 19, 2011

The lettering was so small that it was a strain to read.

Losing It on July 21, 2011

Amusing read, but I’d have felt better if the author had at least mentioned protection.

Spying on Linda on July 22, 2011

So which will win out: jealousy or voyeurism?

Be Unique on July 22, 2011

There is a difference between being unique and being foolish or just plain annoying. Yelling behind old people can give them heart attacks. I know, I'm an old man. Loud noises make me jump and I'm sure that isn't unique.

Tit for Tat on July 22, 2011

This story was hot enough to overlook the few word usage and spelling errors. Very hot!

My Dearest Isabella on July 22, 2011

Well, that was different. Not sure how I feel about it though.

Janice on July 22, 2011

What a delightful tale of erotica. I can easily see these two as lifelong soul mates. And she might want to share ‘the big guy,’ who knows?

Spacer Tales: The Alien Monks on July 23, 2011

Interesting story, a little hard to follow with so many references to ‘alien’ life but amusing anyway.

Spacer Tales: The Explorer on July 23, 2011

Nothing like a good yarn to get the audience engrossed.

Beemer Rescue on July 23, 2011

Now in reality, the tow operator would have been a hundred pounds over weight and had butt crack to match her cleavage.

My Introduction To Bigotry And Discrimination on July 27, 2011

Alas Andy, it may be a long wait.

Santa's Daughter on Aug. 18, 2011

What a sweet story to bring the feeling of Christmas here in the middle of the summer.

Magnum Tales ~ Y is for Yes on Aug. 18, 2011

Well, we almost made it to Z. Now there's nothing left but a long boring marriage. Right? Huh?

A Special 24 Hours on Aug. 27, 2011

Unlike Jessica, I managed to read all of this bit of junk, though it wasn’t easy. It read as if written by a teenage—a young teenager. I can say nothing more.

Parchment Of Passion: Helaine's Diary on Aug. 27, 2011

Yuk! This reads like a poor translation from a foreign language.

Switch: An Erotic Short Story on Sep. 02, 2011

What an incredibly hot and delightful story. I usually don’t care much for BDSM stories, in spite of the fact that I’ve written a few, but this story had just the right combination of mastery and yielding. The reader can easily imagine the welts administered to Amy’s ass, back, and the rest of her body. But I must admit that the sole reason to read and rate this story was a way of thanking the author for his rating of four of my stories today. To show that the author is truly into BDSM, an obvious glutton for punishment, I must point out that Nathan has read, or at least, reviewed twenty-five or twenty-six stories today alone. I have been neglecting Smashwords of late, buried in my own writing. (Fourteen days and thirty-six thousand words into a new novel.) And now must get back to it. Happy reading everyone.

Collar and Bone: a Split-Self side story on Oct. 02, 2011

A well written, but quite confusing story. (The cross-gendered name didn’t help.) Things were made all the more puzzling when no attempt was made to explain the relationship among the characters. By the end, it became obvious that this was only a tease for a longer work. Though listed as erotic, it simply wasn’t.

The Gardener on Oct. 23, 2011

Strange syntax this writer has. Yoda writing porn like.

The Scientist on Oct. 23, 2011

This writer's style grows tiresome very quickly.

The Hardware Store on Oct. 23, 2011

Silly. (Black and white shirt turned green?)

Halloween at Rusty's on Oct. 31, 2011

Once past the confusing beginning, this was worth a quick chuckle at the end.

The Happy-Unhappy Bridegroom on Nov. 05, 2011

Written in typical British prose, suggesting that of the century before last, the story was well done, though I wondered at the gender of the narrator. But surely Lucille, being a proper lady, wouldn’t entertain a gentleman overnight.

Tit for Tat on Nov. 06, 2011

The old five finger discount pays dividends—for the victim.

The Heist on Nov. 13, 2011

The beginning and ending don't match.

The Black Bag Gang on Nov. 27, 2011

Well, that was different. Delightfully so, I might add. A chuckle a day keeps the doctor away, or something like that.

The Tent on Dec. 02, 2011

Wow! What a great piece of writing.

Benect's Mistress on Dec. 03, 2011

Oh, the agony and ecstasy of a sex slave.

The Hen Party on Dec. 06, 2011

A female version of a circle-jerk. Masturbation with an audience.

Fire & Ice on Dec. 29, 2011

The hot and cold, the Yin and Yang. So well described. So short that the reader wants more, a lot more.

How not to have sex on Dec. 31, 2011

What a delightfully charming tale of woe. But it could have been much worse considering what an insect sting would do to such delicate exposed flesh. Recommended reading along with other stories from this author.

The Netsuke on Dec. 31, 2011

Oh, the mysteries of the Orient. What a thrilling journey she has ahead of her.

A Lonely Ghost Girl on Jan. 01, 2012

Short but nicely done.

My Girlfriend the Lap Dancer on Jan. 03, 2012

Oh, the joy of finding your true love.

Brendella and the Overfriendly Enchantress on Jan. 04, 2012

This story was moving along so nicely, so enticingly. Then it took a turn and vanished into left field.

A Ship in the Night on Jan. 05, 2012

A very sweet story, (too short to be labeled a novella), is badly flawed by the lack of editing. So many misused words and tense changes make it annoying to read.

Brendella and the Trouble With Crystal Balls on Jan. 07, 2012

Perhaps the fortune teller can tell fortunes, perhaps not. Either way, he is a wise man.

Kisses Sweeter Than Wine on Jan. 07, 2012

Though a very short story, this was so loaded with grammatical and tense errors that it made for a very jarring read

Once A Woman on Jan. 10, 2012

Nice.

Mimosa (Cocktail Series #1) on Jan. 12, 2012

A very well written, very sexy little story here. But why do I get the feeling that there’s a lot more to come. Just because the author told us so? I can’t wait.

About Falling in Love on Jan. 13, 2012

From the mouth of babes...

Duck-N-Cover on Jan. 13, 2012

In and out like a yoyo.

Wedding Night Tease on Jan. 15, 2012

Well, as a guy I don't find it all that cute.

The Lovership 2: To the Rescue on Jan. 16, 2012

For a stew, waiting on the back burner until the hunger gets so intense that she needed a large helping, he was ready to satisfy her just as she needed.

The Lovership 1: An Erotic Discovery on Jan. 17, 2012

I read these two stories out of sequence, having downloaded ‘An Erotic Discovery’ last month but not getting around to reading it until now. I was a little dismayed at the time lag between the two—so much time, and presumably activity, undocumented that I must wonder what all happened between to make them slip so easily into each other in ‘To the Rescue.’ There are a number of problems with this story, mostly minor. Tense changes, present, past, present. Also annoying, the head hopping in the last paragraph of chapter 2. But these in no way distract from a very hot, very sexy story. Now, if we only knew what happened in the years between? And where will these two go from here? Also, what a great pair of names for such hot lovers.

Sex Raft - Sexy Sea Adventures #1 on Jan. 18, 2012

This story is listed as: fiction, erotica, comedy/humor. So let’s see—fiction? Definitely for there is nothing realistic about it. Erotic?—not much. Comedy/humor—also pretty weak.

Sex Island - Sexy Sea Adventures #4 on Jan. 18, 2012

Oh good! One last red hot ejaculation to wipe out all the others. No more concern about this improbable lot.

The Sauna on Jan. 18, 2012

Oh the fun girls can concoct when left to their own devices

The Apartment Complex- Rebecca on Jan. 19, 2012

John, welcome to the wonderful world of Smashwords. I liked your story but would have enjoyed it more if you had spent a little more time cleaning out some of the grammatical and tense errors. I know in your bio you asked the reader to overlook them, but it would make your work, (even as an amateur), more appealing to the reader. I couldn’t count the number of times you switched from present to past and back. I was hooked right off with the title and its sub-title Rebecca, and look forward to a second offering about Heidi. And surely there are many more juicy young co-eds in the complex waiting their turn with a helpful older man. You know the old saying, ‘one good turn deserves another.’ Good luck with your writing.

Fly on the Wall on Jan. 20, 2012

Quick and cute.

Clive on Jan. 23, 2012

A strange story made worse by some kind of formatting error.

The Apartment Complex- Rebecca and Amber on Jan. 26, 2012

When John has two succulent sisters vying for his attention, how does he decide whom gets his services first? More hot times next door in the complex

The Apartment Complex- Jackie on Jan. 27, 2012

John has ventured out to the other buildings in the complex and at the same time climbed the generational ladder. He’s conquered the sisters, could a mother, daughter scenario be next?

The Little People on Jan. 28, 2012

You have to admire a writer who can use the word, esoteric. Delightful story.

Company: an erotic short story on Jan. 28, 2012

Holy Hanna! What a hot and well written story. This reader could easily envision it made into a video. I’d watch it over and over.

Break on Jan. 28, 2012

As I’ve said before, I normally don’t care much for BDSM stories. But once in a while one like this comes along and, well…

Heart Spell on Jan. 29, 2012

I can't believe I've had this story tucked away in a folder for a year and a half before pulling it out to read. Like wine, maybe it inproved with age.

Squirt on Jan. 30, 2012

Okay, I think the count is now fifty million and one stories about sex between step siblings. But this one is different, well a little. At least they’re not at the obligatory age of eighteen. They left that back a decade and a half ago. I sure hope the bedding has a chance to dry out before the maids come in tomorrow.

Mischievous on Jan. 31, 2012

What indeed was in there?

New Neighbors- Substitute Dad on Feb. 08, 2012

I was a little confused at the beginning of this story, assuming that it was another of the episodes of the protagonist in the apartment complex. But I caught on quickly. It would have been easier on your regular readers if you had given this new guy a different name, but it is too late now. Nice, hot story—one that makes this old man green with envy. Keep up the good work.

Call to Duty- Raven on Feb. 08, 2012

I love the way you’re using more dialog but you still need to pay attention to tense. Several times you started a paragraph past tense only to switch into present tense. Not everyone is bothered by that I know, but… I’ve often wondered just what a tongue ‘ring’ would feel like and your description was delicious. But I thought it was called a stud, so what do I know?

Wish Upon a Star on Feb. 08, 2012

Well Jiminy Cricket, what do you know about that?

Packed Carriage on Feb. 09, 2012

Ah, those Brits. Staid? Well, perhaps a little, until…

Craving the Crop (A BDSM Quickie) on Feb. 09, 2012

A well crafted, well polished, scenario, that, as with so many, leaves me shaking my head in disbelief as to how and why anyone could enjoy such activity.

Hope and Dreams 1- My Deliverer on Feb. 10, 2012

Oh how the fates have smiled on these two in their time of mutual need. Could they be any happier?

Switch on Feb. 11, 2012

Dare he trust the 'true' nature of womanhood?

Test Drive on Feb. 11, 2012

This is one of the best stories I’ve read in a long time, if I can get past the rather inane plot concept. But I’ll overlook it and give it a five star review.

Mom Is A Slut - The MILF Files Book 1 on Feb. 12, 2012

Not bad for a quick hot romp. Needs some editing, missing words here and there.

Death Wears A Black Basque on Feb. 14, 2012

Huh? I read the description. Weird? Yes. Horror? I missed that. Items in the tags? Didn't see much of those either. Maybe I should have seen the movies.

The Dance on Feb. 16, 2012

An enchanting tale of palace intrigue, deception and revenge.

My Liza on Feb. 18, 2012

First, it would have been nice if a PDF option were offered. I hate reading HTML almost as much as I hate Kindle. This story is ten times longer than it should be. It meanders, telling of the Texas economy and oil booms, then wanders to the owner and his hot tempered wife only to leave them unattended. The story is nearly half over before the reader is introduced to the titled, ‘Liza.’ Then more wandering around telling of educations and wildflowers before finally, near the end, we get to the, by then improbable love story. Are we the readers to believe that these two girls could live together for two years without an inkling of a spark between them? I was well into wishing I’d spent my 99 cents elsewhere before then.

She Was Right-Excerpted from Beg For Release! Four Stories of Female Domination on Feb. 18, 2012

Distasteful.

The Great Outdoors: Two Erotic Short Stories on Feb. 19, 2012

Plenty of raw sex to delight the voyeuristic reader, especially the tree top posting, yet quite different from so many run-of-the-mill others. I'm sorry I didn't run across this sooner.

Ginger's Snatch on March 06, 2012

Sweet Ginger. Too bad she didn't hear the sage advice. Never get drunk at the office Christmas party. You might slip up and say the wrong thing. Now look what she has to do to make amends.

All The Pretty Boys From Charm School on April 30, 2012

In the end, the author tells us we, the readers, must make our own visuals, so we do. Perhaps much gorier than he would have intended.

The Empress Alamonda on May 02, 2012

By far the best story I’ve read in quite a while. Delightfully sexy without a hint—well, maybe a little hint—of indecency. Then I noticed that the author also wrote ‘The Duel,’ so I should have known that a wonderfully inventive wordsmith was a work here. Now I must check out the others she has written.

Irresistible Temptations on May 02, 2012

I’ve read many of Ms. Shuel’s stories and was surprised to note that I had missed this one. It is easily one of her best. Though short, it is a hot one, well worth a quick read.

La Belle Dame Sans Merci on May 02, 2012

A most inventive mind, coupled with an incredibly creative skill. Imagery a mere human shouldn’t possess. Such a delight to read one of this author’s works.

She Needs to Be Used on May 02, 2012
(no rating)
I skimmed through a few spots but it looked so nasty that I doubt I’ll read it. As a result I don’t think it would be fair to give it a rating.

Jungle Fever on May 05, 2012
(no rating)
The description told me more than the story did. Waste of time reading the story. Didn’t understand much of it.

Casual Sex with Amy on May 26, 2012

A few disjointed sentences, but not bad. The idea came through okay.

Good With His Hands on June 02, 2012

I assumed Isobella was English, judging by some of the writing style, but I see she’s Australian. (What is a singlet anyway?) The story is good, but needs a little editing. We can only assume the construction on the cottage may take a long time.

Bound and Spanked on June 02, 2012

BDSM 101.

The Stag Party on June 07, 2012

Well that was certainly a stag party for the ages. I’d love to mention the ending but I wouldn’t want to give it away. But I will say, if the reader likes odd endings, he or she will love this one.

Winter Nocturne on June 08, 2012

I almost passed on this one when I saw the word paranormal. Not my cup of tea, or bottle of Bud Light. But then I saw it was about writing and, well, what writer can pass on that. Glad I didn’t. Terrific story. Well written and, though I’m not sure I grasped it all, delighted in the imaginative dream sequences. Clearly worth five stars.

All For Nun on June 11, 2012

I guess nun doesn't always mean none.

Taking the Babysitter on June 11, 2012

Oh damn, what a hot story! Surely you'll tell us about their next babysitting session?

Fucked by my daughter's boyfriend on June 15, 2012

Three paragraphs was about all I could stomach.

An Introduction to - A Flying Fuck on June 16, 2012

Damn cute story. Not what I'd expected but quite funny.

The Toy on June 18, 2012

An excruciating read, certainly for the male reader. And not for the tale alone but for the number of times I was forced to the dictionary. Once found a typo—perhaps. Thought it might be a British spelling but I guess not. Not sure I want to wade through any longer missives from this author, though the writing is challenging, if decidedly maddening.

"Mommy, there's something under my bed." on June 24, 2012

Goose bumps everyone!

My Michelle on June 26, 2012

Confusing, but I guess it was meant to be. Someday I’ll learn to read the tags

Love on the cards on June 26, 2012

Nice quick read.

Steven & Emma on June 26, 2012

A lot of simplistic and often awkward sentence structures along with points of view that are impossible to achieve.

Lady Catharina's Comeuppance on June 29, 2012

Oh the ecstasy of revenge. And remember kiddies, electricity is our friend.

Are We Losing Our Independence? on June 30, 2012

There is some truth in this somewhat overly simplistic article.

Empty Compartment on July 02, 2012

Ah, those Brits and their sense of humor, or is that humour? You know how fond they are of an extra u. Imagine him posting this as ‘erotic.’ Well, it did have a smidgen, toward the end. Very low key and staid, I did say he is Brit.

My First Spanking on July 05, 2012

Poorly written. Lousy sentence structure. Not much of a story here at all.

The Old Man And The Sea Monster on July 08, 2012

I'll have to think about this one for a while.

The Magic Garden on July 08, 2012

I was hoping for a little, no, a lot, more detailed description of the queen. I’m sure she is beautiful.

Yesterday, I died (The Devil's Forge) on July 10, 2012

Read this, then go to 'Copper Soldiers.' Together they equal five stars.

When Writers Attack on July 11, 2012

First amusing, then confusing. Was this supposed to be one story? The amusing part was funny. The other wasn’t particularly my style.

Micah, The Fierce Takes On Emma, The Brave on July 11, 2012

A decidedly different formatting, but I like it. A number of typos that could have been weeded out with another read through, but I know how hard it is to find them all. Looking forward to more of your stories.

Baby Grace on July 12, 2012

I can only agree with the previous reviewer but I do wonder if the author meant vulnerable instead of venerable. There were other miscues but I won’t bother looking back for them.

An Indian Slave Capture and Breaking on July 12, 2012

Awful, just awful!

Lisa Gets Photographed on July 24, 2012

Okay, except for the English vernacular.

The Umbrella's Shade and Other Award-winning Stories from the Stringybark Short Story Award on July 25, 2012

I’ve only read three so far, but to paraphrase the old movie, ‘short stories are like a box of chocolates…’ you know the rest. They should be savored, not gulped down on Christmas morning. But in the three, I’ve gotten my money’s worth, which is not an aside, considering I downloaded it when it was free. Story one was touching, showing that life moves on. I sure would like to know what ‘wares’ were in the box George bought in story two, but maybe some things are better left to the readers’ imaginations. Story three is ‘Twilight Zone’ quality, very well written. I did have a little trouble with some of the Australian vernacular. I see they use ‘leant’ like the English do, and I’ve no idea what kind of dog a ‘healer’ is. ‘Gully Trap?’ Maybe I’ll come back after I’ve read more.

A Lover for Rachel on July 25, 2012

I normally pass on anything that has paranormal, fairy, wizard, or any other such tags but I tried this one and wasn’t disappointed, though a little confused at the end requiring a second reading of the last few paragraphs.

Taxi (Book 1) on July 28, 2012

Nice story but seems a bit illogical.

Sex Stalker on July 30, 2012

I download stories and books faster than I can read them and often get so far behind that I lose track. I’ve had this story tucked away in my e-folder for nearly two years and just now stumbled across it to read. Good story, but I wonder if the author considered a follow up. It screams for closure.

The Gladiator on Aug. 01, 2012

A sexy little short story that could have been much shorter had all the annoying repetition been removed. And I do wonder at the tag, ‘romance’ considering the encounter was nothing more than a stud service.

The Gladiator on Aug. 03, 2012
(no rating)
Ah. I see 'romance' has been removed. Very good.

Maid to Order - Part 1 on Aug. 04, 2012

Okay, so the title was over the top.

Taken on Aug. 05, 2012

An immensely readable and enjoyable love story, which takes the reader into a relationship that, is growing even as it splinters into a bitter sweet ending. Excellent writing.

You Made Her Meow? on Aug. 06, 2012

Doesn't he know that a gentleman doesn't kiss and tell, or all that other stuff?

Delicious on Aug. 10, 2012

All the bunp and grind a threesome can make.

Expanded Pleasures, A Submissive Friend Adds To Our Swinging Pleasure on Aug. 30, 2012

Let me see, did Matt cover everything? Yes, I think he described ever possible combination short of bringing in the animals.

Lost in Him on Aug. 31, 2012

Flatly written—makes for a dull read. Serious need of editing and rewriting. Ryanin needs to learn the difference among, quite, quit, and quiet.

Snowed In, With His Girlfriend and Her Stepdaughter on Sep. 03, 2012

This was a well written tale of an extreme no holes barred (pun intended) fuck fest that would over work any normal group of sex deviants. How any of them could walk at the end of that weekend is beyond imagination.

My Ex-Girlfriend's Daughter (And Her Friends) on Sep. 03, 2012

What an incredibly hot story. Any man’s wet dream, a seemingly endless parade of hot eighteen year old bodies begging to be taught how to enjoy sex. Then a little extra bonus thrown in.

Caught In His Web on Sep. 12, 2012

I don't know what to think about this. Maybe today I'll get an e-mail that will tell me what to think.

The Apartment Complex- Linda and Lori on Sep. 12, 2012

That guy John sure is one lucky fella.

How To Cope With A Disability on Sep. 28, 2012

Gerty, you are a very brave person to put yourself out there like you do. Keep trying. I’m pulling for you. Best of everything. Ernie

Melody's Passion on Sep. 28, 2012
(no rating)
Some time back I tried to read this story only to give up and left a poor review. I have since discovered that the author has a disability. I removed the poor review and made the effort to finish reading the story. It is still a struggle and I suggest that the author learn to use some punctuation especially quotation marks as they will make it easier on the reader. I wish the author the best of luck. Ernie

In the Kitchen on Oct. 06, 2012

It’s very short so don’t expect much, that way you won’t be disappointed because there’s little here.

The Red Bra on Oct. 18, 2012

What a delightfully quirky little tale. But I have to ask, did it fit?

The Anniversary on Oct. 26, 2012

Oh yes, that day. Let's hope she can move on. Life is for the living.

Josh Takes a Plunge on Oct. 27, 2012

Good old Josh. Stoic to the end.

James, Ellen & David on Oct. 28, 2012

Well orchestrated. It takes practice to manage so well.

Mondays with Langford on Oct. 29, 2012

If I give this a good rating, will I be damned?

Upstairs Hot in the Attic on Oct. 30, 2012

I can’t help but wonder if that hole was big enough to…well…

The Drowning of Scott McGee on Nov. 02, 2012

Oh damn, the irony.

Smashwords Writing Duel on Nov. 02, 2012

As I began reading this story, I started to think of the irony of a simple grammatical error early on, (there for their). But then I saw it throughout and I wondered if perhaps the author was pulling our collective leg. (Which one, I won’t speculate about.) Could it be the British way of spelling? Either way, I did love his story, but fear looking in the mirror and seeing myself.

Arousing Amelia on Nov. 03, 2012

The more I read, the sillier this story became. And the twist, well it was rather stupid.

Arousing Amelia on Nov. 03, 2012
(no rating)
Deliza, an unexpected twist, and it was, I missed it by a mile, is still stupid.

The Sissy Sort on Nov. 04, 2012

Okay men. I hope you paid attention to this story. You know we made a serious mistake letting women vote. So go into the voting booth and mark the box: No to women’s suffrage.

For the King ~ Medieval Erotica on Nov. 05, 2012

Ah those crazy royals. And what a price those pay who serve them.

Shower Time on Nov. 05, 2012

They're going to be all wrinkled and pruned, but worth it.

Kendra Part 1: The Business Trip on Nov. 06, 2012

A very tantalizing adult fantasy but it should have come with a disclaimer: Kiddies, do not try this at home.

Forbidden Sex At The Moon Cult!!! on Nov. 07, 2012

Not much of a story here. And on a technical note, on the moon the Earth doesn't rise. It has the same side toward Earth all the time.

Sensitive ~ Paranormal Erotica on Nov. 07, 2012

What was there was okay, but it had a very abrupt and unsatisfactory ending.

The Massage - An Erotic Massage and Sex Erotica Story on Nov. 08, 2012

An all too typical story of a massage going too far.

Personal Shoppers - A Lesbian Orgy on Nov. 10, 2012

How nice that they could all work together so fluidly.

Liz After Work on Nov. 14, 2012

Think Byron will be back for more?

Ultra XXX: Ass Freak VS Chubby Girl on Nov. 14, 2012

I guess I won't live long enough to see this brave new world.

Option Three - With a Stranger on Nov. 21, 2012

What a hilarious tale, no, make that tail. Or better yet, tails considering they, tails, were all over the place.

Kendra 3.6: Greg & Alan on Nov. 22, 2012

I miss Kendra.

Blood Demons of Titan on Nov. 23, 2012

The description says this is number one. I think that is enough.

Always Be There on Nov. 24, 2012

It’s not very often I read something that brings tears to my eyes, but I’m not ashamed to admit that this story did. It is so heartrending and sad I doubt anyone could finish reading it and not brush back a tear. Sure, it is riddled with poor grammar and syntax that make it obvious English isn’t the author’s primary language, but that doesn’t matter. Only the loving story does.

Hot For Ma on Nov. 24, 2012

Okay, now he gets what he’s wanted for so long.

Sister Mary's Cherry on Nov. 29, 2012

Yeah, it's an old joke, but such a nice one.

Stroke It 2: The Stepsister (Masturbation Instructions) on Dec. 04, 2012

What a nice companion piece to the other masturbation story. Like bookends with all the gooey stuff in between.

As Pleases My General – a raunchy kitchen table fable on Dec. 07, 2012

Naoko has a writing style that takes some patience to accept. Patience that this reader almost failed to endure. Almost half way through I was about to quit. What a lovely, heartfelt story I would have missed. Even now I’m rereading it to find the parts that I so hurriedly overlooked and failed to understand until the final twist. And what a twist! I dare not say more for fear of letting the goose out of the bag. I encourage the next reader to hang on to the end.

As Pleases My General – a raunchy kitchen table fable on Dec. 07, 2012
(no rating)
Having reread the story, I am ashamed to say this dullard missed so many of the obvious clues, hanging out in plain sight much like Poe’s ‘The Purloined Letter,’ before reaching the twist, worthy of O’Henry. I challenge the next readers to pay close attention to sentences and partial sentences that seem to make no sense. They will.

Beach Fun on Dec. 08, 2012

It’s hard to imagine sex that hot ever cooling, but it always does.

Paying the Rent on Dec. 13, 2012

Ah yes. That old trick.

A New Beginning on Dec. 17, 2012

There are several inconsistent threads that are woven through this tale. In the first story ‘Princess of Power’ we are told that “Other than being raped by a Runaway, she (Simone) has never been intimate with anyone.” But now we are told she had a loving husband and was pregnant with his child when she entered the valley. Also, I wonder who could nurse the newborn Kayla during the time Monet was traipsing around the Galapagos Islands. And speaking of the islands, how could one island be so much different than the one containing the valley? I am glad this tale has come to an end. The writing is too stilted to wade through any more.

Horizon on Dec. 19, 2012

Not much of a story here.

Command Performance on Dec. 20, 2012

Okay, what’s my safe word? I’m ready to throw in the towel. Half way through and this book is getting too disgusting to finish.

'Avocado' An Erotic Adventure of Spirit and Sensuality on Dec. 29, 2012

Strange this. Well several strange things really. The story? Yes, but I’ll get to that in a second. The first strange thing is, I downloaded the book over a year and a half ago and promptly forgot about it, along with scores of other stories and books that I intend to read and forget about. Strange that Smashwords claims that I bought it and now own it, allowing me to post this review. I don’t remember buying it, but I guess I did. Strange that I downloaded it again last month on Kindle because it is no longer available in PDF which was my original download. Strange that the book has been on Smashwords for two years now and no one has reviewed it. I say the story is strange because I had trouble reading it with all the ‘foreign words’ that I didn’t know. Likewise I had a problem with Stuart’s finances, broke or nearly broke one minute, yet always with a handy fistful of cash when he needed to fund Uma’s welfare or buy a plane ticket. I find it strange that more editing didn’t go into this—tense swaps, past, then present, rattle me. Also Mike becomes Mark. I got a bit perturbed by some of the plot twists near the end with some things left unanswered, but I can’t say more now. But overall, an interesting read. Learned a little about dreadlocks.

Par For The Course on Dec. 30, 2012

I’ve got to stop trying to read stories written by British authors. Who was the wit that said something to the effect that, “America and England are two countries divided by a common language.” I give it a few points for the spots I found humorous.

Health, The Bible & You : Part 5 - Jesus Recommends Carrot Juice on Dec. 31, 2012

I think even an atheist could find a chuckle here with this piece. And I agree with Clarissa that it could stand some ‘fattening up.’

Sherry Takes a Ride on Jan. 04, 2013

A very weak story made much worse by bad spelling, punctuation, and grammar. Needs some serious editing.

The Chase on Jan. 06, 2013

Until the last sentence I wasn't sure I was liking this. That last sentence made the difference. I don't.

Nightmare in th Cockpit on Jan. 21, 2013

Good read except for one thing--one too many words in the tags line. Took all the suspense out of it.

Sunrise Suprise - A Quick Licks Short Story on Jan. 24, 2013

Too short.

Docile on Jan. 26, 2013

I downloaded this story a year ago today, the same day it came out. So why am I just now reviewing it? Well, to start with, I didn’t read it until last week and when I saw the date I decided to wait until the one year mark. After all the author had waited a year, so one more week shouldn’t matter. But the review you ask? Not a bad bit of S/F. Interesting if lightweight erotic story. I didn’t care all that much for the ending, but I don’t want to give anything away for the next reader.

Amber's Agreement, Submissive Summer Book 1 on Jan. 30, 2013

This is a very well written and sexy tease for the next in the series, yet quite confusing as to what is truly next. In one offering Greg is Amber’s step-dad, in another he is, or rather was, her mother’s boyfriend two years before. As much as I’d like to follow the story line, I hesitate to do so while not sure which is the proper line. I also wonder what a mirror edition is supposed to be. As much as I’d like to give this story a five star rating, I must deduct for the confusion.

Lusting While Dusting on Jan. 31, 2013

I'm sure I read this many months ago and was surprised to not see a review here from me. I could have sworn I'd posted one. I know for a short/short, story that is, not the cleaning implement, this deserves all the fives it's been given including mine.

She Only Wore a Shirt to the Funeral on Feb. 12, 2013

A very nicely written story, but as I was reading, I was looking for an explanation for the titled shirt. But I guess in the end we have to realize that she was on a fishing trip and the outfit was her bait.

Nature Hike on March 15, 2013

Vengeance is his, saith her lord.

Kissing Cousins on March 19, 2013

I’m totally confused—not by the story but by the previous review. I suspect it was written for a different story as it seems unrelated to this one. As to this one, it’s okay but not great.

Only a Kiss on March 25, 2013

A romantic little interlude, and a primer of things to come, oops, cum.

Dana: a slut is born on April 17, 2013

Even as short as this story is, I couldn’t get past the first few paragraphs. Perhaps the writer would be well advised to write in his native language for he does very poorly in English.

Banging the New Girl on April 21, 2013

Just another day at the factory.

A Sexy Short Story: Glass on May 18, 2013
(no rating)
This story will not download.

Fun In Barcelona on May 20, 2013

Very well written. Hot as well--hot.

Sunday In The Park With Dawei (Short Story) on May 28, 2013

Nearly prefect work, but could have used a last read through to catch the few remaining grammatical errors.

Watching & Playing on June 05, 2013

The story is very hot, though somewhat disjointed. It is hard to imagine he could wait a week to perform his part of the action. Also, some of the errors were quite funny. At one point, “She let out of a soft groin…” I assume it should have been a groan. Overall, not bad.

Well, I Sure Love It on June 06, 2013

A hot tale of a single minded woman getting what she really wants, over and over and over, keeping all her friends and their men happy in the process. Such a fiend for fellatio.

3 Erotic Flashes on June 09, 2013

3 flashes that were erotic. What more can one say?

Courtship ~ Medieval Erotica on June 30, 2013

A well written and enticing story, though a little disappointing that it’s only a tease—well two teases.

The Bitch Slap on July 02, 2013

So poorly written I couldn’t get past the first page. Grammatical errors are far too numerous. Obviously, English is not this writer’s first language.

Lunch Break on July 13, 2013

Hated the point of view. Made for a very awkward read. Writer needs lessons in grammar and punctuation.

Intimate Strangers on July 22, 2013

Its many grammatical errors make for a jerky read.

Encounter with a Stranger on July 22, 2013

Too many sentences start with ‘he,’ ‘she,’ ‘him,’ etc. Also, each person’s dialog requires its own paragraph, as in paragraph six and elsewhere. Other errors as well—‘day’ should be ‘say?’ in paragraph five. You need to re-read carefully before submitting.

Old Friends on July 23, 2013

Not bad for such a short piece.

Groomed Cuckold on Aug. 16, 2013

Confusing.

Sheriff Gregg & The Painted Lady on Aug. 17, 2013

Well the story, like the sheriff, had a beginning and an end, but it seems strange that all the other stories, nine as I count, are sandwiched within this one story. Too bad to know the end before beginning any of the others.

Sheriff Gregg & The Butterfield Sequestrian Society on Aug. 17, 2013

Two down and eight to go.

Sheriff Gregg & The Oriental Visitor on Aug. 17, 2013

I must say I’m glad this is the end, for I was getting quite tired of the single-mindedness of the plot. I do like the way it was wrapped up in the end. Quite tidy I must say.

Succubus Bites: Tasmin on Aug. 17, 2013

Delightful story, intriguing even. Loved it.

Punishing a Cheating Wife on Aug. 17, 2013

What a mess!

The Preacher's Daughter on Aug. 20, 2013

Oh God! Oh Jesus! Oh Christ! Oh Jehovah! Oh Father in heaven, what a de-lightfully decadent story.

Dave's Blow Job on Aug. 21, 2013

Not at all what I expected. Totally off the wall.

A Sleeping Beauty on Aug. 21, 2013

Disney never tried this in his cartoons.

Rude Awakening on Aug. 21, 2013

Great what we have to look forward to in the future. I wonder how soon it might be.

In The Temple Of Erotia on Aug. 21, 2013

Off to a fair start.

Her First Time on Aug. 21, 2013

I was hoping for a better ending, but the story was good.

Compulsion on Aug. 22, 2013

A very well written, but extremely depressing story.

California Genie on Aug. 22, 2013

A lovely genie story. And so close to Barbara Eden’s birthday.

Once Upon Forever on Aug. 23, 2013

A well written story. I just wish I understood it.

Cate: A Care Giver Providing Real Care Part 1 on Aug. 24, 2013

A good story but a couple of problems: one—the tip of a penis is a glans not gland. Two—I found three different spellings of thong, one comically, ‘tongue.’

Whores on Aug. 26, 2013

How many times was that naughty word used? Yet each time it seemed to mean a little something different. What a great story! I'd give it ten stars if I could.

Double Play on Aug. 26, 2013

Sick.

Torture Me on Aug. 27, 2013

A bit perverse, maybe more than a bit, but it seems she got what she asked for. Her husband sure was a fast learner.

Ofiice Domination Dilemma: Chocolate Skin Delight on Aug. 29, 2013
(no rating)
I don’t know if I’ll bother reading this. Having a typo in the title makes one wonder about the author’s competence and concentration. I did read a few paragraphs and the style seems rather juvenile. Maybe I’ll check back later to see if the author has corrected things. There is another in the description, “Ofiice and sutlers”

Strictly Come Dancing on Sep. 01, 2013

Oh my word! What a hot story.

Daddy for a Day on Sep. 12, 2013

This is the first of John’s stories I’ve read in a while. I caught his earlier ones and enjoyed them, overlooking the typos and miscues back then. I’m happy to report that his writing is improving, though I still saw a few. This story is very hot and I assume there will be sequels to it. Keep up the good work John.

Ten Things Worse Than Rape on Sep. 15, 2013

Food for thought. Or is it thoughts of revenge?

Greta's Game on Sep. 24, 2013

I downloaded this story a few days ago and since then have tried at least five or six times to read it. I say ‘try’ because the farther into the ‘game’ the story gets, the more depraved the ‘game master’ becomes. Half way through now, I must give up and quit reading for the master promises that the plot will only get worse. I give it one star only because I can’t cut one in half.

The Erotic Exploits Of New Lesbian Desires Volume #1 - Discovering Desires in the Girl-Garden and Please Misses Officer (Erotica By Women For Women) on Sep. 25, 2013

An intriguing intro to lesbianism 101. But I don’t understand why she was fired for simply joining a rally against discrimination. Is that institution all that conservatively blue nosed?

Strangers On The Beach on Sep. 27, 2013

Sexy? Not really. A turn-on? Not so much. But it is what she asked for, so who am I to object?

The Righteous Government on Oct. 02, 2013

Shades of 1984.

Nursed - An Erotic Short Story on Oct. 02, 2013

Delightful story. But the end was a bit confusing.

....The Morning After - an erotic short story on Oct. 03, 2013

Good story, but to be honest, I can’t imagine sex being a cure for a hangover. But then it’s been years since I’ve had a hangover—or sex for that matter.

Bubble Trouble on Oct. 06, 2013

Disjointed ending. Really no ending at all.

Bubble Trouble on Oct. 06, 2013
(no rating)
Vanessa, had I read the description and its ‘spoon fed information’ I too would have known it was her boyfriend she was missing and not (pick one) dead/alive, husband/boyfriend/dom, imaginative non-existent lover, ghost, etc.) The sound of the helicopter could have brought tears to her eyes because he was killed in one. A story should be replete within itself and not need external description. And come on, a few showers? You sure it’s not the South African heat? LOL

Ecstasy of the Grape on Oct. 07, 2013

I normally enjoy welcoming a new writer to Smashwords and always hope to give a good review. But in this case all I can do is encourage the writer to take extra time to carefully re-read a manuscript before submitting. This story, though admittedly a fresh storyline, is so riddled with misspellings, typos, and incorrect and repetitive word usage that the best I can give it is two stars. I do hope the writer makes that effort in the future.

Submitting To The Mistresses on Oct. 11, 2013

Editor needed: apply inside.

The Operation on Oct. 13, 2013

Somehow I was expecting something more at the end.

The Faeries on Nov. 02, 2013

And I thought the faeries were cute little things like Peter Pan’s Tinkerbell.

The Dead Husbands Club on Nov. 02, 2013

I truly hate reading a story to have it end with a variation of ‘to be continued,’ but to wade through 108 pages to come upon one is intolerable—especially when there was no warning.

The Life & Loves of Melody Davis - Gina on Nov. 03, 2013

This story had such an incredible realism to it that I had to backtrack to check that it is listed as fiction. The love making is so tender, so touching, and yet so intense, it’s breathtaking, however not a word of it is pornographic. I can only repeat the word, incredible.

Carry On, Carrie Moon on Nov. 03, 2013

I’ve read this before and I’m surprised I didn’t give it a review. I could have sworn it was a long time ago, though I see it’s only been up since August. Whatever, it’s a very intriguing story, well worth four stars

My Story Of You on Nov. 03, 2013

Confusion here until I remembered the genre.

Tilly and Elmer Get Warmed Up on Nov. 07, 2013

A big ditto on the editor advice. Just having each character’s sentence in a separate paragraph would make reading much easier. Delightful story though.

After The First (a flash fiction story) on Nov. 08, 2013

If he needs to feed, then why does he let his food go to waste?

All for me on Nov. 09, 2013

So so.

Tricks-n-Treats on Nov. 11, 2013

Not bad. Certainly not the sinister ending I had feared. Oops, have I said too much?

Wash Me on Nov. 12, 2013

This story has been hiding away in my ebook folder for two and a half years waiting for me to stumble across it. And of all days to do that, I just brought a load of laundry up from the machines to my apartment. What a delightfully funny tale of hangover induced nightmarish proportions. I hope the author hasn’t been holding her breath waiting for me.

The Rescue on Nov. 15, 2013

It’s good to know that chivalry isn’t dead. But I can’t help wonder if he intends to mete out her punishment in front of all the others. That would be quite a show and it appears that the Lord would be all for it.

Tilly and Elmer Go to Las Vegas on Nov. 15, 2013

Well did they or didn't they...get the picture?

Meeting Strangers on a Train- Men's Erotic short story on Nov. 15, 2013

Nice story but could use some editing and well placed comas.

Online F%ck Match- Men's Erotica on Nov. 15, 2013

Nothing like a dinner and a show.

To Have and To Hold on Nov. 19, 2013

Yes the ending makes one wonder. Did she, or didn’t she?

North Country on Nov. 19, 2013

How hard will guilt drive a man?

Running on Nov. 19, 2013

A nice little 'who done it?'

Neighbors on Nov. 19, 2013

Double twist at the end of this one.

Living Doll on Nov. 19, 2013
(no rating)
read soon

Upstairs - Downstairs Part One on Nov. 20, 2013

This story proves what I so often have thought, that women make the better erotic writers, being much more attuned to the subject I assume. But before I leave, I must point out something comical. It seems that Millie had two left breasts.

Middlemonth on Nov. 20, 2013

A more natural—and necessary—ménage as you’ll ever find.

Nymphomaniac on Nov. 20, 2013

The constant switching of first person points of view was a little distracting, forcing me to often re-read the first sentences of paragraphs to keep things straight.

Christmas Came Early on Nov. 21, 2013

Like Santa, the delivery man comes but once a year, at least for her.

Passion Chronicles on Nov. 22, 2013

I would like to welcome you to Smashwords. I just wish I could do so with a better review than what I’m about to give. Your description promises far more than the stories deliver, I’m sorry to say. First, second person POV is always awkward, in my opinion, and made more so in the final chapter. You describe things that happen at both the beginning and end that as a first person author you can’t possibly know. While your POV is your choice, I do encourage you to continue writing.

Rachel's Penance on Nov. 22, 2013

Great! Totally great. And I’m finally learning that trainers are shoes, not small bras for pre-pubescent girls. But I’d sure love to read a follow up to this story.

Adventurous Couples on Nov. 23, 2013

A string of four loosely strung tales, so loose that I thought the third one was a different jewel entirely. All delicious and leaving this reader wanting more, much more.

Astara Disrobed on Nov. 24, 2013

I was confused at first, not comprehending what I was reading, but then comprehension slowly sank in, then I was unable to walk away until I finished. Such a delightful read with such a touching ending.

Christina Wants a Threesome on Nov. 24, 2013

What Christina wanted, Christina got.

Miriam and Lionel on Nov. 24, 2013

The old goat got his nannies.

Adventurous Women on Nov. 24, 2013

Good, very good.

Mrs. Van Houten, CEO - The Femme Dominion Series #1 on Nov. 25, 2013

Now that’s one job interview any man with the right qualifications would love to receive.

Nuns Learning New Tricks #1 - A New Policy on Nov. 26, 2013

Oh, for heaven's sakes.

Virgin on Nov. 26, 2013

Hot and ready.

Harvest Boons on Nov. 29, 2013

Not bad, certainly different.

Christina's Skool Daze BJ on Dec. 03, 2013

Wow! For a gal that doesn’t swallow, she sure made up for it. Now I want the rest of the story.

After Gym Quickie on Dec. 03, 2013

Good one.

12 Days; the Sixth Day of Christmas on Dec. 03, 2013

It's hard to imagine husbands and wives acting that way, but we'll imagine it anyway.

The Broken Needles on Dec. 03, 2013

Cute.

The Lusty City Chronicles on Dec. 07, 2013

Makes me glad I don't live in his city.

The Tutor (MILF 2, Book 1) on Dec. 07, 2013

There is nothing like a tutor with all the skills needed for the job.

The Maid and Master Henry on Dec. 17, 2013

My first review with the new style. Not used to it. The story was interesting but I thought there was a lead in story to it, though I can't find it now.

Deer Dancing (Tales of the Reluctant Shaman) Real Story Safe Sex Project on Dec. 20, 2013

I’m not sure what to make of this story or even if it is a story. Definitely pushing a safe sex theme so that is good.

Trevor's Odd Assay on Dec. 21, 2013

If Trevor's a bit confused, he's not the only one.

Replacement in Heaven on Dec. 25, 2013

Interesting, if a little off the cuff.

Oblique Vengeance on Dec. 25, 2013

Such a powerful story, well written with strength and candor.

The Life and Loves of Melody Davis - Lisa on Dec. 29, 2013

Melody Davis, girl Casanova, but with a heart of cream cheese. The girl who makes us root for more states to pass gay marriage laws, then maybe she can settle down to the one love of her life, whoever she is.

Sissy Dreams: A Gift for You on Jan. 01, 2014

Strange.

Our Dirty Secret on Jan. 01, 2014

All the horny girls should get to lucky.

You Don't Know Half Of It on Jan. 06, 2014

Ah, if only all couples aged to well--and in sync too.

Workers Playtime. on Jan. 06, 2014

I would have expected a higher percentage than that.

Helen (Oral, Humiliation, Cum Play) on Jan. 07, 2014

A very well written story, but in the end, can we tell who is really in charge?

Stitching Inseams: Nyra and Astrid on Jan. 08, 2014

I loved it--truly loved it.

The Last Reunion on Jan. 08, 2014

Very confusing with the gender twisting. Still, not a bad read.

Still the One on Jan. 09, 2014

Nice read. It begs for a sequel.

The Ex! on Jan. 12, 2014

Very poor story, badly in need of editing.

My Only Concern Was To Please Him: Vol. 1 on Jan. 12, 2014

Needs editing.

Business Proposal on Jan. 21, 2014

A very hot story, but the follow up story sounds flaunt with intrigue.

Last Night on Jan. 24, 2014

What's good for the goose, is good...

Strangers on Jan. 24, 2014

Confusing at spots and badly in need of editing.

Coven Wars Part 1: Opening Movement on Jan. 27, 2014

It might be better to wait for the whole thing so you won't be left with a cliff hanger. It does show promise.

Him and Her on Jan. 28, 2014

I should complain that it ended in a cliffhanger. Well, not really ended. But it was enticing, so I won’t…complain that is. The author did leave an out. A feed to the rest of the story as Paul Harvey used to say.

The Barbie Lez Fantasies - Week 5: The Gynecologist (Lesbianism) on Jan. 29, 2014

Hard to tell what's real and what is not.

Coda on Feb. 18, 2014

Perhaps if the author gave us a hint of what her transgression was, we might understand what we were reading.

Cincinnati Charm on Feb. 28, 2014

A very well written and sensuous story. I certainly hope there will be more to follow.

The Shaman's Daughter: An Asian Erotica Short Story on March 05, 2014

It's a good thing the author gave us pictures of the fruit or we'd never have gotten it.

Bought (Public, Humiliation, Virgin) on May 25, 2014

An interesting and sexy interlude.

Porcelain (Oral, Anal, Humiliation, Squirting) on May 25, 2014

Does the punishment fit the crime?

That's What Friends Are For - A True Story of Erotic Friendship on May 26, 2014

A very hot read of a very hot, illicit sexual encounter.

A Naked Trip to the Supermarket on May 28, 2014

A fair start--but where is the rest of the story.

Charles Wallace's Favorite Toy on June 02, 2014

A well-crafted bit of fiction—I checked to be sure—otherwise I’d suggest the cat be banned from the bedroom.

Bathtub Jim on Aug. 17, 2014

Is this complete? It doesn't seem like it.

Matrix Reversal on Aug. 29, 2014
(no rating)
There is nothing scientific about numerology. That aside, I wish to enlighten you on the use of the review function of Smashwords’ postings. They are for reviews of the stories and postings, not an avenue for spiteful attacks. I read the postings you had and my reviews are based on my opinions. You obviously have not read the stories I posted and your comments do not cast any reviews on them. Please use Smashwords properly.

Sharing on Sep. 12, 2014

A hot put predictable threesome.

eRATicated on Oct. 07, 2014

A very chilling discourse on what might be. Well written. P.S. thanks for the review of my short and silly story. And a second P.S. Welcome to Smashwords. I haven’t added much in the last couple of years having switched to full length novels. Good to see someone is filling in the short works.

The Ex Dominatrix and Me on Oct. 13, 2014

I do love a good lusty, lesbian story, and this one certainly rang my chimes. As a straight man, a story like this makes me long to delve into the tasty area of a good woman.

Orgasm Incorporated: Book One on Oct. 25, 2014

A very interesting sample of what hints of a very sexy book. I can’t help wonder at the fertile mind of Karl that can fill a large volume. Can’t wait to see.

The Barbie Lez Fantasies - Week 45: Halloween Sex (Lesbianism) on Nov. 05, 2014

December 31st is Halloween? In what country? Otherwise, this is an all too typical offering.

The Barbie Lez Fantasies - Week 45: Halloween Sex (Lesbianism) on Nov. 05, 2014
(no rating)
Ah, you changed the date. I was afraid no one would read it.

The Christmas Kiss on Nov. 14, 2014
(no rating)
“They’re all disasters,” not “There all disasters,” unless the British use a different set of grammatical rules.

The Christmas Kiss on Nov. 19, 2014
(no rating)
Ah, good to see the correction. Now maybe I'll read it.

The Christmas Kiss on Nov. 19, 2014

Okay, after dissing this story’s intro for its grammatical error, I dove in with an open mind. What a disaster! I don’t believe I saw a single comma anywhere, and they are sorely missing. It was almost impossible to read.

The Silk Assassin: Dossier One on Dec. 04, 2014

Good story and welcome to Smashwords.

Dry Doctor to Wet Nurse on Feb. 25, 2015

Like this story, Tina's treatment should be free.

Life Worth Living on April 13, 2015

A very lovely and loving story as two women find themselves and their salvation in each other. Fate had them meet at what could have been a disaster for each but turned into a new life for them both. A few stray typos that don't distract from the story.

Comfort From a Friend on April 20, 2015

With a friend like Rosalinda, why would she need a lover?

Name Deleted on May 11, 2015

Nineteen eighty four comes to mind.

Alone in the Office on May 16, 2015

John, stick to your regular stuff. This is annoying to read.

Asphyxiating The Wife on May 23, 2015

Sophie, you're a dangerous woman.

Jelly Ass Eruption on June 08, 2015

One never knows what to expect from Sophie. This should come with the disclaimer: do not try this at home.

Fallen Angel: Book One on June 14, 2015

Not such an angelic bunch, are they? Well written.

Fallen Angel: Book One on June 14, 2015
(no rating)
I see this is your first day here. Welcome.

Inside on June 18, 2015

A good story made difficult to read due to poor punctuation and sentence structure. The author needs to learn how to use both.

Man Smart (Woman Smarter) on June 29, 2015

Yes, silly, but oh so funny.

Suffocated With a Bag on June 30, 2015

A woman scorned is a terrible thing, or so the description says. Make that four or five—I’ve lost count—and you get the idea how much trouble he is in. Being the glutton for punishment he is, he comes back for more.

Ordeal on June 30, 2015

I don’t know if this story should get one star for how depraved and disgusting it is, or five stars for how depraved and disgusting it is. I’ll give it one star so no one will think I enjoyed how depraved and disgusting it is.

Kona (a microshort story) on Aug. 05, 2015

Maybe I’m just obtuse, but I didn’t get anything out of this story as the other reviewers did. I will give it two stars for the lack of misspellings.

My Favorite . . . Martian? on Aug. 09, 2015

The minutiae of 1958 are so well reproduced in such clear detail that I can easily assume the author was there then, making her older than me by about four years. In that case we’re both very old. Of course any writer worth his/her keystrokes could easily research the net for such info—I am currently writing a story about the middle-ages and I certainly wasn’t there then. Again, thank the muses for the net. Loved the story.

Her Birthday Breeding on Sep. 26, 2015

This might have made sense if the husband was said to be sterile. Otherwise he was just paying to be cuckolded.

Lust Demon 1 (Her Sexy Savior) on Oct. 07, 2015

Beware, a cliff hanger to the extreme.

Favorite Sweater on Oct. 09, 2015

This shows that there is more than one way to please a pussy.

The Wedding Trip on Oct. 16, 2015

Disgusting

Salem Snack Witch Trials on Oct. 20, 2015

This story will make you swear off Halloween sweets—but never masturbation.

The Performer on Nov. 01, 2015

Not bad, what there was to it. Could have used a lot more.

Mercy Priestess Mercy on Dec. 03, 2015

Kafka did it first. And perhaps better.

The Blue Hole on Jan. 16, 2016

Damn cliffhanger—this story has no ending.

Apron Strings and Wedding Rings on Jan. 24, 2016

I love a good juicy lesbian story and this one certainly had plenty of juice to spare.

Making an American Harem-Episode #6: Letting an African Princess on March 28, 2016

I fear that we’re going to be strung along on a very protracted story arc before we get to the end of Mister Gale’s quest with his twentieth slave. After all, here we are in chapter six and he doesn’t even add one to the two already seduced into his harem, not that he doesn’t use his incredible talents, along with his unbelievable stamina, while bedding four women on the side of his supposed goal of twenty slaves. Next we’re teased with another chapter that may or may not move his quest along in chapter seven. I do wish the author would take a little time to proof read and eliminate all the typos which I’m counting at least one per page. I’m not sure I can last to the end as I’m guessing this may amount to forty or more chapters.

The Exotic on April 03, 2016

I guess I’m supposed to overlook the ‘British English’ in this story but it would be much easier to read if separate paragraphs were made for each character’s speech. Also, I think the author meant sorority rather than seniority at one point as well as, hon for hone. Not that my writing is perfect.

English Major on April 08, 2016

As the old saying goes: ‘No good deed goes unpunished.’

Bethany's Troll on April 20, 2016

I don’t think Onan was really saint material but I see he got his halo somewhere to be the namesake of this school. Appropriate though, considering the attitude of the school’s Human Resources and Welfare Committee.

The Bishop on May 19, 2016

It is unfortunate that the writer doesn’t have a better grasp of English. There are so many errors throughout this posting that it is difficult to read.

The Bishop on June 01, 2016
(no rating)
George, I am not bitter, just disappointed when a writer doesn’t take the time to proofread his or her work before posting. Self-editing is very difficult, as I well know, but there seems to have been no attempt made here. If you and David are willing to accept such sloppy writing, then that’s your choice. You will find a lot of it here in Smashwords.

The Lake on June 15, 2016

I see you’re new here so welcome. A nice bit of flash erotica. You may want to watch your tense. The story starts in past tense but switches to present midway through. Best of luck with new stories.

One For Good Luck on June 30, 2016

Such a silly, superstitious girl. It seemed she was on a one track line, one leading directly into her tunnel. I believe she was headed there all along.

Office Mating on July 02, 2016

This poor protagonist can’t seem to stay out of trouble, or pussy. I could almost feel sorry for him, if I didn’t want to be in his shoes.

The Master's Maid - Bought by the Billionaire Book 1 on July 27, 2016

I see you’re new here. Welcome.

Why I Will Not Vote For Hillary Clinton on Aug. 06, 2016

You must be very naïve to be shocked at the fact that a politician would lie. After all, politicians, military recruiters, televangelists, and used car salesmen are at the top of the list of professional liars. Trump was out here in Hawaii some weeks ago when he claimed to own a building in Waikiki that happened to have his name on it. He claimed to be responsible for hiring a large number of people there. The news reporter checked and found that he did not own the building, was not a manager and had no connection with it what so ever. Trump is a loose cannon who sticks his foot in his mouth every time he opens it. If he is such a great businessman, why has so many of his ventures gone bankrupt? I will not be voting for Clinton or Trump as I haven’t voted for anyone in over forty years. None of them is worth my time.

A Reenactment To Justice on Sep. 11, 2016

Strange case of justice delayed.

With Satomi on Oct. 08, 2016

It is hard to read a small chapter plunked out of a much larger body of work and get any idea of what is happening. The larger work seems to be titled ‘Snapchat’ though some chapters have other names. It’s like picking a few pieces of a jigsaw puzzle from a box and imaging what the total picture looks like. I’ve tried to find some of the earlier sections but, again, trying to piece together the whole is quite confusing. The quality of the writing is quite good but the task of finding the entire work is too daunting.

No...I Shouldn't (An Erotic Short Story) on Dec. 26, 2016

Very well written story, with no noticeable errors. The sex scenes were very enticing. Looking forward to reading more of this author’s work.

Time Looped on Jan. 11, 2017

The concept of time travel boggles the mind, at least it does mine. The writers of ‘the big bang theory’ tackled the semantics of it a few seasons ago, quite well I must say. But if it is considered, one should realize that nothing could be changed in the past because if one could go back to make changes, then one did, therefore nothing was changed.

The Hike on Feb. 10, 2017

Not a bad story, but I have to wonder why I so often see ‘off’ spelled as ‘of’ in stories written by European writers.

Taxi - Trials (Book 2) on Feb. 18, 2017

Well, crap! Not only does this book (story) end in the ultimate insult to the reader (to be continued), but is strung along, Ad Infinitum, to a minimum of eleven stories. The writing and story line is great, but there is a limit. I’d love to give it five stars but can’t.

A Taste of the Zannaverse: The Episode 1s!!! (Revised and Reposted) on Feb. 19, 2017

This is certainly a hot, juicy set of stories, but the many typos slow things down so badly that I’d need an Enigma machine to decode some of them.

Mediaeval Humiliation For Tracey on March 13, 2017

Much more disgusting than titillating.

Blackmailed Virgin on April 30, 2017

What a dirty trick. I can't say more.

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